Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答不够自然且有语法错误，表达不清晰。建议简洁明了地表达观点，避免重复和犹豫词汇。

例: No, I don't like eating chocolate because I am currently on a diet and want to avoid high-calorie foods.

提案: 回答不连贯且有语法错误，表达不清楚。建议直接回答频率，并简洁说明原因。

例: I usually eat chocolate about once a month because I am trying to maintain a healthy diet.

提案: 回答有一定内容，但表达重复且不够流畅。建议使用连词连接句子，丰富细节。

例: Yes, I often ate chocolate as a child because it was considered a special treat from foreign countries and a symbol of fashion.

提案: 表达不够清晰，语法和用词有误。建议明确原因并使用恰当的连接词。

例: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes delicious and its production process is fascinating to many people.

提案: 回答含糊且有语法错误，表达不清晰。建议直接说明喜欢的口味并简要解释。

例: My favorite flavor is plain chocolate because I prefer the original taste without any added ingredients.

提案: 回答内容有逻辑，但表达不够流畅且有重复。建议使用连词使句子更连贯，避免重复。

例: I think chocolate can be a good gift for casual occasions like festivals, but it may not be suitable for very formal events.

× Eating too much chocolate may may make maybe so heavy.

✓ Eating too much chocolate may make me feel very heavy.

句中“may may make maybe”重复且用法不当，正确用法是使用一个情态动词“may”表示可能性，且后面应接动词原形。这里还缺少主语“me”，使句子完整。

× I didn't count it.

✓ I haven't counted it.

此处谈论的是频率，使用现在完成时更合适，表示到目前为止的经历或情况。

× Maybe one once a month.

✓ Maybe once a month.

“one once”重复且不正确，正确表达频率应为“once a month”。

× Yes, because I'm going.

✓ Yes, because I'm dieting.

“I'm going”不完整且不符合语境，正确表达正在节食应使用“I'm dieting”。

× I'm just on diet and I didn't eat Ellen and snacks actually.

✓ I'm just on a diet and I don't eat candy and snacks actually.

“on diet”缺少冠词，应为“on a diet”；“didn't eat”时态不符，描述习惯应使用一般现在时“don't eat”；“Ellen”应为“candy”或“sweets”，这里推测为拼写错误。

× When I was a kid, I think that chocolate was so different because it was coming from the foreign country.

✓ When I was a kid, I thought that chocolate was very special because it came from foreign countries.

描述过去的想法应使用过去时“thought”；“was coming”应改为一般过去时“came”；“the foreign country”应改为复数“foreign countries”或去掉冠词。

× And so I think when I was young, I think it was a symbol of fashion.

✓ And so I thought when I was young, it was a symbol of fashion.

描述过去的想法应使用过去时“thought”，保持时态一致。

× I think maybe it is interesting and the way it produced is also amazing for most of us people, so maybe they will have the interest to have a try about this chocolate.

✓ I think maybe it is interesting and the way it is produced is also amazing for most of us, so maybe people will be interested in trying this chocolate.

“the way it produced”缺少被动语态，应为“the way it is produced”；“have the interest to have a try about”表达不自然，应改为“be interested in trying”；“most of us people”中“people”多余。

× My favorite flavor is just the original so which means I didn't like and other elements in the Chuck mat.

✓ My favorite flavor is just the original, which means I don't like any other elements in the chocolate.

“didn't like”时态不符，应为一般现在时“don't like”；“Chuck mat”应为“chocolate”；句子结构不清晰，需调整。

× So I just want want the arrangement of flavor.

✓ So I just want the original flavor.

“want want”重复；“arrangement of flavor”表达不准确，应直接说“original flavor”。

× Actually I think it is dependent on the situation, which means if you just wanna give your friends a kind of festival gift gift, maybe truck rate is a good choice.

✓ Actually, I think it depends on the situation, which means if you just want to give your friends a kind of festival gift, maybe chocolate is a good choice.

“wanna”非正式，应改为“want to”；“dependent on”应改为“depends on”；“gift gift”重复；“truck rate”疑为拼写错误，应为“chocolate”。

× But if it's it is a very strict occasion.

✓ But if it is a very formal occasion,

句子结构不完整且重复，应简化为“if it is a very formal occasion”。

× Chocolate is not. So it's not so formal I think.

✓ Chocolate is not suitable. So I think it's not very formal.

“Chocolate is not”不完整，应补充谓语；“not so formal”表达不够准确，应为“not very formal”。