Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时语法和表达不够准确，且有些重复。建议简化句子结构，避免重复表达，并注意语法正确性。

例: Yes, I love eating chocolate, especially chocolate cakes and chocolate milk. I enjoy their rich flavor because I have a sweet tooth.

提案: 回答较长且有重复，建议简洁表达，使用连接词使句子更流畅。

例: I eat chocolate almost every day because I really enjoy it. However, I try to control my intake since it's not very healthy.

提案: 表达不够自然，语法错误较多。建议使用更简单的句子，明确表达观点，并注意时态一致。

例: When I was a child, I didn't like chocolate because I thought it tasted strange. Also, my mother didn't allow me to eat too many sweets.

提案: 句子结构复杂且不够连贯，建议使用连接词，简化表达，并具体说明原因。

例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes delicious and appeals to people of all ages. Its sweetness can also improve people's mood.

提案: 表达不清晰，词汇使用错误。建议学习正确的词汇表达，简洁明了地说明喜好和理由。

例: My favorite chocolate is dark chocolate without sugar. It is healthy and suitable for people who want to maintain their diet.

提案: 回答有些重复，建议避免重复表达，使用连接词使句子更流畅。

例: I think chocolate is a great gift for friends and family because most people like it. It is also attractive and suitable for formal occasions.

× especially some taste of chocolate food like chocolate cakes or chocolate milks.

✓ especially some types of chocolate food like chocolate cakes or chocolate milk.

这里“some taste of chocolate food”中的“taste”应为复数形式“types”，表示“几种巧克力食品”。“milks”通常不可数，改为“milk”。

× I really in favor of them because I really like the flavor of it and I'm a sweet tooth.

✓ I am really in favor of them because I really like their flavor and I'm a sweet tooth.

“I really in favor of them”缺少动词“am”。“the flavor of it”指代不明确，应改为“their flavor”指代复数的巧克力食品。

× Well, almost every day I really, I have to say I really like chocolate and I'm feeling very satisfied when I eat it.

✓ Well, almost every day, I have to say I really like chocolate and I feel very satisfied when I eat it.

句子中“I really”位置不当，且“I'm feeling”应改为一般现在时“I feel”，因为描述习惯性动作。

× So I almost every day will have a bar of chocolate, but I know it's not so healthy so I will control myself.

✓ So I will have a bar of chocolate almost every day, but I know it's not very healthy so I will control myself.

“almost every day”应放在动词之后，且“not so healthy”更自然表达为“not very healthy”。

× Well, when I was a kid, it's very strange that I'm not really like chocolate because I think it's a little taste of not so good.

✓ Well, when I was a kid, it was very strange that I didn't really like chocolate because I thought it tasted a little bad.

描述过去的事情，时态应使用过去时，“it's”改为“it was”，“I'm not really like”改为“I didn't really like”，“think”改为“thought”，“taste of not so good”表达不正确，改为“tasted a little bad”。

× And also my mother will strictly manage me not to eat too many sweet food.

✓ And also my mother strictly managed me not to eat too much sweet food.

“too many”用于可数名词，“sweet food”不可数，应使用“too much”。动词时态应与上下文一致，改为过去时“managed”。

× So when I was young I do not eat chocolate.

✓ So when I was young, I did not eat chocolate.

描述过去的动作，否定形式应使用过去时“did not eat”。

× While we all know the chocolate tastes really good and it's very suitable for both the child to the adult and even the elderly,

✓ While we all know chocolate tastes really good and it's very suitable for both children and adults and even the elderly,

“the chocolate”不需要定冠词，且“both the child to the adult”表达错误，应改为“both children and adults”。

× the taste of sweet really can make people feel very satisfied because it's very in the high sugar and I think it will make someone's mood be happy.

✓ the sweet taste can really make people feel very satisfied because it has a high sugar content and I think it can make someone's mood happy.

“taste of sweet”应为“sweet taste”，“very in the high sugar”表达错误，应改为“has a high sugar content”，“make someone's mood be happy”应简化为“make someone's mood happy”。

× Well, I prefer till the poor chocolate.

✓ Well, I prefer dark chocolate.

“till the poor chocolate”表达错误，应为“dark chocolate”（黑巧克力）。

× It's like the black chocolate without any sugar.

✓ It's like black chocolate without any sugar.

“the black chocolate”中“the”不必要，且“black chocolate”是不可数名词。

× I think it's of protein and it's very healthy for some people likes to manage their body and have diet is very healthy and I think.

✓ I think it contains protein and it's very healthy for some people who like to manage their body and have a diet.

“it's of protein”表达错误，应为“it contains protein”。“some people likes”主谓不一致，应为“some people who like”。“have diet”缺冠词，应为“have a diet”。

× Well, I think it's a very good choice if we have some gifts for our friends or the family members.

✓ Well, I think it's a very good choice if we have gifts for our friends or family members.

“some gifts”在此处不必要，且“the family members”中“the”不合适，应去掉。

× I think the chocolates very good choice because you know, everyone likes eating chocolate and it is very beautiful and formal.

✓ I think chocolates are a very good choice because you know, everyone likes eating chocolate and they are very beautiful and formal.

“the chocolates”应为复数“chocolates”，谓语动词应与复数主语一致用“are”。“it”指代复数应改为“they”。