Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误，如动词形式错误（"I always eating"应为"I always eat"），句子结构不够清晰，表达略显重复。建议注意动词时态和形式的正确使用，简洁明了地表达观点，同时避免冗余。

例: Yes, I really like eating chocolate, especially dark chocolate. For instance, when I am doing boring tasks like reading or writing proposals, I often eat chocolate to make the work more enjoyable.

提案: 回答内容较为完整，但表达不够流畅，存在语法和用词错误，如"limit my eating weight"不准确。建议使用更自然的表达方式，并注意词汇的准确性。

例: It depends on my workload. If I work every day, I usually eat chocolate daily, but I try to limit the amount because eating too much is unhealthy.

提案: 回答不完整且语法错误较多，如时态错误和句子未完成。建议完整表达观点，注意时态一致，并避免句子中断。

例: No, I didn't eat chocolate often as a child because it was very expensive in my city. I rarely had the chance to enjoy it.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清，如"it's taste"应为"its taste"，句子结构混乱，且出现无关内容（"tasty to the chicken"）。建议理清思路，使用准确表达，避免无关信息。

例: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because of its delicious taste and variety. For example, dark chocolate has a slightly bitter flavor, while white chocolate is creamy and sweet.

提案: 回答中表达不够清晰，存在语法错误和逻辑混乱，如"reduce the sugar, the taste of sugar"不明确。建议简洁明了地描述喜好，并用准确的词汇表达味道。

例: My favourite flavour is dark chocolate because it has a slightly bitter taste that balances the sweetness, making it very enjoyable.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不自然，如"as myself"和"send my send some chocolate"。建议使用更自然的表达方式，注意句子结构和词汇选择。

例: Yes, I think chocolate makes a great gift. I often give chocolates to my friends because the packaging is beautiful and it symbolizes sweetness in our friendship.

× I always eating chocolate, especially the black chocolate.

✓ I always eat chocolate, especially black chocolate.

这里的动词应该用一般现在时的动词原形，因为主语是第一人称单数，表示习惯动作。'always eating' 是错误的动词形式。

× when I have sometimes to do my own things such as reading or writing something, writing a proposal, it is so boring.

✓ when I sometimes have to do my own things such as reading or writing something, writing a proposal, it is so boring.

'sometimes' 应该放在动词 'have' 前面，表示频率副词的位置错误。

× So this time I always want to eating a chocolate with my work.

✓ So this time I always want to eat chocolate while working.

'want to' 后面应该接动词原形，不能用动名词形式。

× I often eat the chocolate every day, but I have to limit my eating weight of that because I know that it is a little bit unhealthy if I eat it too much.

✓ I often eat chocolate every day, but I have to limit how much I eat because I know it is a little bit unhealthy if I eat too much.

'the chocolate' 不需要定冠词，且表达限制量时用法不当，改为更自然的表达。

× when I'm a child the chocolate is really expensive in our city and country, so I didn't have much chance to eat it.

✓ when I was a child, chocolate was really expensive in our city and country, so I didn't have much chance to eat it.

描述过去的情况，动词时态应为过去时，'I'm' 应改为 'I was'，'is' 应改为 'was'。

× However, if I have to won the 1st grade, my.

✓ However, if I won the 1st grade, my...

句子结构不完整且时态错误，'have to won' 是错误的表达，应改为 'won'。

× I think maybe because it's taste, you know they are various chocolate such as black chocolate, white chocolate for example, the black chocolate may taste really a little bit sour and the white chocolate is taste like the milk which differ in various ways and tasty to the chicken.

✓ I think maybe because of its taste. You know, there are various chocolates such as black chocolate and white chocolate. For example, black chocolate may taste a little bit sour, and white chocolate tastes like milk, which differs in various ways and is tasty.

'it's taste' 应为 'its taste'，'they are various chocolate' 应为 'there are various chocolates'，动词时态和主谓一致错误，句子结构混乱。

× the black chocolate may taste really a little bit sour and the white chocolate is taste like the milk which differ in various ways and tasty to the chicken.

✓ black chocolate may taste a little bit sour, and white chocolate tastes like milk, which differs in various ways and is tasty.

'really a little bit sour' 形容词顺序错误，应去掉 'really'，'is taste' 应为 'tastes'，'tasty to the chicken' 不合适，改为 'is tasty'。

× Absolutely. The dark chocolate, you know it, it always has a little bit bitter and sour, which reduce the sugar, the taste of sugar and it is always so sweet and make me a little addicted to this.

✓ Absolutely. Dark chocolate, you know, always has a little bit of bitterness and sourness, which reduces the taste of sugar. It is always so sweet and makes me a little addicted to it.

'has a little bit bitter and sour' 应改为 'has a little bit of bitterness and sourness'，动词单复数和主谓一致错误，'make me addicted to this' 应为 'makes me addicted to it'。

× Actually, as myself, I always send my send some chocolate to my friends because I think it is not only really beautiful of the package and the size, but also it is really a symbol of sweet between our relationship.

✓ Actually, I always send some chocolate to my friends because I think it is not only really beautiful in its packaging and size, but also a symbol of sweetness in our relationship.

'as myself' 用法错误，'send my send' 重复，'beautiful of the package' 应为 'beautiful in its packaging'，'symbol of sweet' 应为 'symbol of sweetness'，'between our relationship' 应为 'in our relationship'。