Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，建议简化句子结构，避免重复表达，并使用更准确的词汇。

例: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it helps me relieve stress. Also, it improves my concentration when I study or work.

提案: 回答中时态使用不当，句子结构混乱，建议使用正确时态并简洁表达，同时避免重复和不连贯的句子。

例: I usually eat chocolate once or twice a week. I buy it from the supermarket because it helps me relax.

提案: 回答内容重复且语法错误较多，建议简化句子，明确表达原因，并注意语法和词汇的准确性。

例: Yes, I often ate chocolate when I was a kid in Germany because it was sweet and affordable.

提案: 回答逻辑不清，语法和词汇错误较多，建议理清思路，使用连贯的句子表达观点，并注意词汇的准确使用。

例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it is affordable and sweet. Many children enjoy it more than cookies or candies.

提案: 回答表达不清且重复，建议简洁明了地说明喜好并给出合理的理由。

例: My favourite flavour is milk chocolate because it tastes smooth and goes well with milk.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清，建议使用简洁的句子表达观点，并具体说明送巧克力作为礼物的场合和原因。

例: Yes, chocolate is a good gift because it is sweet and loved by many people, including children and colleagues.

× Yes, when I suffer from pressures, I will eat chocolate to reduce my pressures.

✓ Yes, when I suffer from pressure, I eat chocolate to reduce my pressure.

这里的时间状语是一般现在时，表示习惯动作，所以动词应使用一般现在时。并且pressure是不可数名词，不用复数形式。

× Yes, when I suffer from pressures, I will eat chocolate to reduce my pressures.

✓ Yes, when I suffer from pressure, I will eat chocolate to reduce my pressure.

pressure是不可数名词，不应该使用复数形式。

× Plus I also ate chocolates to focus on my study work or work it can be more patience in study.

✓ Plus I also eat chocolate to focus on my study or work so I can be more patient in studying.

这里描述的是习惯性动作，应使用一般现在时。patience是名词，需用形容词patient来修饰主语。study后面应使用动名词形式studying。

× Well, chocolate is too sweet, so I ate chocolates once a week or twice a week.

✓ Well, chocolate is too sweet, so I eat chocolates once or twice a week.

描述习惯性动作，应使用一般现在时。

× I always buy chocolates on the supermarket.

✓ I always buy chocolates at the supermarket.

表示在某个地点购物，介词应使用at而不是on。

× The supermarket chocolates with sweets and can reduce my pressures a lot.

✓ The supermarket chocolates are sweet and can reduce my pressure a lot.

pressure是不可数名词，不用复数形式。句子缺少谓语动词，需加are。

× Absolutely, When I was a kid I always ate chocolate in German, because the chocolate in Germany was sweet not but also sweet and not only sweet, but also it candies are not expensive.

✓ Absolutely, when I was a kid I always ate chocolate in Germany, because the chocolate in Germany was not only sweet, but also the candies were not expensive.

Germany是国家名词，不能用German代替。句子结构混乱，需调整顺序。candies是复数，谓语动词用were。

× because the chocolate in Germany was sweet not but also sweet and not only sweet, but also it candies are not expensive.

✓ because the chocolate in Germany was not only sweet, but also the candies were not expensive.

连词使用错误，应使用“not only... but also...”结构，且句子中重复且混乱，需简化。

× First chocolate was cheaper than San cookies or the candies.

✓ First, chocolate was cheaper than some cookies or candies.

San应为some，candies前不需要定冠词the。

× First chocolate was cheaper than San cookies or the candies.

✓ First, chocolate was cheaper than some cookies or candies.

some用于表示一些，适合此处表达。

× Plus the chocolate are sweet and the cakes are like it so much.

✓ Plus, the chocolate is sweet and children like cakes very much.

chocolate是不可数名词，谓语用is。cakes后面表达喜欢，应改为主语children like cakes。

× Plus the chocolate are sweet and the cakes are like it so much.

✓ Plus, the chocolate is sweet and children like cakes very much.

it指代不明确，应改为children作为主语。

× Although the sweet it was sweet but many children will buy.

✓ Although it is sweet, many children still buy it.

although和but不能同时使用，且时态应统一。

× I always ate the milk chocolate because when I ate the milk chocolate, it's nice to drink milk.

✓ I always eat milk chocolate because when I eat milk chocolate, it is nice to drink milk.

描述习惯动作，应使用一般现在时。

× I always ate the milk chocolate because when I ate the milk chocolate, it's nice to drink milk.

✓ I always eat milk chocolate because when I eat milk chocolate, it is nice to drink milk.

it指代不明确，且时态应统一。

× Absolutely use to use chocolate as a gift.

✓ Absolutely, I use chocolate as a gift.

句子结构不完整，去掉多余的to。

× It is romantic to give to be a gift to the companies or the cop.

✓ It is romantic to give chocolate as a gift to companies or colleagues.

companies和cop用词不当，cop应为colleagues（同事）。

× Next it can be the job to give gift to the children.

✓ Next, it can be good to give gifts to children.

句子结构不清晰，改为表达给孩子们送礼物是好的。

× Next it can be the job to give gift to the children.

✓ Next, it can be good to give gifts to children.

gift应使用复数形式gifts。