Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中有重复表达“I try to avoid”，影响流畅性。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，同时注意语法正确。

例: Yes, I like chocolate very much. I usually avoid dark chocolate because it tastes bitter. My favorite brand is Kinder because it is sweet and has a crunchy texture.

提案: 回答中有重复“I go to the I go to”，影响表达自然。建议注意句子完整性和避免重复，同时可以用连接词使表达更连贯。

例: I usually eat chocolate once a week as a small reward after finishing my shift on weekends. I often buy whatever is on sale at Kohl's.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和重复，如“could I eat”和“can I could”。建议注意语法结构，避免重复，并用连接词使句子更流畅。

例: No, my parents were strict about my diet because they cared about my health. So chocolate was banned during my childhood, and I could only have it on special occasions like birthdays.

提案: 回答内容较完整，但开头用“right?”显得口语化且不够正式。建议使用更正式的连接词，并注意句子衔接。

例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because people of all ages enjoy its delicious and sweet flavor. Moreover, it is easy to share, making it a perfect snack for many occasions. Additionally, its relatively affordable price makes it accessible to most people.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清，如“we've had a knot inside”和“has not give you a crunchy texture”。建议简化表达，注意语法和逻辑连贯。

例: My favorite flavor is milk chocolate because it is smooth and mildly sweet. Unlike some chocolates, it does not have a crunchy texture.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和重复，如“isn't the price is”。建议使用更准确的句式，并用连接词使表达更自然。

例: Yes, chocolate is a good gift because it is affordable and sweet. It can bring happiness to everyone, and most people can easily afford it.

× I try to avoid to I try to avoid eating dark chocolate because it's quite bitter and my favorite brand is Kinder because the chocolate is not just sweet, it also has a crunchy texture.

✓ I try to avoid eating dark chocolate because it's quite bitter and my favorite brand is Kinder because the chocolate is not just sweet, it also has a crunchy texture.

动词avoid后面应接动名词形式（-ing），而不是不定式to。这里重复了“I try to avoid”，应删除多余部分。

× I go to the I go to Kohl's, choosing whatever is on sale.

✓ I go to Kohl's, choosing whatever is on sale.

句子中“I go to the I go to Kohl's”重复，应删除多余部分，使句子结构完整。

× No, my parents were quite straight about what could I eat and because they care a lot about my taste and health.

✓ No, my parents were quite strict about what I could eat because they cared a lot about my taste and health.

“could I eat”语序错误，疑问句语序不适用于陈述句，应改为“I could eat”。“were quite straight”应为“were quite strict”，形容词使用错误。

× So chocolate was banded in my childhood.

✓ So chocolate was banned in my childhood.

动词“banded”拼写错误，应为“banned”，表示“禁止”。

× I can I could only have them in special occasions, maybe like a birthday.

✓ I could only have them on special occasions, maybe like a birthday.

“I can I could”重复，应删除多余部分。表达过去习惯用“could”。介词“in special occasions”应为“on special occasions”。

× That's why it's a perfect snack in many occasions.

✓ That's why it's a perfect snack on many occasions.

固定搭配是“on occasions”，表示“在某些场合”，而不是“in occasions”。

× Oh, my favorite flavor will be milk chocolate. We've had a knot inside.

✓ Oh, my favorite flavor is milk chocolate. It has a nut inside.

“We've had a knot inside”语义不清且语法错误，应为“It has a nut inside”，表示“里面有坚果”。

× So milk chocolate is more like it's not too sweet, but it's a bit sweet flavor and also it's kind of it's very smooth and also has not give you a crunchy texture.

✓ So milk chocolate is not too sweet, but has a slightly sweet flavor. It's very smooth and does not give you a crunchy texture.

句子结构混乱，形容词和副词使用不当。应简化表达，使用正确的形容词和动词形式。

× Yes it's affordable so isn't the price is pretty reasonable?

✓ Yes, it's affordable, so the price is pretty reasonable, isn't it?

原句中“isn't the price is pretty reasonable?”结构错误，应使用反意疑问句“isn't it?”。

× I feel like everyone can afford it and also it's sweet which give a sense of happiness to everyone.

✓ I feel like everyone can afford it and also it's sweet, which gives a sense of happiness to everyone.

关系代词引导的定语从句中，谓语动词应与先行词“it”一致，使用第三人称单数“gives”。