Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cavabınızda "uh" və "umm" kimi sözləri azaltmaq və cümlələri daha təbii və axıcı etmək üçün çalışın. Məsələn, "department hormones" ifadəsi səhvdir, əvəzinə "dopamine hormones" demək daha düzgündür. Cümlələrinizi qısa və aydın saxlayın.

例: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it makes me feel happy. Also, it increases dopamine levels in my brain, which improves my mood.

提案: Cümlələrinizi daha əlaqəli etmək üçün keçid sözlərindən istifadə edin və fikirlərinizi daha aydın ifadə edin. Məsələn, "Actually, I eat chocolate every day because I sometimes feel depressed, so it helps boost my mood."

例: I eat chocolate every day because when I feel a bit down, it helps improve my mood.

提案: Zaman formalarına diqqət yetirin və fikrinizi daha aydın ifadə edin. "I'm sweetest person" ifadəsi səhvdir, əvəzinə "I have a sweet tooth" deyə bilərsiniz. Məsələn, "I used to eat more chocolate when I was a kid because I have a sweet tooth."

例: When I was a child, I ate a lot of chocolate because I have a sweet tooth.

提案: Cümlələrinizi daha düzgün qurun və ifadələrinizi aydınlaşdırın. "Feel under the moon" ifadəsi mənasızdır, əvəzinə "feel happy" və ya "feel good" deyə bilərsiniz. Məsələn, "Chocolate is popular worldwide because it boosts dopamine, making people feel happy."

例: Chocolate is popular all over the world because it increases dopamine levels, which makes people feel happy and satisfied.

提案: Cümlələrinizi tamamlamaq və daha aydın ifadə etmək üçün çalışın. "Don't give us" ifadəsi natamamdır. Məsələn, "I like dark chocolate because it is healthier than other types and doesn't contain too much sugar."

例: My favourite flavour is dark chocolate because it is healthier than other types and contains less sugar.

提案: Cümlələrinizi daha təbii və axıcı etmək üçün keçid sözlərindən istifadə edin və fikirlərinizi aydın ifadə edin. Məsələn, "In my opinion, giving chocolate as a gift is a good idea because it shows thoughtfulness."

例: I think giving chocolate as a gift is a great idea because it is thoughtful and most people enjoy it.

× eating chocolate increase my, uh, department hormones.

✓ eating chocolate increases my, uh, dopamine hormones.

The subject 'eating chocolate' is singular, so the verb should be 'increases' to agree in number. Also, 'department hormones' seems to be a typo; the correct term is 'dopamine hormones'.

× Actually, I eat every day.

✓ Actually, I eat chocolate every day.

The sentence lacks the object 'chocolate' which is necessary for clarity. Adding 'chocolate' completes the sentence meaningfully.

× Also I can say that I feel depressed.

✓ Also, I can say that I feel depressed.

A comma is needed after 'Also' to separate the introductory word from the main clause for correct sentence structure.

× I eat more chocolate for boosting my mood.

✓ I eat more chocolate to boost my mood.

The phrase 'for boosting' is incorrect here; the infinitive 'to boost' correctly expresses purpose.

× Did you often eat chocolate when you were a kid?

✓ Did you often eat chocolate when you were a kid?

This sentence is correct; no correction needed.

× I can see that I eat more chocolate when I was a kid because umm, I'm sweetest person.

✓ I can see that I ate more chocolate when I was a kid because, umm, I'm a sweet person.

The verb 'eat' should be in past tense 'ate' to match 'when I was a kid'. Also, 'sweetest' is a superlative adjective and incorrect here; 'sweet' is appropriate. The article 'a' is needed before 'sweet person'.

× Chocolate yes is popular around the world because chocolate in boost our dopamine hormones and when eating chocolate will feel under the moon.

✓ Yes, chocolate is popular around the world because it boosts our dopamine hormones, and when eating chocolate, we feel over the moon.

The sentence has pronoun errors: 'chocolate yes' should be 'Yes, chocolate'; 'chocolate in boost' should be 'it boosts'; 'will feel under the moon' is incorrect idiomatically and grammatically; 'we feel over the moon' is the correct expression.

× I'm passionate about, umm, dark chocolate because, uh, dark chocolate is very beneficial for others other type and dark chocolate, uh, don't give us.

✓ I'm passionate about, umm, dark chocolate because, uh, dark chocolate is much more beneficial than other types, and dark chocolate, uh, doesn't harm us.

The phrase 'beneficial for others other type' is incorrect; it should be 'more beneficial than other types'. Also, 'don't give us' is incomplete and unclear; 'doesn't harm us' is a clearer expression.

× Uh, in my opinion, giving chocolate as a gift is very, uh, good present for them because, uh, it's thoughtful gifts for me.

✓ Uh, in my opinion, giving chocolate as a gift is a very good present for them because, uh, it's a thoughtful gift for me.

The sentence has plural and singular mismatches: 'good present' needs an article 'a'; 'thoughtful gifts' should be singular 'gift' to agree with 'it's'.