Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear but could be more natural and concise. Avoid calling chocolate a "meal" since it's a dessert. Try to use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it is sweet and delicious. In fact, it's my favorite dessert in the world.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a direct answer about frequency and explain why you eat chocolate using clear and relevant details.

例: I sometimes eat chocolate, especially when I want a sweet treat to lift my mood.

提案: Your answer has tense errors and awkward phrasing. Use past tense consistently and avoid repeating 'delicious' without context. Add linking words to improve flow.

例: Yes, I ate chocolate every day when I was a kid because it was my favorite dessert and very tasty.

提案: Your answer has grammar mistakes and unclear phrases. Use correct vocabulary and sentence structure. Provide specific reasons with linking words to explain popularity.

例: In my opinion, chocolate is popular worldwide because it has a rich, sweet flavor that many people enjoy, making it a special treat.

提案: Your answer is fragmented and repetitive. Use complete sentences and avoid vague phrases like 'It's a base in the world.' Provide clear reasons for your preference.

例: My favorite flavor is milk chocolate because it is sweet, creamy, and enjoyed by many people around the world.

提案: Your answer is unclear and awkward. Express your opinion directly and explain why chocolate makes a good gift with specific reasons.

例: Yes, I think chocolate is a good gift because it is a sweet treat that many people appreciate, especially as an extra present.

× I like eating chocolate because this meal is very sweet and tasty.

✓ I like eating chocolate because it is very sweet and tasty.

The word 'meal' is incorrect here because chocolate is not a meal; 'it' correctly refers to chocolate. Using 'this meal' is a misuse of adjectives and nouns in this context.

× I sometimes eat chocolate because when I eat this delicious, uh, when I have raising in my face.

✓ I sometimes eat chocolate because when I eat it, I have raisins in my mouth.

The phrase 'have raising in my face' is incorrect. 'Raisins' is the correct noun, and 'in my mouth' is the proper prepositional phrase. 'Face' is incorrect here.

× I eat chocolate when I was a kid every day.

✓ I ate chocolate every day when I was a kid.

The verb 'eat' should be in the past tense 'ate' to match the past time reference 'when I was a kid.'

× I like this delicious.

✓ I like this because it is delicious.

'Delicious' is an adjective and cannot stand alone as a noun. The sentence needs a subject and verb to be correct.

× In my opinion, Check on is popular around the world because it's very delicious desserts and people really enjoyed its rich and sweet flavor which made in a special dessert for people.

✓ In my opinion, chocolate is popular around the world because it is a very delicious dessert and people really enjoy its rich and sweet flavor, which makes it a special treat for people.

'Check on' is a mispronunciation or typo for 'chocolate.' 'Desserts' should be singular 'dessert' to match 'a.' The verb tense and pronouns were incorrect and needed adjustment for clarity and correctness.

× My favorite flavor of chocolate. It's a milk chocolate. It's a base in the world and around the world. I like this delicious. It's very tasty and sweet.

✓ My favorite flavor of chocolate is milk chocolate. It is the most popular in the world. I like it because it is very tasty and sweet.

The original sentences were fragments or incorrect. 'It's a base in the world' is unclear and corrected to 'most popular.' 'This delicious' is incorrect; 'it' refers to the chocolate flavor.

× I mean, it's good to use chocolate as a gift to others when this chocolate is an additional presentation.

✓ I mean, it's good to use chocolate as a gift for others when the chocolate is an additional present.

The preposition 'to' should be 'for' when referring to giving gifts. 'Presentation' is incorrect here; 'present' is the correct noun.