Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时应避免重复表达“love chocolate”，并且句子结构可以更自然流畅。可以用更具体的描述来丰富答案。

例: Yes, I really enjoy eating chocolate because its sweet and rich flavor always lifts my mood instantly.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并使用连接词使表达更连贯。

例: I usually eat chocolate once or twice a week, mostly dark chocolate with nuts, especially in the mornings when I have time to prepare breakfast.

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不够自然。建议使用更准确的时态和词汇，并且句子更简洁。

例: Yes, I often ate chocolate as a child because my dad traveled abroad frequently and brought me chocolates like Ferrero Rocher from duty-free shops.

提案: 回答中语法错误明显，表达不完整。建议用更准确的词汇和完整的句子来解释原因。

例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it contains cocoa, which helps the brain release dopamine, a chemical that makes people feel happy and satisfied.

提案: 回答表达较好，但部分句子结构不够自然，建议使用更地道的表达方式和连接词。

例: My favorite chocolate flavor is mint chocolate because the coolness of the mint blends perfectly with the sweetness of the chocolate, creating a complex and enjoyable taste.

提案: 回答中有重复和表达不清晰的问题，建议简化句子，使用更准确的词汇，并且避免句子未完成。

例: Yes, I think chocolate is a great gift because it's affordable and shows kindness, making it a friendly gesture to build or maintain good relationships.

× It brings me back to my best mood when I have a chocolate in my mouth that tastes mouth watering.

✓ It brings me back to my best mood when I have chocolate in my mouth that tastes mouth-watering.

这里的'chocolate'作为不可数名词使用，不需要加冠词'a'。此外，'mouth watering'应连写为复合形容词'mouth-watering'，修饰后面的名词。

× Fortunately I got a lot of chance of eating chocolates because my dad usually fly abroad and he would bring me lots of chocolate from the duty free shops in the airport, usually Ferrero Rocher.

✓ Fortunately I got a lot of chances of eating chocolates because my dad usually flies abroad and he would bring me lots of chocolate from the duty free shops in the airport, usually Ferrero Rocher.

'a lot of chance'应为复数'chances'，表示多次机会。

× my dad usually fly abroad and he would bring me lots of chocolate from the duty free shops in the airport, usually Ferrero Rocher.

✓ my dad usually flies abroad and he would bring me lots of chocolate from the duty free shops in the airport, usually Ferrero Rocher.

主语是第三人称单数'dad'，谓语动词应加's'，即'flies'。

× Well, simply because Coco makes your brain produces dopamine I guess and dopamine is a substance that make people happy.

✓ Well, simply because cocoa makes your brain produce dopamine I guess and dopamine is a substance that makes people happy.

'makes your brain produces'中动词重复，应改为'makes your brain produce'。此外，'make people happy'中的主语是单数'dopamine'，动词应为'makes'。

× So that's why I'm so craving about chocolates I guess.

✓ So that's why I'm so craving chocolates I guess.

'craving'后面直接接名词，不需要介词'about'。

× I often eat dark chocolate with nuts when I wake up and I when I have some time to prepare for my breakfast.

✓ I often eat dark chocolate with nuts when I wake up and when I have some time to prepare my breakfast.

'prepare'后面直接接宾语，不需要介词'for'。

× It brings me back to my best mood when I have a chocolate in my mouth that tastes mouth watering.

✓ It brings me back to my best mood when I have chocolate in my mouth that tastes mouth-watering.

'mouth watering'应作为复合形容词连写，修饰名词。

× I think it's it's a good way of being a friend with others or trying to negotiate or remain.

✓ I think it's a good way to make friends with others or to try to negotiate or maintain relationships.

'being a friend with others'表达不自然，应改为'make friends with others'；'remain'后缺少宾语，应补充完整。