Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is heartfelt but a bit repetitive and slightly unclear. Try to make your sentences more concise and avoid repeating the same idea. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I love eating chocolate because it reminds me of my childhood when I saved my pocket money to buy chocolates and share them with my friends, creating unforgettable memories.

提案: Your answer is short and contains some unclear phrases. Try to give a clear frequency and explain your preference with correct grammar and linking words.

例: I eat chocolate almost every day because I enjoy trying different types and flavours; in fact, I like to sample new varieties every couple of days.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but has grammatical errors and redundancy. Use correct verb forms and avoid repeating ideas. Add linking words for coherence.

例: Yes, I ate a lot of chocolate as a child. Although there weren't many flavours back then, I enjoyed sharing chocolates with my friends, which created happy memories.

提案: Your answer is unclear and grammatically incorrect. Try to clearly explain reasons with proper sentence structure and linking words.

例: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because it comes in many flavours, such as milk and dark chocolate, allowing people to choose according to their personal taste.

提案: Your answer is understandable but contains grammatical mistakes and redundancy. Use correct tense and avoid repeating the same idea.

例: My favourite flavour is milk chocolate because of its creamy and sweet taste, which always makes me feel happy when I eat it.

提案: Your answer is clear but could be improved by using more varied vocabulary and linking words to make it more natural and fluent.

例: Yes, I believe chocolate makes a great gift because it comes in many varieties and flavours, and it is a popular and thoughtful present for many occasions.

× I have fond memories about chocolate that I saved pocket money to buy them and sharing with my friends, which is a memorable memory.

✓ I have fond memories of chocolate when I saved my pocket money to buy it and shared it with my friends, which is a memorable memory.

The correct preposition to use with 'memories' is 'of' not 'about'. Also, 'saved pocket money to buy them' is awkward; it should be 'saved my pocket money to buy it' because 'chocolate' is uncountable here. 'Sharing' should be in past tense 'shared' to match the past action. 'Them' is incorrect as it refers to plural, but 'chocolate' here is treated as uncountable singular.

× I really love the various types and tastes of them.

✓ I really love the various types and tastes of chocolate.

Using 'them' is incorrect here because 'types and tastes' refer to chocolate varieties, so 'chocolate' should be used instead of 'them'.

× I prefer to try the every twice.

✓ I prefer to try each one twice.

The phrase 'the every twice' is incorrect. 'Each one' is appropriate to refer to individual types, and 'twice' indicates frequency. The sentence is corrected to express the intended meaning clearly.

× There's not so many flavors that time, but I preferred to sharing them with my friends and and bring me some happy memories.

✓ There weren't so many flavors at that time, but I preferred sharing them with my friends, and it brought me some happy memories.

'There's' is singular and incorrect with plural 'flavors'; it should be 'There weren't'. 'That time' needs the preposition 'at'. 'Preferred to sharing' is incorrect; it should be 'preferred sharing'. The phrase 'and and bring me' is grammatically incorrect; it should be 'and it brought me' to maintain past tense and subject agreement.

× Wow, the various flavor is absolutely one of the reason it has milk, dark and so on.

✓ Wow, the various flavors are absolutely one of the reasons; it has milk, dark, and so on.

'Flavor' should be plural 'flavors' to match 'various'. 'Is' should be 'are' to agree with plural subject. 'One of the reason' should be 'one of the reasons' because 'one of' is followed by plural noun. The sentence is restructured for clarity.

× It can personalize to it.

✓ It can be personalized.

The phrase 'personalize to it' is incorrect. The intended meaning is that chocolate can be customized or personalized, so the passive form 'can be personalized' is appropriate.

× Milk chocolate is my favorite because of its creamy and sweet flavour also.

✓ Milk chocolate is my favourite because of its creamy and sweet flavour.

The word 'also' is unnecessary and awkward at the end of the sentence. Removing it improves sentence flow and clarity.

× When I ate it, it also can bring me the happy emotions.

✓ When I eat it, it also brings me happy emotions.

The tense should be present to match the habitual action, so 'ate' changes to 'eat'. 'Can bring me the happy emotions' is awkward; 'brings me happy emotions' is more natural. 'The' before 'happy emotions' is unnecessary.

× I think so because nowadays chocolate has various types and many flavors.

✓ I think so because nowadays chocolate has various types and many flavours.

'Flavors' is American English spelling; 'flavours' is British English spelling, which is consistent with the instruction to use English (United Kingdom).

× Additionally, it's a typical gift to give someone.

✓ Additionally, it's a typical gift to give to someone.

The verb 'give' requires the preposition 'to' before the indirect object 'someone'.