Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but it is a bit long and slightly repetitive. Try to make your sentences more concise and avoid repeating the same ideas. Also, watch for subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'chocolates' and 'contain').

例: Yes, I love eating chocolate because it always uplifts my mood. I especially prefer dark chocolate since it contains antioxidants and nutrients that make me feel happier.

提案: Your answer provides good details but is somewhat repetitive and contains some grammatical errors (e.g., 'a chocolate' should be 'some chocolate', 'vanished' should be 'vanishes'). Try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and keep sentences concise.

例: I usually carry some chocolate in my work bag and eat it during lunch. It helps boost my energy and reduces stress because dark chocolate contains antioxidants and nutrients.

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, but the phrasing can be improved for naturalness. Avoid unnecessary fillers like 'I think so no' and try to use more natural expressions. Also, use plural forms correctly ('chocolates' vs 'chocolate').

例: No, I didn't eat much chocolate as a child because my parents said it was bad for my teeth and stomach, so they rarely bought it for me.

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors and incomplete sentences. Avoid awkward phrases like 'according to me' and 'our Keith and kings' (likely a mispronunciation). Try to organize your ideas clearly and complete your sentences.

例: Chocolate is popular worldwide for many reasons. For example, people often give it as a gift to show affection. Also, dark chocolate has health benefits because it contains nutrients and antioxidants.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing (e.g., 'it's a little bitter taste, make me feel'). Try to use linking words and correct verb forms to improve fluency and clarity.

例: My favourite flavour is dark chocolate because it contains antioxidants and nutrients. Also, its slightly bitter taste makes me feel good and boosts my energy.

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, but some phrases can be more natural (e.g., 'As if I talk about myself' should be 'Speaking personally'). Also, avoid redundancy and keep sentences concise.

例: Yes, I think chocolate is a great gift to show affection. Personally, I often give chocolates to my family and friends on special occasions to strengthen our bonds.

× Definitely, I really love eating chocolates because it always gives me a lot of satisfaction and it always uplifts my mood so that's why all the time I prefer the dark chocolates as it contain a lot of antioxidants and nutrients that make me feel more happy.

✓ Definitely, I really love eating chocolate because it always gives me a lot of satisfaction and it always uplifts my mood so that's why all the time I prefer dark chocolate as it contains a lot of antioxidants and nutrients that make me feel happier.

The word 'chocolates' should be singular 'chocolate' when referring to the substance in general. Also, 'dark chocolates' should be 'dark chocolate' as a mass noun. The verb 'contain' must agree with the singular subject 'dark chocolate', so it should be 'contains'. 'More happy' is incorrect; the comparative form is 'happier'.

× Well, I prefer to carry a chocolate in my work bag on a daily basis.

✓ Well, I prefer to carry chocolate in my work bag on a daily basis.

When referring to chocolate in general, the article 'a' is unnecessary. Also, 'chocolate' is an uncountable noun here, so 'a chocolate' is incorrect unless referring to a specific chocolate bar. Removing 'a' makes the sentence correct.

× In the lunch time I really like to eat it because it always boosts my energy as the dark chocolate has different kind of antioxidants and nutrients which vanished my stress at my workplace.

✓ At lunchtime, I really like to eat it because it always boosts my energy as dark chocolate has different kinds of antioxidants and nutrients which vanish my stress at my workplace.

'In the lunch time' should be 'At lunchtime' for correct preposition and noun form. 'Different kind' should be plural 'different kinds' because it refers to multiple types. 'Vanished' is past tense and incorrect here; it should be present tense 'vanish' to match the context.

× Well, I think so no, because when I was a child I always used to convince my parents to buy me a chocolate for eating, but they told me that it is not good for my teeth as well as my stomach.

✓ Well, I think not, because when I was a child I always used to convince my parents to buy me chocolate to eat, but they told me that it was not good for my teeth as well as my stomach.

'I think so no' is awkward; 'I think not' is better. 'A chocolate' should be 'chocolate' as an uncountable noun. 'For eating' is better as 'to eat'. 'It is not good' should be past tense 'it was not good' to match the past context.

× Well, according to me there are plethora of reasons that's why chocolate is always famous around the world.

✓ Well, according to me there is a plethora of reasons; that's why chocolate is always famous around the world.

'Plethora' is singular and requires 'a' before it. The verb should be singular 'is' to agree with 'a plethora'. Also, a semicolon or period is needed to separate the two independent clauses.

× Firstly, it is used it can be used as a gift to show our affection to our Keith and kings.

✓ Firstly, it can be used as a gift to show our affection to our kith and kin.

The phrase 'it is used it can be used' is redundant; 'it can be used' suffices. 'Keith and kings' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'kith and kin', meaning friends and family.

× Apart from this, it has many benefits for our health like the dark chocolates and different kinds of nutrients.

✓ Apart from this, it has many health benefits, like dark chocolate and different kinds of nutrients.

The sentence structure is awkward. 'Benefits for our health' is better as 'health benefits'. 'The dark chocolates' should be 'dark chocolate' as a mass noun. The sentence is improved by reordering for clarity.

× So that's why they.

✓ So that's why it is popular.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. 'They' has no clear antecedent. Completing the sentence clarifies the meaning.

× Well, my favorite flavor of chocolate is dark chocolate as I really love to eat because it contains different kinds of antioxidants and nutrients.

✓ Well, my favorite flavor of chocolate is dark chocolate as I really love to eat it because it contains different kinds of antioxidants and nutrients.

The verb 'love' requires an object; adding 'it' clarifies what is loved. 'Different kinds' is correct plural form here.

× Apart from this, it's a little bitter taste, make me feel really good and always boost my energy, that's why I prefer to eat it.

✓ Apart from this, its a little bitter taste makes me feel really good and always boosts my energy; that's why I prefer to eat it.

'It's' (it is) should be 'its' (possessive). The subject 'taste' requires singular verbs 'makes' and 'boosts'. The sentence needs proper punctuation to separate clauses.

× Yes, definitely it is a great idea to use chocolates as a gift in order to show our affections to our loved ones.

✓ Yes, definitely it is a great idea to use chocolates as gifts in order to show our affection to our loved ones.

'Affections' should be singular 'affection' as it is an uncountable noun here. 'Chocolates as a gift' should be plural 'chocolates as gifts' to match plural 'chocolates'.

× As if I talk about myself, I always used to gift the chocolates on the special occasions to my family members and friends.

✓ As for myself, I always used to gift chocolates on special occasions to my family members and friends.

'As if I talk about myself' is incorrect; 'As for myself' is appropriate. 'The chocolates' is unnecessary; 'chocolates' suffices. 'On the special occasions' should be 'on special occasions'.

× That really helps me to maintain my bond with them.

✓ That really helps me maintain my bond with them.

The infinitive 'to maintain' is correct but can be simplified to 'maintain' after 'helps me' for smoother sentence flow.