Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to use the present tense consistently and avoid redundancy. Also, provide a clear reason why you like chocolate with specific details. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it has a creamy texture and a sweet taste. I especially enjoy sweets in general because they satisfy my sweet tooth.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but has grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Use clearer sentence structures and linking words to explain your habits. Avoid vague expressions and be more specific.

例: I usually eat chocolate regularly during my period because it helps me feel better. However, sometimes I avoid it because I worry it might make me gain weight.

提案: Your answer has grammatical errors and lacks clarity. Use the past tense correctly and avoid repetition. Provide specific details about your childhood habits and use linking words for coherence.

例: Yes, I often ate chocolate when I was a kid because I loved its sweet taste. I used to carry chocolate in my pocket and eat it whenever I wanted.

提案: Your answer is confusing and contains unclear expressions. Try to explain why chocolate is popular with clear reasons and examples. Use appropriate vocabulary and linking words to make your answer logical.

例: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because it brings pleasure and happiness to people. Almost everyone enjoys its sweet and rich flavor.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Focus on one main idea and provide specific details. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: My favorite flavor of chocolate is vanilla. I also like Kit Kat bars, and I often keep one in my pocket to enjoy later.

提案: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and ends abruptly. Use complete sentences and provide clear reasons why chocolate makes a good gift. Use linking words to improve coherence.

例: Yes, I think chocolate is a great gift because it is popular and loved by many people. Its smooth and tasty flavor makes it a pleasant treat for anyone.

× Obviously I liked eating chocolate because it's all creamy texture and sweet and I love to eat sweets because it's my taste like a more.

✓ Obviously I like eating chocolate because it has a creamy texture and is sweet, and I love to eat sweets because they suit my taste more.

The student incorrectly used the past tense 'liked' instead of the present tense 'like' to express a current preference. Also, 'it's all creamy texture and sweet' is grammatically incorrect; it should be 'it has a creamy texture and is sweet' to properly describe chocolate. Additionally, 'it's my taste like a more' is unclear and incorrect; it should be 'they suit my taste more' to express preference clearly.

× When I'm on my period I eat chocolate regularly, but sometimes I stay out of this because it's made me fat, that's why.

✓ When I'm on my period, I eat chocolate regularly, but sometimes I avoid it because it makes me fat; that's why.

The phrase 'it's made me fat' is incorrect; the correct form is 'it makes me fat' to express a general truth or habitual effect. Also, 'stay out of this' is not appropriate; 'avoid it' is the correct expression. The sentence also benefits from proper punctuation for clarity.

× Yes, of course. When I was a kid I always eating chocolate because I love to eat it. That's why I always have on my pocket and I always eat.

✓ Yes, of course. When I was a kid, I always ate chocolate because I loved to eat it. That's why I always had it in my pocket and always ate it.

The phrase 'I always eating chocolate' is incorrect; it should be 'I always ate chocolate' to use the past tense properly. Also, 'I love to eat it' should be 'I loved to eat it' to maintain past tense consistency. 'I always have on my pocket' is incorrect; it should be 'I always had it in my pocket.' The verb tense and preposition usage needed correction.

× Chocolate is a very kind of emotion that I thought because it gives pleasure and frequently 99% love chocolate.

✓ Chocolate is a kind of emotion, I think, because it gives pleasure and frequently 99% of people love chocolate.

The phrase 'a very kind of emotion that I thought' is awkward and incorrect; 'a kind of emotion, I think' is clearer. Also, '99% love chocolate' lacks a subject; adding 'of people' clarifies the meaning. Pronoun and sentence structure needed improvement for clarity.

× My favorite flavor is vanilla and I always love to eat when I love chocolate and I also like Kit Kat and I always try to keep Kit Kat on my in my pocket and they say.

✓ My favorite flavor is vanilla, and I always love to eat it when I eat chocolate. I also like Kit Kat and always try to keep it in my pocket.

The original sentence is run-on and confusing. 'I always love to eat when I love chocolate' is unclear; it should be 'I always love to eat it when I eat chocolate.' 'I always try to keep Kit Kat on my in my pocket and they say' is grammatically incorrect and unclear; it should be 'I always try to keep it in my pocket.' Sentence structure and clarity were improved.

× Of course the chocolate is a popular gift for everyone. Everyone loves to eat this type of food and it's a very smooth and tasty. I feel it's change in.

✓ Of course, chocolate is a popular gift for everyone. Everyone loves to eat this type of food, and it's very smooth and tasty. I feel it has changed.

'The chocolate' is incorrect here; 'chocolate' without 'the' is appropriate when speaking generally. 'It's a very smooth and tasty' is missing a noun; it should be 'it's very smooth and tasty.' 'I feel it's change in' is unclear and incorrect; 'I feel it has changed' is the correct form. Pronoun use and sentence clarity were corrected.