Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer clearer and more natural by correcting grammar and avoiding unclear phrases. For example, say "I like eating chocolate because it is rich and sweet, and it gives me energy. I especially prefer dark chocolate with 70 to 80% cocoa because it is not too sweet."

例: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it is rich and sweet, and it gives me energy. I especially prefer dark chocolate with 70 to 80% cocoa because it is not too sweet.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains many errors. Try to give a direct and clear response with correct grammar. For example, "I usually eat chocolate about three to four times a week. I often have some in the morning to give me energy."

例: I usually eat chocolate about three to four times a week. I often have some in the morning to give me energy.

提案: Improve grammar and clarity by saying, "No, I did not often eat chocolate when I was a kid, but I liked sweets. Children usually enjoy sweets with rich and mixed flavours."

例: No, I did not often eat chocolate when I was a kid, but I liked sweets. Children usually enjoy sweets with rich and mixed flavours.

提案: Make your answer clearer and more natural by saying, "Chocolate is popular worldwide because it can be sweet or bitter, and it often contains nuts, giving it a rich and tasty flavour."

例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it can be sweet or bitter, and it often contains nuts, giving it a rich and tasty flavour.

提案: Clarify your answer and correct grammar. For example, "My favourite chocolate is dark chocolate, especially the one with coconut. I like it because it is light and not too sweet compared to milk chocolate."

例: My favourite chocolate is dark chocolate, especially the one with coconut. I like it because it is light and not too sweet compared to milk chocolate.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains errors. Try to say, "Yes, I think chocolate is a good gift because it is thoughtful and convenient. For example, when I returned to China, my parents gave chocolates to relatives, and they really enjoyed them."

例: Yes, I think chocolate is a good gift because it is thoughtful and convenient. For example, when I returned to China, my parents gave chocolates to relatives, and they really enjoyed them.

× Yes, of course I like to eat chocolate because it's a rich and sweet but always energy.

✓ Yes, of course I like to eat chocolate because it's rich and sweet and always gives me energy.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'a' before uncountable adjectives 'rich' and 'sweet' and the phrase 'always energy' is incomplete. The correction removes the article 'a' and adds 'gives me' to complete the meaning. In English, adjectives like 'rich' and 'sweet' describing uncountable nouns do not take 'a'.

× And I especially like to use dark chocolate like 70 5 to 80% cigarettes because it's not too sweet.

✓ And I especially like to eat dark chocolate with 75 to 80% cocoa because it's not too sweet.

The original sentence misuses 'use' instead of 'eat' and 'cigarettes' is incorrect, likely a mispronunciation or error for 'cocoa'. The correction replaces 'use' with 'eat' and corrects 'cigarettes' to 'cocoa'. This clarifies the meaning and corrects vocabulary usage.

× AAI Chakraborty one and the other day are likely to be 3 * a week or more.

✓ I usually eat chocolate about three times a week or more.

The original sentence is unclear and contains nonsensical phrases. The correction provides a clear, grammatically correct sentence that fits the context. Proper sentence structure is essential for clarity.

× More like 4 * a week.

✓ More like four times a week.

The original sentence is incomplete and uses an asterisk instead of 'times'. The correction completes the sentence and uses the correct expression for frequency.

× I I eat chocolate every morning when I get up and give me energy in the evening.

✓ I eat chocolate every morning when I get up, and it gives me energy throughout the day.

The original sentence has repetition ('I I') and an unclear phrase 'give me energy in the evening'. The correction removes repetition and clarifies the timing of the energy benefit.

× More energized.

✓ It makes me feel more energized.

The original fragment 'More energized.' is incomplete. The correction forms a complete sentence explaining the effect of eating chocolate.

× No, when I was a kid I not really like to eat chocolate but I like to eat sweets.

✓ No, when I was a kid I did not really like to eat chocolate but I liked to eat sweets.

The original sentence lacks auxiliary verb 'did' for negation in past tense and inconsistent verb tense. The correction adds 'did' and changes 'like' to 'liked' to maintain past tense consistency.

× Like younger child will like to eat things that give you a mixed taste of a more rich taste one.

✓ Like younger children, I liked to eat things that give a mixed and richer taste.

The original sentence has awkward phrasing and incorrect article usage. The correction improves clarity and grammar by adjusting articles and adjective order.

× Because of its pain and it can be not sweet at all or it can be sweetie and it always mix with nuts and a very rich taste.

✓ Because of its plainness, it can be not sweet at all or it can be sweet, and it always mixes with nuts, giving a very rich taste.

The original sentence misuses 'pain' instead of 'plainness', 'sweetie' instead of 'sweet', and has subject-verb agreement errors ('mix' should be 'mixes'). The correction fixes vocabulary and agreement errors.

× My favorite, favorite chocolate, my movie is black chocolate.

✓ My favorite chocolate is dark chocolate.

The original sentence is confusing and uses 'movie' instead of 'choice' or 'variety'. The correction simplifies and corrects the sentence.

× Uh, especially the 17 coconut variety.

✓ Especially the 70% cocoa variety.

The original sentence likely misheard '17 coconut' instead of '70% cocoa'. The correction reflects the intended meaning.

× Uh, I like it because it's light or not that sweetie, but a little bit, a little bit interior and compared to milk chocolate.

✓ I like it because it's light and not that sweet, but a little bit bitter compared to milk chocolate.

The original sentence misuses 'sweetie' instead of 'sweet' and 'interior' instead of 'bitter'. The correction uses appropriate adjectives to convey the intended meaning.

× Yes, I think Chakra is good to get your orders at it, while I feel favour.

✓ Yes, I think chocolate is good to give as gifts, and it makes people feel happy.

The original sentence is unclear and misuses words like 'Chakra', 'orders', and 'favour'. The correction clarifies the meaning and uses correct vocabulary.

× For example, I'm first returning back to China.

✓ For example, when I first returned to China,

The original sentence uses incorrect tense and phrasing. The correction uses past tense and proper structure.

× My parents bought a lot of chocolate with different cases to my relatives and they enjoyed it very much.

✓ My parents bought a lot of chocolate with different cases for my relatives, and they enjoyed it very much.

The original sentence misuses 'to' instead of 'for' when indicating the recipients of gifts. The correction fixes the preposition.

× They think explicit and it's convenient to forbid.

✓ They thought it was thoughtful and convenient to give.

The original sentence misuses 'explicit' and 'forbid'. The correction uses appropriate adjectives and verbs to express the intended meaning.