Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally relevant but lacks clarity and contains grammatical errors. Try to make your sentences clearer and more concise, and avoid redundancy. For example, instead of saying "It's not effect on your health so I'm having 2," you could say "It doesn't affect my health much, so I usually have two pieces." Also, use linking words like 'because' to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I really enjoy eating chocolate because I have a sweet tooth. After meals, I often crave something sweet, so I choose dark chocolate as it is healthier than milk chocolate. It doesn't affect my health much, so I usually have two pieces.

提案: Your answer repeats ideas and has some grammatical mistakes. Try to avoid repetition and structure your answer clearly. Use linking words like 'however' or 'but' to show contrast. For example, you can say, "I usually eat chocolate once or twice a week. Although I try to avoid it sometimes, my sweet tooth makes me eat it occasionally."

例: I usually eat chocolate once or twice a week. Although I try to avoid it sometimes, my sweet tooth makes me eat it occasionally after meals.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains repetition and minor grammatical errors. Try to speak more fluently and avoid repeating words. Also, use linking words like 'because' effectively. For example, "Yes, I ate a lot of chocolate when I was a kid because I really liked it and was unaware of any health problems, so I used to eat it daily."

例: Yes, I ate a lot of chocolate when I was a kid because I really liked it and was unaware of any health problems, so I used to eat it daily.

提案: Your answer is understandable but a bit unclear and repetitive. Try to use more precise vocabulary and avoid redundancy. For example, instead of "and it the flavor is a sweet flavor plus," you can say "because of its sweet taste and creamy texture."

例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because of its sweet taste and creamy texture, which many people enjoy.

提案: Your answer has unclear parts and grammatical errors. Avoid unnecessary repetition and unclear phrases like "that's why my Pilates as well." Instead, clearly state your preference and reasons. For example, "My favourite flavour is dark chocolate because it is balanced—not too sweet or bitter."

例: My favourite flavour of chocolate is dark chocolate because it is balanced—not too sweet or bitter—so I prefer to eat it.

提案: Your answer conveys the idea but has some repetition and grammatical mistakes. Try to speak more fluently and use linking words to connect ideas. For example, "Yes, giving chocolates is a wonderful idea because they are associated with love, care, and celebration. Therefore, gifting chocolate shows affection towards others."

例: Yes, giving chocolates is a wonderful idea because they are associated with love, care, and celebration. Therefore, gifting chocolate shows affection towards others.

× I often crave something sweet after my meal so I go with the dark chocolate which is also healthy and not as like milk chocolate.

✓ I often crave something sweet after my meal so I go for dark chocolate which is also healthy and not like milk chocolate.

The phrase 'go with' is incorrect here; the correct preposition is 'go for' when choosing something. Also, 'not as like' is incorrect; it should be 'not like'. This improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× It's not effect on your health so I'm having 2.

✓ It doesn't affect your health so I have two.

'It's not effect' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'It doesn't affect'. Also, 'I'm having 2' is better expressed as 'I have two' when referring to quantity. This corrects verb usage and quantifier expression.

× As I already mentioned I I have sweet tooth so I crave after my meals so I sometimes I avoid but sometime I have to eat maybe twice a week.

✓ As I already mentioned, I have a sweet tooth so I crave sweets after my meals. Sometimes I avoid it but sometimes I have to eat maybe twice a week.

Missing article 'a' before 'sweet tooth' and incorrect pronoun usage 'crave after' should be 'crave sweets after'. Also, sentence structure is improved by splitting into clearer sentences.

× Yes, I ate a lot chocolate when I was a kid because because I I really like chocolate and I didn't know any health health problems back then, so I used to eat daily.

✓ Yes, I ate a lot of chocolate when I was a kid because I really liked chocolate and I didn't know any health problems back then, so I used to eat it daily.

Missing 'of' after 'a lot', verb tense inconsistency with 'like' should be 'liked' to match past tense, and repetition errors removed. Added 'it' after 'eat' for clarity.

× The chocolate is popular around the world of course because of the taste and the creamy texture, and it the flavor is a sweet flavor plus.

✓ Chocolate is popular around the world of course because of its taste and creamy texture, and the flavor is sweet as well.

'The chocolate' is incorrect when speaking generally; 'Chocolate' without 'the' is correct. Also, 'it the flavor' is incorrect; corrected to 'the flavor'. Improved sentence flow and article usage.

× My favorite flavor of chocolate is dark chocolate because it's not too sweet and not too not too bitter so that's why my Pilates as well so I prefer to eat black chocolate.

✓ My favorite flavor of chocolate is dark chocolate because it's not too sweet and not too bitter. That's why I prefer to eat dark chocolate.

Removed repeated 'not too', corrected 'my Pilates as well' which is unclear and likely a mishearing, replaced 'black chocolate' with 'dark chocolate' for consistency. Improved pronoun and sentence clarity.

× Yes, it is wonderful idea to give chocolates others because chocolate has associated with associated with feelings of love and care and celebration.

✓ Yes, it is a wonderful idea to give chocolates to others because chocolate is associated with feelings of love, care, and celebration.

Added missing article 'a' before 'wonderful idea', added preposition 'to' after 'give chocolates', corrected verb form 'has associated' to 'is associated', and removed repeated phrase. This improves grammatical correctness and clarity.

× So giving chocolate is showing love and care for the towards the other person.

✓ So giving chocolate shows love and care towards the other person.

Removed redundant prepositions 'for the towards', simplified sentence structure for clarity and correctness.