Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is understandable but can be improved by using more natural expressions and avoiding repetition. Instead of repeating 'chewy,' try to use synonyms or rephrase. Also, clarify your points with specific reasons and avoid vague phrases like 'so impressing.'

例: I like eating chocolate because it helps me relax and reduces my stress. Its smooth and slightly chewy texture makes it enjoyable to eat.

提案: Good response with clear frequency and reason. To improve, avoid unnecessary articles like 'the' before 'chocolate' and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I usually eat chocolate twice a week, mostly in the evenings as a small treat because it helps me relax after a long day.

提案: Your answer has some hesitation and unclear parts. Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and be clear and concise. Also, explain the 'two tickets' phrase or avoid it if unclear. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: When I was a kid, I used to eat a lot of chocolates, sometimes 10 to 15 pieces a day. However, after visiting the doctor, I have reduced my chocolate intake significantly.

提案: Your answer is on the right track but can be more natural and precise. Avoid awkward phrases like 'holds the chewy texture way.' Use linking words to connect ideas and provide more specific reasons.

例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because of its sweet taste and pleasant texture, which many people enjoy. Additionally, it is often associated with happiness and celebrations.

提案: Your answer is a bit confusing and repetitive. Try to answer directly and clearly. You can explain that you prefer classic chocolate flavor and avoid unnecessary repetition.

例: My favourite flavour is the classic chocolate itself. Even when I choose ice cream, I usually go for chocolate flavour because I enjoy its rich taste.

提案: Your answer is understandable but can be more concise and natural. Avoid redundant phrases like 'good gift to choose chocolate as a gift.' Use linking words and clarify your points.

例: Yes, I think chocolate makes a great gift because most people enjoy it. Although some may not like it, generally, chocolate is a popular and appreciated present.

× I like eating chocolate because it makes me feel comfortable and that chewy, chewy nature makes so impressing and it reduces the stress.

✓ I like eating chocolate because it makes me feel comfortable and that chewy, chewy nature is so impressive and it reduces stress.

The adjective 'impressing' is incorrect here; the correct adjective is 'impressive'. Also, 'the stress' should be 'stress' as it is uncountable in this context.

× I usually eat the chocolate twice a week, mostly in the evenings as a small treat.

✓ I usually eat chocolate twice a week, mostly in the evenings as a small treat.

The definite article 'the' is unnecessary before 'chocolate' when speaking generally about the food.

× I enjoy it because it makes me feel relaxing.

✓ I enjoy it because it makes me feel relaxed.

'Relaxing' is an adjective describing something that causes relaxation; here, the speaker's feeling is described, so 'relaxed' is correct.

× When I was a kid, I used to eat a lot of chocolates.

✓ When I was a kid, I used to eat a lot of chocolate.

'Chocolate' is an uncountable noun when referring to the substance in general, so 'chocolates' is incorrect here.

× I used to eat uh, uh, 10 to 15 chocolates per day.

✓ I used to eat uh, uh, 10 to 15 pieces of chocolate per day.

'Chocolates' can mean individual pieces, but it's clearer to say 'pieces of chocolate' when specifying quantity.

× Oh, that makes me two tickets and I went to doctor and I have reduced a little bit now.

✓ Oh, that gave me two cavities, so I went to the doctor and I have reduced it a little bit now.

The original sentence is unclear and ungrammatical. 'Two tickets' is incorrect; likely 'two cavities' is meant. Also, 'went to doctor' needs the article 'the'. The sentence is restructured for clarity.

× When you hear the word chocolate, the first thing comes to mind is the sweetness it carries.

✓ When you hear the word chocolate, the first thing that comes to mind is the sweetness it carries.

The phrase 'the first thing comes to mind' is missing the relative pronoun 'that' for correct sentence structure.

× It also holds the chewy texture way which most of the people like.

✓ It also has a chewy texture that most people like.

The phrase 'holds the chewy texture way' is incorrect. 'Has a chewy texture' is the correct expression. Also, 'most of the people' should be 'most people'.

× I don't know what to answer that question, but favorite flavor of chocolate is chocolate itself.

✓ I don't know how to answer that question, but my favorite flavor of chocolate is chocolate itself.

'What to answer that question' is incorrect; 'how to answer that question' is correct. Also, 'favorite flavor' needs the possessive pronoun 'my'.

× In case of ice cream also I choose the chocolate flavor, but in chocolate how can I choose the the flavor so I every time choose the chocolate flavor itself?

✓ In the case of ice cream, I also choose chocolate flavor, but when it comes to chocolate, how can I choose a flavor? So I always choose the chocolate flavor itself.

The sentence has multiple issues: 'In case of' should be 'In the case of'; 'every time' should be 'always'; 'the the' is a typo; sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× Yes, I think it's a good gift to choose chocolate as a gift to others because everyone loves chocolate according to each.

✓ Yes, I think it's a good gift to choose chocolate as a gift for others because everyone loves chocolate to some extent.

'According to each' is incorrect; 'to some extent' or 'to varying degrees' is appropriate. Also, 'gift to others' should be 'gift for others'.

× Some people may dislike that, but most of them like the chocolate and most would love to have chocolate.

✓ Some people may dislike it, but most of them like chocolate and would love to have it.

'That' should be 'it' referring to chocolate. Also, 'the chocolate' is unnecessary; 'chocolate' is sufficient. Repetition is reduced for clarity.