Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート
会話
Part 1
試験官
Do you like eating chocolate? Why or why not?
受験者
Yes I do. My favorite is milk. It's so tasty. Of course I want to say that dark chocolate is so important for our brain and memory. It helps us to concentrate and don't feel hungry sometimes.
試験官
How often do you eat chocolate?
受験者
Not really often because sometimes it's really harmful for our health. I can eat it maybe twice a week. I think it's really normal and not bad for my health.
試験官
Did you often eat chocolate when you were a kid?
受験者
I think that I didn't eat chocolate very often when I was a child because my parents were against of it and I'm angry with their with their opinion because I still remember about harmful of such threats and.
試験官
Why do you think chocolate is popular around the world?
受験者
Absolutely, yes, because everybody wants to eat some chocolate sometimes, so we can buy it everywhere, maybe in the market or some shops.
試験官
What's your favourite flavour of chocolate?
受験者
My favorite flavor is strawberry. That's really delicious. Of course I can eat something else, but maybe that's my really beautiful.
試験官
Do you think it is good to use chocolate as gifts to others?
受験者
Yes, I think it's a really good present, but maybe we can choose something else. For example, we can buy chocolate and flowers, for example, or chocolate and some pleasant gift.
評価
総合
Part 1
Do you like eating chocolate? Why or why not?
スコア: 70.0提案: Спробуйте уникати граматичних помилок і покращити зв'язність відповідей, використовуючи більш точні вирази. Наприклад, замість "don't feel hungry sometimes" краще сказати "helps reduce hunger sometimes". Також уникайте надмірної інформації, яка не повністю відповідає на питання.
例: Yes, I like eating chocolate, especially milk chocolate because it tastes sweet and creamy. Additionally, I believe dark chocolate is beneficial for the brain as it can improve memory and help with concentration.
How often do you eat chocolate?
スコア: 75.0提案: Покращуйте логічність і точність відповідей, використовуючи зв'язки між реченнями. Наприклад, використовуйте слова на кшталт "because" або "however" для кращої структури. Також уникайте повторів і уточнюйте частоту вживання.
例: I don't eat chocolate very often because it can be unhealthy. However, I usually have it about twice a week, which I think is a reasonable amount.
Did you often eat chocolate when you were a kid?
スコア: 60.0提案: Зверніть увагу на граматику і структуру речень, уникайте повторів і неповних думок. Також намагайтеся чітко висловлювати свої почуття і думки, наприклад, пояснюючи, чому ви були незадоволені думкою батьків.
例: I didn't eat chocolate often as a child because my parents didn't allow it. I was a bit upset about their opinion since I knew chocolate could be harmful, but I still wanted to enjoy it sometimes.
Why do you think chocolate is popular around the world?
スコア: 65.0提案: Покращуйте точність і розгорнутість відповідей, уникайте загальних фраз. Використовуйте зв'язки для логічного викладу думок і надавайте конкретні причини популярності шоколаду.
例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because many people enjoy its sweet taste. Moreover, it is widely available in markets and shops, making it easy to buy.
What's your favourite flavour of chocolate?
スコア: 60.0提案: Уникайте незрозумілих або неправильних виразів, таких як "that's my really beautiful". Краще чітко і природно висловлюйте свої вподобання, додаючи коротке пояснення.
例: My favorite chocolate flavor is strawberry because it has a sweet and fruity taste. Although I like other flavors too, strawberry is the one I enjoy the most.
Do you think it is good to use chocolate as gifts to others?
スコア: 70.0提案: Уникайте повторів, наприклад, слова "for example" двічі поспіль. Використовуйте більш різноманітну лексику і чітко формулюйте думки, щоб відповідь була більш природною і логічною.
例: Yes, chocolate makes a great gift. However, sometimes it's nice to combine it with other presents like flowers or a small thoughtful item.
文法
× It helps us to concentrate and don't feel hungry sometimes.
✓ It helps us to concentrate and not feel hungry sometimes.
The verb 'don't' is incorrect after 'helps us to'. The correct form is 'not feel' to maintain parallel structure and correct infinitive usage.
× my parents were against of it
✓ my parents were against it
The preposition 'of' is unnecessary after 'against'. The correct phrase is 'against it'.
× I'm angry with their with their opinion
✓ I'm angry with their opinion
The phrase 'with their with their opinion' repeats 'with their' unnecessarily. The correct phrase is 'angry with their opinion'.
× I still remember about harmful of such threats and.
✓ I still remember the harmfulness of such threats.
The phrase 'remember about harmful of such threats' is incorrect. 'Remember' does not require 'about' here, and 'harmful' should be a noun form 'harmfulness' or rephrased. Also, the sentence was incomplete and needed correction.
× maybe that's my really beautiful.
✓ maybe that's really beautiful to me.
The phrase 'my really beautiful' is incorrect. 'Beautiful' is an adjective and needs to be linked properly. Adding 'to me' clarifies the meaning.
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