Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변이 자연스럽고 명확하게 들리도록 문장을 간결하게 구성하세요. 예를 들어, 중복되는 표현을 줄이고, 이유를 더 구체적으로 설명하는 것이 좋습니다.

例: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it reminds me of my childhood. When I was three, my mom gave me chocolate as a reward for good behavior, so it has a special meaning for me.

提案: 답변이 명확하지 않고 문장이 완성되지 않았습니다. 질문에 직접 답하고, 이유를 구체적으로 설명하며 문장을 완성하세요.

例: Nowadays, I eat chocolate very rarely, maybe twice a year, because I am trying to maintain a healthy diet.

提案: 문장이 미완성이고 의미 전달이 불분명합니다. 질문에 직접 답하고, 이유를 명확하고 구체적으로 설명하세요.

例: Yes, I often ate chocolate as a child because I loved sweet tastes and it was a special treat for me.

提案: 문법과 어휘 사용에 주의하고, 문장을 명확하고 논리적으로 구성하세요. 'extinct'는 부적절한 단어입니다. 대신 'instinct'를 사용하고, 이유를 구체적으로 설명하세요.

例: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because humans have an instinctive preference for sweet tastes, which makes chocolate enjoyable for many people.

提案: 중복되는 표현을 줄이고, 문장을 완성하여 명확하게 표현하세요. 'crust'는 부적절한 단어입니다. 대신 'crisp'나 'crunchy'를 사용하세요.

例: My favourite flavour is crunchy chocolate because I enjoy the texture. It is not too sweet, which I like.

提案: 답변이 자연스럽고 명확하지만, 좀 더 구체적인 이유와 감정을 추가하면 좋습니다.

例: Yes, I think chocolate is a good gift because it is a sweet treat that people enjoy. For example, on Valentine's Day, giving chocolate is a popular tradition that brings happiness.

× my mom used to give me a chocolate when I did something good.

✓ my mom used to give me chocolate when I did something good.

In English, 'chocolate' is an uncountable noun when referring to the substance in general, so it should not be preceded by 'a'. Removing 'a' corrects the singular/plural usage.

× Actually nowadays I don't eat chocolate that much or almost twice a year because I'm doing some attire or something, so most.

✓ Actually, nowadays I don't eat chocolate that much, maybe almost twice a year because I'm on a diet or something.

The phrase 'doing some attire' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'on a diet'. Also, 'that much or almost twice a year' is awkward; rephrasing improves clarity and grammar.

× because I have a sweet taste at that time when I was younger, I really like to eat chocolate and moreover because.

✓ because I had a sweet tooth when I was younger; I really liked to eat chocolate, and moreover, because...

The phrase 'have a sweet taste' is incorrect; the correct idiom is 'have a sweet tooth'. Also, tense consistency requires past tense 'had' and 'liked' since referring to the past.

× I think eating something sweet is just humans extinct so there is no one who doesn't like sweet in on on their own body.

✓ I think eating something sweet is just human instinct, so there is no one who doesn't like sweets in their own body.

The phrase 'humans extinct' is incorrect; the intended phrase is 'human instinct'. Also, 'sweet' should be plural 'sweets' to refer to sweet things generally. The sentence structure is corrected for clarity.

× So I think that's why what you call it are popular around the world.

✓ So I think that's why, what you call it, is popular around the world.

The phrase 'what you call it are popular' has subject-verb disagreement. 'What you call it' is singular, so the verb should be 'is'.

× I would I would say the crunch flavor because the the texture is my favorite. Crunchy is just so crust and.

✓ I would say the crunchy flavor because the texture is my favorite. Crunchy is just so crisp and...

'Crunch flavor' should be 'crunchy flavor' to use the correct adjective form. 'Crust' is incorrect here; the correct word is 'crisp' to describe texture.

× It's not that much sweet, so I like it.

✓ It's not that sweet, so I like it.

The phrase 'that much sweet' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'that sweet' without 'much' when modifying adjectives.

× Yes, I think so, because for example, we have Valentine's Day which gives chocolate each other.

✓ Yes, I think so, because for example, on Valentine's Day, people give chocolate to each other.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'which gives chocolate each other'. The correct structure is 'people give chocolate to each other'. Also, 'on Valentine's Day' is the correct preposition.