Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear but could be more natural and fluent. Try to avoid redundancy and expand your response slightly with linking words to make it more coherent.

例: I don't really like eating chocolate because I find it too sweet. Since I generally avoid sweet snacks, chocolate isn't my favourite treat.

提案: Your answer has some grammatical errors and unclear phrases. Try to use correct tense and clearer expressions, and add linking words to improve coherence.

例: When I was a child, I used to eat chocolate once a day. However, now I rarely eat it because it causes tooth pain if I have too much.

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be more natural and concise. Use past tense consistently and avoid repeating words unnecessarily.

例: Yes, I often ate white chocolate as a child because I enjoyed its sweet taste.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains errors. Try to organise your ideas clearly using linking words and correct vocabulary. Avoid unclear words like 'Charlie'.

例: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because there are many varieties, such as dark, white, and nut chocolates. Also, its rich flavour appeals to many people.

提案: Your answer is understandable but informal and repetitive. Use complete sentences and avoid repeating words excessively. Add linking words for coherence.

例: My favourite flavour is white chocolate because it is sweet and delicious. I especially enjoyed eating it during my school breaks.

提案: Your answer has many errors and unclear words. Use correct vocabulary and grammar, and organise your ideas logically with linking words.

例: Yes, I think chocolate makes a good gift because many people enjoy eating it. Nowadays, almost everyone likes chocolate, so it is a popular choice for presents.

× I don't like eating chocolate actually because it is too sweet for taste.

✓ I don't like eating chocolate actually because it is too sweet for my taste.

The phrase 'for taste' is incorrect; it should be 'for my taste' to indicate personal preference. This is an issue with the correct use of prepositions and possessive pronouns, but since 'for' is a preposition, it falls under incorrect use of prepositions (ID 11). However, the main issue here is the missing possessive pronoun 'my' which is necessary to specify whose taste is referred to.

× I have eaten chocolate for once a day in childhood.

✓ I ate chocolate once a day in childhood.

The present perfect tense 'have eaten' is incorrectly used with a specific past time 'in childhood'. The simple past tense 'ate' should be used instead to refer to a completed action in the past.

× Now I don't eat childhood at all because when I eat chocolate too much my teeth painful.

✓ Now I don't eat chocolate at all because when I eat too much chocolate, my teeth hurt.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'eat childhood' instead of 'eat chocolate'. Also, 'my teeth painful' is incorrect; it should be 'my teeth hurt'. This involves incorrect use of pronouns and verb forms.

× Yes, I really like to eat the white chocolate when I was a child because I really enjoyed the sweet taste.

✓ Yes, I really liked to eat white chocolate when I was a child because I really enjoyed the sweet taste.

The verb 'like' should be in the past tense 'liked' to match the past time frame 'when I was a child'.

× First, there are many different types of chocolate. Dark white chocolate, nuts.

✓ First, there are many different types of chocolate, such as dark, white chocolate, and nuts.

The second sentence is a fragment and lacks a verb. It should be combined with the first sentence to form a complete sentence listing examples.

× The second reason I think is Charlie is rich and tastes favorite appeals people.

✓ The second reason I think is chocolate is rich and its favourite taste appeals to people.

The sentence has multiple errors: 'Charlie' should be 'chocolate'; 'tastes favorite' is incorrect, it should be 'its favourite taste'; 'appeals people' should be 'appeals to people'. This involves incorrect use of adjectives, nouns, and prepositions.

× Really like white chocolate because it's so sweet and it tastes very very very good.

✓ I really like white chocolate because it's so sweet and it tastes very, very, very good.

The original sentence lacks a subject 'I' at the beginning, which is necessary for correct sentence structure.

× I love it so much during my school break.

✓ I loved it so much during my school break.

The phrase 'during my school break' refers to a past time, so the verb should be in the past tense 'loved'.

× Yes, nowaday so many people like to eating chalk, like to eat chocolate.

✓ Yes, nowadays so many people like eating chocolate, like to eat chocolate.

'Nowaday' is misspelled; it should be 'nowadays'. Also, 'like to eating' is incorrect; it should be 'like eating'. 'Chalk' is a typo for 'chocolate'.

× No one like no one doesn't like Charlie anymore I think.

✓ No one likes chocolate anymore, I think.

The sentence is confusing and contains double negatives. 'No one like no one doesn't like Charlie' should be corrected to 'No one likes chocolate anymore'. Also, 'Charlie' should be 'chocolate'.

× So it's good to use Charlie as gifts to others.

✓ So it's good to use chocolate as gifts for others.

'Charlie' should be 'chocolate'. Also, the preposition 'to' is incorrect here; it should be 'for' when referring to giving gifts to others.