Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to avoid filler words like 'umm' and 'uh' to make your answer sound more natural and confident. Also, complete your sentences clearly and directly answer the question with a topic sentence followed by supporting details.

例: Yes, I really enjoy eating chocolate, especially dark chocolate, because it makes me feel happy and satisfied.

提案: Focus on directly answering the question about frequency and avoid redundancy. Use clear linking words to connect your ideas and be specific about how often you eat chocolate.

例: I usually eat chocolate a few times a week, mostly dark chocolate since it's my favorite.

提案: Try to structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Use past tense correctly and avoid repeating phrases. Also, use linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: Yes, I often ate chocolate as a child. Whenever I was upset, my parents would give me chocolate to calm me down.

提案: Avoid filler words and unclear phrases. Provide a clear opinion with specific reasons and use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes delicious and brings happiness to people of all ages.

提案: Speak clearly and avoid unnecessary fillers. Complete your sentences and explain your preference with specific reasons using linking words.

例: My favorite flavor is dark chocolate because I don't like very sweet foods and dark chocolate has less sugar.

提案: Try to use more precise vocabulary and correct grammar. Use linking words to make your answer more coherent and provide specific reasons.

例: Yes, I believe chocolate makes a great gift because it is popular, affordable, and enjoyed by people of all ages.

× I'm feel very good when I eat and my umm.

✓ I feel very good when I eat.

The verb 'feel' should be in the base form 'feel' after the subject 'I' without 'am'. 'I'm feel' is incorrect because 'feel' is not a present participle here but a main verb expressing a state.

× I'm a very most that used to eat chocolate, especially dark chocolate because that's my favorite and I like them.

✓ I'm someone who eats chocolate very often, especially dark chocolate because that's my favorite and I like it.

The phrase 'a very most that used to eat' is incorrect and unclear. 'Most' is a superlative and should be used properly. Also, 'them' should refer to 'chocolate' which is singular or uncountable, so 'it' is appropriate.

× Well, as I said in the past, I'm a fan of the chocolate or candy and when I was child when I'm crying I'm very calm with give or get candy or chocolate.

✓ Well, as I said in the past, I was a fan of chocolate or candy and when I was a child, when I was crying, I was very calm when given or getting candy or chocolate.

The sentence mixes present and past tenses incorrectly. 'I'm a fan' should be 'I was a fan' to match past context. 'When I'm crying' should be 'when I was crying'. Also, 'with give or get' is incorrect; it should be 'when given or getting' to express passive or active actions properly.

× Uh, it's, my opinion is, uh, chocolate is umm, umm, happier, uh, meals and uh, it's a kind of happier meals And uh, all of the people, younger people or older people love sweets and especially chocolate.

✓ In my opinion, chocolate is a happy food, and all people, both younger and older, love sweets, especially chocolate.

The word 'happier' is a comparative adjective and is incorrectly used here. 'Happy' as an adjective fits better. Also, 'meals' is not appropriate; 'food' or 'treat' is better. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× Umm, my favorite flavor of chocolate. It's a dark, umm, dark chocolate actually. And because umm uh, I'm not very fan of sweetie a lot and sugar and that's my remember that I.

✓ My favorite flavor of chocolate is dark chocolate. I am not a big fan of sweets or sugar, and that's what I remember.

'I'm not very fan' is incorrect; it should be 'I am not a big fan'. 'Sweetie' is informal and incorrect here; 'sweets' is appropriate. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I think chocolate is a good souvenir or gift for others because it's very popular and all people loves that and it's not. Unavailable or expensive, and all people can eat it.

✓ I think chocolate is a good souvenir or gift for others because it's very popular and all people love it. It's not unavailable or expensive, and everyone can eat it.

'All people loves that' is incorrect; 'people' is plural so the verb should be 'love'. 'That' should be 'it' referring to chocolate. Also, 'all people' is better expressed as 'everyone' for naturalness.