Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is too short and lacks a complete sentence structure. Try to give a full sentence that directly answers the question and briefly explains your reason.

例: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it tastes sweet and makes me feel happy.

提案: Your answer has some good points but contains grammatical errors and lacks linking words. Try to use correct tenses and connect your ideas smoothly.

例: I don't eat chocolate very often because it is too sweet for me. However, I used to eat it frequently when I was a child.

提案: Your answer has grammar mistakes and some unclear sentences. Use past tense consistently and avoid repetition. Also, try to explain your reasons clearly with linking words.

例: Yes, I often ate chocolate when I was a child because it was a very attractive and sweet snack. Moreover, there were many kinds of chocolate to choose from, which made it more enjoyable.

提案: Your answer is a bit unclear and has grammatical errors. Try to organize your ideas logically using linking words and use clearer vocabulary to explain your points.

例: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because it is easily available in many places like convenience stores and supermarkets. Also, eating chocolate can give you energy and make you feel happy.

提案: Your answer has good content but some grammar mistakes and awkward phrasing. Use correct sentence structures and linking words to make your answer clearer.

例: My favourite flavour is dark chocolate because it is not too sweet. You can choose different percentages like 100%, 90%, or 75%, and I prefer 75% because it has a balanced taste that is neither too sweet nor too bitter.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammar errors. Try to express your ideas more clearly and use linking words to connect your points logically.

例: Yes, I think chocolate is a good gift because it can make people happy when they eat it. Also, you can customize the packaging to make the gift more attractive and personal.

× Like eating chocolate.

✓ I like eating chocolate.

The sentence lacks a subject, which is necessary for a complete sentence in English. Adding 'I' clarifies who likes eating chocolate.

× I will not eat chocolate a lot because it is too sweet for me.

✓ I do not eat chocolate a lot because it is too sweet for me.

The question asks about habitual action, so present tense is appropriate instead of future tense 'will not eat'.

× In the past I always eat it when I was a child.

✓ In the past, I always ate it when I was a child.

The phrase 'in the past' requires past tense 'ate' instead of present tense 'eat' to indicate completed action.

× I always eat chocolate when I were a child because it's really attractive snack for me and it's really sweet.

✓ I always ate chocolate when I was a child because it's a really attractive snack for me and it's really sweet.

The phrase 'when I were a child' is incorrect; 'was' is the correct past tense form for first person singular. Also, 'eat' should be past tense 'ate' to match the time frame.

× it's really attractive snack for me

✓ it's a really attractive snack for me

The singular countable noun 'snack' requires the indefinite article 'a' before it.

× You can choose different kinds of chocolate that you can choose.

✓ You can choose different kinds of chocolate.

The phrase 'that you can choose' is redundant and unnecessary, making the sentence awkward.

× So I open it.

✓ So I open it.

This sentence is grammatically correct but lacks context; no correction needed.

× I think it's very popular because you can get all around the world and then different shops like convenience store or supermarket you can get also.

✓ I think it's very popular because you can get it all around the world, and you can also get it in different shops like convenience stores or supermarkets.

Prepositions 'in' and 'at' are needed to indicate location. Also, plural forms 'stores' and 'supermarkets' are appropriate here.

× And then chocolate can also make you a very good energy when you ate it, you will feel very happy because those witness will bring you some energy to let you move on something and then.

✓ And then chocolate can also give you a lot of energy. When you eat it, you will feel very happy because those sugars will bring you some energy to help you keep going.

The sentence mixes past and present tenses incorrectly. 'Ate' should be 'eat' to match the general truth. 'Witness' is incorrect; likely meant 'sugars'. Also, 'make you a very good energy' is ungrammatical; 'give you a lot of energy' is correct.

× My favorite season chocolate is dark chocolate because it's not that sweet.

✓ My favorite type of chocolate is dark chocolate because it's not that sweet.

'Season chocolate' is incorrect; 'type of chocolate' is the correct phrase.

× You can depends on different percents of chocolate like 100 percent, 90% and my favorite one is 75% is not too sweet, not too bitter and then you can taste the chocolate original taste and really good.

✓ You can choose different percentages of chocolate like 100 percent, 90 percent, and my favorite one is 75 percent. It is not too sweet, not too bitter, and you can taste the original chocolate flavor, which is really good.

'Depends on' is incorrect; 'choose' fits better. 'Percents' should be 'percentages'. The sentence is long and run-on; splitting improves clarity.

× It is a good way to use chocolate as a gift to others because you can have the meaning that make your people being happy to eat chocolate.

✓ It is a good idea to use chocolate as a gift for others because it can make people happy when they eat chocolate.

'Have the meaning that make your people being happy' is awkward and incorrect. Using 'can make people happy' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× When they eating chocolate they will think about you and then chocolate can hammock or something you customize that really attractive to the others.

✓ When they eat chocolate, they will think about you, and then chocolate can be customized or something similar that is really attractive to others.

'When they eating' should be 'when they eat' for correct present tense. 'Chocolate can hammock' is unclear; likely meant 'can be customized'. Also, 'to the others' should be 'to others'.