Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add one or two specific reasons with linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: Yes, I love eating chocolate because it has a rich and sweet taste that I enjoy. Since childhood, I have liked trying different types and brands, which makes it a delightful treat for me.

提案: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. Use linking words to explain your habits clearly and avoid unnecessary repetition. Also, try to complete your sentences fully for better clarity.

例: I eat chocolate occasionally, mostly when I crave it. However, I try to avoid eating it frequently because it contains a lot of sugar, which is not healthy.

提案: Avoid asking questions back to the examiner. Structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and support it with specific details using linking words to improve coherence.

例: Yes, I used to eat chocolates daily when I was a kid because my dad often bought them for me. Additionally, I received chocolates as rewards for completing my homework and other activities.

提案: Make your answer more concise and avoid hesitation sounds. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically and provide clear reasons why chocolate is popular globally.

例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because children love its sweet taste. Moreover, it is often given as a gift or used to comfort children, which increases its popularity.

提案: Avoid repeating phrases and try to express your answer clearly and directly. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: My favourite flavour of chocolate is the classic Dairy Milk by Terry's. I usually enjoy it whenever I crave chocolate or receive it as a gift from friends.

提案: Try to avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Start with a clear topic sentence and support it with a reason using linking words to make your answer more effective.

例: Yes, chocolates make good gifts because they are often seen as a symbol of love and affection. Therefore, giving chocolates is a thoughtful way to express your feelings to others.

× Yes, I love to eat chocolates as eating chocolates was my favorite favorite thing to do in my free time since from my childhood and I also feel likes the taste of chocolates very much and Li like to enjoy the different kind of chocolates and different brands of chocolates.

✓ Yes, I love eating chocolates as eating chocolates has been my favorite thing to do in my free time since my childhood and I also like the taste of chocolates very much and I like to enjoy different kinds and brands of chocolates.

The phrase 'love to eat' is acceptable but 'love eating' is more natural here. 'Was' should be 'has been' to indicate a continuing preference from childhood to present. 'Feel likes' is incorrect; it should be 'like'. 'Li' is a typo and corrected to 'I'. 'Different kind' should be plural 'different kinds' to match plural 'brands'. The sentence is corrected for verb forms and plural usage.

× I often eat chocolate whenever I crave for the chocolate, but most of the time I avoid to eat chocolates as that as they contain many SH, many sug, many sugar ingredients.

✓ I often eat chocolate whenever I crave chocolate, but most of the time I avoid eating chocolates as they contain a lot of sugar ingredients.

The phrase 'crave for' is incorrect; 'crave' does not require 'for'. 'Avoid to eat' is incorrect; 'avoid' should be followed by gerund 'eating'. 'Many SH, many sug' seems like incomplete or incorrect words and is replaced with 'a lot of sugar ingredients' for clarity.

× Yes. Are you often eat chocolates? Whenever When I was a kid and I used to eat chocolates daily on the daily basis when I was a kid and my dad used to bring chocolates for me and I just also received chocolates as a gift after completing my homework or doing several activities at home.

✓ Yes. I often ate chocolates whenever I was a kid and I used to eat chocolates daily. My dad used to bring chocolates for me and I also received chocolates as gifts after completing my homework or doing several activities at home.

The question 'Are you often eat chocolates?' is incorrect and removed as it seems misplaced. 'Used to eat chocolates daily on the daily basis' is redundant; simplified to 'used to eat chocolates daily'. 'Just also received' is awkward; corrected to 'also received'. 'Chocolates as a gift' changed to plural 'gifts' to match context.

× Chocolate is popular around the world as chocolates are the most favorable, uh most favorite things of the children's and are also recommended to the children's in their early ages and are given to them as a gifts and to avoid the avoid the children from the distractions and stop them from crying, mostly chocolates are given to them.

✓ Chocolate is popular around the world as chocolates are the most favorite things of children and are also recommended to children in their early ages and are given to them as gifts to avoid distractions and stop them from crying; mostly chocolates are given to them.

'The children's' is incorrect; it should be 'children' without apostrophe as plural noun. 'As a gifts' is incorrect; 'as gifts' is correct. The sentence is restructured for clarity and correct pronoun and article usage.

× My favorite flavor of chocolate is a chocolate is the brand is the brand of Terry milk flavor, the normal Dairy Milk flavor.

✓ My favorite flavor of chocolate is the brand Terry's Dairy Milk flavor, the normal Dairy Milk flavor.

The phrase 'a chocolate is the brand is the brand of Terry milk flavor' is redundant and incorrect. Corrected to 'the brand Terry's Dairy Milk flavor' with proper article usage and brand name spelling.

× And I usually like to eat that choc eat that chocolate whenever I crave for or I just normally receive that chocolate as a gift from many of my friends.

✓ And I usually like to eat that chocolate whenever I crave it or I normally receive that chocolate as a gift from many of my friends.

'Crave for' is incorrect; 'crave' does not require 'for'. 'Choc eat that chocolate' seems like a typo and corrected to 'eat that chocolate'. The sentence is corrected for clarity and proper preposition use.

× Yes, it is good to use chocolates as gifts to other as chocolates are considered as the part of the as considered as the sign of the love to express the love to others.

✓ Yes, it is good to use chocolates as gifts to others as chocolates are considered a sign of love to express love to others.

'Gifts to other' should be 'gifts to others' (plural). 'Considered as the part of the as considered as the sign' is redundant and incorrect; simplified to 'considered a sign'. The sentence is corrected for pronoun and article usage and clarity.

× So chocolates are quite a good, quite a good for quite a good things to give to others.

✓ So chocolates are quite good things to give to others.

The phrase 'quite a good, quite a good for quite a good things' is repetitive and incorrect. Corrected to 'quite good things' for proper adjective use and sentence clarity.