Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时语言不够自然流畅，表达重复且句子结构混乱。建议简化句子，避免重复，明确表达观点。

例: Yes, I love eating chocolate because it tastes sweet and makes me happy. However, I try not to eat too much because it's not very healthy.

提案: 回答不够连贯，句子不完整且有语法错误。建议使用连词连接句子，表达更完整的想法。

例: I usually eat chocolate about once a month because it's very sweet and I worry about gaining weight. I tend to eat it when I feel stressed.

提案: 表达不够准确，语法错误较多，句子结构混乱。建议注意主谓一致，使用正确的时态和单复数形式。

例: Yes, I often ate chocolate when I was a kid because I loved sweets. However, my mom didn't allow me to eat too much because I had bad teeth.

提案: 回答内容不够具体，表达不清晰，词汇使用不当。建议使用更准确的词汇，丰富内容并保持句子完整。

例: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because of its sweet flavor and versatility. People can add different ingredients to create various tastes.

提案: 回答不完整且语法错误较多，表达不清晰。建议简化句子，明确表达喜好并说明原因。

例: My favorite flavor is soy milk chocolate because it combines the sweetness of chocolate with the creamy taste of milk.

提案: 回答语法错误严重，句子不完整且表达混乱。建议使用简单句子，清晰表达观点并给出理由。

例: Yes, I think chocolate is a good gift because it is popular and suitable for many occasions.

× Yes, I love eating chocolate because it tastes very sweet and you know something sweet like candies and will always bring people happy but actually I don't I don't dare to eat more because it's not good for.

✓ Yes, I love eating chocolate because it tastes very sweet and, you know, something sweet like candies will always bring people happiness, but actually I don't dare to eat more because it's not good for me.

句中缺少主语和谓语，且表达不完整。'bring people happy' 应改为 'bring people happiness'，因为 'bring' 后面应接名词。'not good for' 后应加宾语 'me'。建议补充完整句子，使表达清晰。

× I try not to eat too much, maybe about once a month because it's too sweet and I'm afraid I'm getting fat because because of this. So I only ate it when I was very stressful and on the after.

✓ I try not to eat too much, maybe about once a month because it's too sweet and I'm afraid of getting fat because of this. So I only eat it when I am very stressed and after that.

'I'm afraid I'm getting fat because because of this' 中重复使用 'because'，应删除一个。'I'm afraid of getting fat' 是正确表达。'I only ate it' 时态不符，应为一般现在时 'I only eat it'。'when I was very stressful' 应改为 'when I am very stressed'，'stressful' 形容事物，'stressed' 形容人。'on the after' 不正确，应为 'after that'。

× Of course kids are always love something sweet and me too, I often eat them. But actually my mom didn't allow me to eat too much because I have a bad teeth and she thinks eating too much candies will make my teeth.

✓ Of course kids always love something sweet and me too, I often eat it. But actually my mom didn't allow me to eat too much because I have bad teeth and she thinks eating too many candies will damage my teeth.

'kids are always love' 中 'are' 多余，应为 'kids always love'。'I often eat them' 中 'them' 指代不明，改为 'it' 指代 'something sweet'。'a bad teeth' 错误，'teeth' 是复数，不能用 'a'，应为 'bad teeth'。'too much candies' 应为 'too many candies'，因为 'candies' 是可数名词。

× I think the most reason is their flavor. They are very sweet and actually you can add any kind of integrate or materials in the chocolate. Make something bad taste good.

✓ I think the main reason is their flavor. They are very sweet and actually you can add any kind of ingredient or materials in the chocolate to make something that tastes bad taste good.

'the most reason' 应为 'the main reason'。'integrate' 用错，应为 'ingredient'。'Make something bad taste good' 是不完整句，应与前句合并，且 'taste' 应用第三人称单数 'tastes'。

× I like the soy milk and skin chocolate actually it is made from the milk and milk cream and the chocolate it will taste more sweet and also it have the flavor of milk and.

✓ I like soy milk and dark chocolate. Actually, it is made from milk and milk cream, and the chocolate tastes sweeter and also has the flavor of milk.

'skin chocolate' 应为 'dark chocolate'。'taste more sweet' 应为 'tastes sweeter'，比较级形式。'it have' 主谓不一致，应为 'it has'。句子结构混乱，需调整使表达清晰。

× Yes, chocolate is always good be choose to be one of my to be a gift. Actually, when I didn't know which gift I want to give to my parents or my friends in a special ceremonies, I chocolate can't be round to be a gift. Actually it is.

✓ Yes, chocolate is always a good choice to be a gift. Actually, when I don't know which gift I want to give to my parents or my friends on special occasions, chocolate can always be a good gift. Actually, it is.

句子结构混乱，'good be choose' 应为 'a good choice'。'I didn't know' 时态应与上下文一致改为 'I don't know'。'in a special ceremonies' 应为 'on special occasions'。'I chocolate can't be round to be a gift' 语法错误，改为 'chocolate can always be a good gift'。