Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to reduce filler words like 'uh' and 'umm' to make your answer sound more natural and fluent. Also, structure your answer clearly by stating your opinion first, then giving reasons with linking words such as 'because' or 'however'. Keep your answer concise and avoid repetition.

例: I like chocolate, but I don't eat it often because I am health conscious. However, I sometimes enjoy it to refresh my mood.

提案: Avoid filler words and try to use linking words like 'because' and 'so' to connect your ideas smoothly. Also, be careful with subject-verb agreement, for example, 'dark chocolates that are' instead of 'dark chocolate that are'. Keep your answer within 5 sentences for clarity.

例: I usually eat dark chocolate because it is healthy and good for brain function. When I crave something sweet, I choose dark chocolate with nuts and seeds to satisfy my craving.

提案: Try to avoid repeating 'used to' excessively and filler words like 'uh'. Also, clarify your answer by linking ideas logically, for example, explain why waiting for your father was the best part and how chocolate was involved. Keep your sentences concise and relevant.

例: When I was a kid, I loved chocolate. My sister and I would wait at the gate for our father to come home, and he often brought us chocolate, which made that moment special.

提案: Reduce filler words and repetition to make your answer more fluent. Use linking words like 'because' and 'also' to connect your points logically. Provide more specific reasons or examples to support your opinion.

例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes sweet and can improve people's mood. Also, it is a common gift that shows care and affection.

提案: Try to avoid filler words and repetition. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' to make your answer coherent. Also, be more specific about why you like the matcha flavour to enrich your answer.

例: My favourite chocolate flavour is matcha because it has a unique taste and is hard to find locally. Therefore, my sister brings it from Finland whenever she visits.

提案: Avoid filler words and incomplete sentences. Make sure your answer is complete and clear. Use linking words like 'because' to explain your reasons. Also, be specific about why chocolate is a good gift and for whom.

例: I think giving chocolate as a gift is excellent because it shows care and affection. It is especially suitable for children, who usually love sweets.

× So whenever I am craving for something sweet, I try to, uh, eat the dark chocolate that are filled with nuts and seeds.

✓ So whenever I am craving for something sweet, I try to, uh, eat the dark chocolate that is filled with nuts and seeds.

The phrase 'dark chocolate that are filled' is incorrect because 'dark chocolate' is singular, so the verb should be 'is' instead of 'are'. This is a singular and plural agreement issue. To improve, ensure the verb agrees with the singular noun.

× I have a an older sister who also loves chocolate a lot.

✓ I have an older sister who also loves chocolate a lot.

The phrase 'a an older sister' contains two articles 'a' and 'an' together, which is incorrect. Only one article should be used before a noun. This is an article error but also relates to singular/plural usage. The correct article before a vowel sound is 'an'. To improve, use only one appropriate article before the noun.