Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to use correct verb forms and avoid repetition. Also, make your answer more coherent by linking ideas clearly and using complete sentences.

例: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it elevates my mood. Whenever I feel stressed, I tend to eat chocolate, which helps me feel more energetic and relaxed.

提案: Focus on answering the question directly and avoid unclear phrases. Use linking words to connect your ideas and be specific about frequency.

例: I usually eat chocolate when I feel stressed, such as during work or family problems. Eating chocolate helps improve my mood, so I tend to have it a few times a week.

提案: Good content but try to use more varied vocabulary and link your sentences smoothly for better flow.

例: Yes, I often ate chocolate as a child, especially when my aunt sent packages from abroad. I would sometimes hide some pieces and eat them secretly.

提案: Avoid vague phrases like 'certain reason' and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to explain your ideas clearly and provide specific reasons.

例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it makes people feel happy and improves their mood. For example, when I eat chocolate, it helps me feel better during difficult times.

提案: Good use of specific details and linking. To improve, correct minor grammar mistakes and make sentences more natural.

例: My favourite flavour is dark chocolate, especially when I am studying. Research shows that dark chocolate can improve memory and help us absorb new information better.

提案: Try to use more precise language and avoid vague expressions like 'feel different'. Also, link your ideas clearly and keep sentences concise.

例: Absolutely, chocolate is a great gift for any occasion because it is delicious and loved by many. Giving chocolate can make people feel happy and more energetic.

× Yes, I like to eat chocolate because it elevate my mood and if I am stressed I used to eat a lot of chocolate and it makes my mood.

✓ Yes, I like to eat chocolate because it elevates my mood and if I am stressed I used to eat a lot of chocolate and it makes my mood.

The verb 'elevate' should be in the third person singular form 'elevates' to agree with the singular subject 'it' (referring to chocolate). This is a subject-verb agreement rule in English.

× and it makes my mood. Levitated energetic as well.

✓ and it makes my mood elevated and energetic as well.

The phrase 'Levitated energetic as well' is incorrect and incomplete. It should be connected properly with conjunctions and use correct adjective forms to express the intended meaning clearly.

× Usually if I am stressed at work or family matters, I used to eat sweets like chocolate and it makes my mood.

✓ Usually if I am stressed at work or with family matters, I used to eat sweets like chocolate and it makes my mood.

The preposition 'at' is incorrect when referring to 'family matters'. The correct preposition is 'with' to indicate involvement or concern with family matters.

× You pour it and probably I tend to forget.

✓ You pour it, and probably I tend to forget.

The sentence lacks proper punctuation to separate independent clauses. Adding a comma before 'and' improves clarity and sentence structure.

× Yes, that's what I remember. I used to eat chocolate every time my aunt has package from abroad.

✓ Yes, that's what I remember. I used to eat chocolate every time my aunt has a package from abroad.

The noun 'package' is singular and requires the indefinite article 'a' before it to be grammatically correct.

× I used to hide some of it and eat without their knowledge.

✓ I used to hide some of it and eat it without their knowledge.

The verb 'eat' requires an object here. Adding 'it' clarifies what is being eaten, improving sentence clarity and correctness.

× Of course, due to certain reason, the chocolate makes the people happy and it makes their moods elevated every time they consume chocolate, including me.

✓ Of course, due to certain reasons, chocolate makes people happy and elevates their moods every time they consume it, including me.

The phrase 'certain reason' should be plural 'certain reasons' to match the context. Also, 'the chocolate' and 'the people' are corrected to 'chocolate' and 'people' for general statements. The verb 'makes their moods elevated' is awkward; 'elevates their moods' is more natural.

× Every time I have problem when I control chocolate, it makes my feeling happy.

✓ Every time I have a problem controlling chocolate, it makes me feel happy.

The phrase 'have problem' needs the article 'a' to be correct. 'When I control chocolate' is awkward; 'controlling chocolate' is better. 'It makes my feeling happy' is incorrect; the correct form is 'it makes me feel happy'.

× I like dark chocolate more, specially if I am studying.

✓ I like dark chocolate more, especially if I am studying.

The word 'specially' is incorrect here; the correct adverb is 'especially' to indicate emphasis or particular preference.

× You know based on research that dark chocolate improves our memory and enhances absorption of new knowledge.

✓ You know, based on research, that dark chocolate improves our memory and enhances the absorption of new knowledge.

Commas are added for clarity. The phrase 'enhances absorption' requires the definite article 'the' before 'absorption' to specify the process.

× Absolutely, because chocolate is irresistible and for all season you can use chocolate as a gift for everyone, including yourself.

✓ Absolutely, because chocolate is irresistible and for all seasons you can use chocolate as a gift for everyone, including yourself.

The phrase 'for all season' should be plural 'for all seasons' to indicate all times or occasions.

× While consuming chocolate, you will feel different, you feel more energetic.

✓ While consuming chocolate, you will feel different; you will feel more energetic.

The original sentence is a comma splice, joining two independent clauses with a comma. Using a semicolon or separating into two sentences corrects the structure.