Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by correcting grammar and avoiding redundancy. For example, say "Many people around the world love chocolate because of its smooth texture and sweet taste. However, I prefer dark chocolate."

例: Yes, I like eating chocolate. Many people around the world love chocolate because of its smooth texture and sweet taste. However, I prefer dark chocolate because it is less sweet and healthier.

提案: Make your answer more coherent and complete. Use linking words and avoid incomplete sentences. For example, say "I often eat chocolate during special occasions, especially with my wife. I prefer dark chocolate because it tastes bitter but is healthier."

例: I often eat chocolate during special occasions, especially with my wife. I prefer dark chocolate because it tastes bitter but is healthier than milk chocolate.

提案: Improve clarity and grammar. Explain why it was useful and contrast with current habits. For example, say "I used to eat a lot of chocolate as a child, which gave me energy but contained much fat and sugar. Now, I choose healthier options."

例: I used to eat a lot of chocolate as a child, which gave me energy but contained much fat and sugar. Now, I choose healthier chocolates with less sugar.

提案: Make your answer clearer and more logical. Use linking words and avoid unclear phrases. For example, say "Chocolate is popular worldwide because of its smooth texture and delicious taste. Many people enjoy it regularly."

例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because of its smooth texture and delicious taste. Many people enjoy eating it regularly because it makes them feel happy.

提案: Clarify your answer and correct grammar. Use linking words to explain your preference. For example, say "My favourite flavour is orange chocolate because of its tangy taste. I enjoy eating it once a week."

例: My favourite flavour is orange chocolate because of its tangy taste. I enjoy eating it once a week as a special treat.

提案: Make your answer more concise and clear. Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. For example, say "Yes, chocolate is a great gift, especially for a spouse. It is pleasant and a good choice for many occasions."

例: Yes, chocolate is a great gift, especially for a spouse. It is pleasant and a good choice for many occasions.

× Many people around the world loves eating this type of food because of the smoothness it has and the taste the sugar it has.

✓ Many people around the world love eating this type of food because of the smoothness it has and the taste of the sugar it has.

The subject 'Many people' is plural, so the verb should be 'love' not 'loves'. Also, 'the taste the sugar it has' is incorrect; it should be 'the taste of the sugar it has' to correctly use the preposition 'of' to show possession.

× Many people around the world loves eating this type of food because of the smoothness it has and the taste the sugar it has.

✓ Many people around the world love eating this type of food because of the smoothness it has and the taste of the sugar it has.

The phrase 'the taste the sugar it has' lacks the preposition 'of' which is necessary to indicate that the taste belongs to the sugar. Correct preposition use improves clarity.

× I frequently eat chocolate in the special event, especially with my wife and also in any special event we have I prefer to have chocolate.

✓ I frequently eat chocolate at special events, especially with my wife, and I prefer to have chocolate at any special event we have.

The sentence is run-on and lacks proper conjunctions and prepositions. 'In the special event' should be 'at special events'. Also, the sentence needs commas and conjunctions to separate ideas clearly.

× The dark of this type of chocolate is bitter to have because of its healthiness and.

✓ The dark type of this chocolate is bitter to eat but healthy.

The original sentence is incomplete and awkward. 'The dark of this type of chocolate' is unclear; it should be 'The dark type of this chocolate'. Also, 'bitter to have because of its healthiness and' is incomplete and needs rephrasing for clarity.

× But when I become bigger I started to eat a little bit healthier chocolate.

✓ But when I became bigger, I started to eat a little bit healthier chocolate.

The verb 'become' should be in past tense 'became' to match the past tense context of the sentence.

× I think it is popular because of the smoothness it has and the test.

✓ I think it is popular because of the smoothness it has and the taste.

The word 'test' is a typo and should be 'taste'. Also, 'because of the smoothness it has and the taste' is correct preposition use.

× If you ask anyone around the world why they like it, because of this, the taste of it and you get a door to it if you eat it all the time, even the people they know.

✓ If you ask anyone around the world why they like it, they will say it is because of its taste. You become accustomed to it if you eat it all the time, even people who know it well.

The original sentence is confusing and lacks proper structure. It needs to be broken into clearer sentences with correct pronouns and verb forms.

× I like the chocolate with the orange flavor because of the test, that soaring test, it had a lot of complicated test, which I really like to have once a week and when.

✓ I like chocolate with orange flavor because of the taste, that sour taste. It has a lot of complex flavors, which I really like to have once a week.

'Test' is a typo for 'taste'. 'Soaring' should be 'sour'. 'Complicated test' should be 'complex flavors'. The sentence is also incomplete and needs to be finished properly.

× It is really pleasant to have it and you will be, you will be. It will be a good choice. So I I recommend it for everyone to use it as a gift.

✓ It is really pleasant to have, and it will be a good choice. So, I recommend it for everyone to use as a gift.

The sentence has repetition and incomplete phrases. Removing repeated words and restructuring improves clarity and flow.