Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ваш ответ должен быть более естественным и грамматически правильным. Избегайте повторений и старайтесь использовать связующие слова для логичности. Например, начните с прямого ответа, затем объясните причину с деталями.

例: Yes, I like eating chocolate because I have a sweet tooth. Although I know it's not very healthy, I find it hard to resist its taste.

提案: Старайтесь строить предложения грамматически правильно и использовать связующие слова для плавности речи. Также избегайте повторений и уточняйте детали.

例: I try to eat chocolate every day if possible, even though I know it can harm my teeth and health.

提案: Используйте правильные времена и грамматические формы. Добавьте связующие слова для логичности и уточните детали, чтобы ответ был более информативным.

例: When I was a kid, I used to eat chocolate every day, which unfortunately caused my teeth to become discolored.

提案: Ваш ответ должен быть более конкретным и логичным. Используйте связующие слова и объясните причины популярности шоколада более подробно.

例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes delicious and brings joy to many people.

提案: Используйте правильные названия и грамматику. Дайте чёткий ответ и объясните, почему вам нравится этот вид шоколада.

例: I don't have a single favorite flavor, but I really enjoy small chocolates called 'Raffaello' because they are sweet and creamy.

提案: Сформулируйте ответ более связно и грамматически правильно. Объясните, почему шоколад является хорошим подарком, используя связующие слова.

例: Yes, I think chocolate is a popular gift because it symbolizes love and many people enjoy receiving it.

× I like sweet products because I'm kid and I know it do me bad.

✓ I like sweet products because I'm a kid and I know they do me harm.

The pronoun 'I'm kid' is missing the article 'a' before 'kid'. Also, 'it do me bad' is incorrect; 'it' should be 'they' referring to 'sweet products' (plural), and 'do me bad' should be 'do me harm' or 'are bad for me'.

× It's bad for me, but I can't stop because I really love sweet products.

✓ It's bad for me, but I can't stop because I really love sweet products.

No correction needed here as the sentence is grammatically correct.

× If I can, I eat it every day.

✓ If I can, I eat it every day.

No correction needed; the quantifier usage is appropriate.

× Yes I know it very bad for my teeth and my healthy but I can't stop.

✓ Yes, I know it is very bad for my teeth and my health, but I can't stop.

Missing 'is' after 'know it'; 'healthy' is an adjective, but the noun 'health' is needed here.

× When I was a kid I ate chocolate every day and after that my teeth being dark color because chocolate kill my teeth.

✓ When I was a kid, I ate chocolate every day and after that my teeth became dark in color because chocolate killed my teeth.

'Being' should be past tense 'became'; 'kill' should be past tense 'killed' to match the past context.

× Because people like enjoy or something and chocolate is very popular.

✓ Because people like to enjoy it or something, and chocolate is very popular.

The verb 'like' should be followed by 'to enjoy' or 'enjoying'; 'or something' is vague but kept; 'it' refers to chocolate and is needed.

× I don't have one chocolate which I love most but I really love small chocolate is Rafael name and is sweet cockles.

✓ I don't have one chocolate that I love most, but I really love small chocolates named Rafael, and they are sweet cookies.

'Which' should be 'that' for defining clause; 'small chocolate is Rafael name' is incorrect, corrected to 'small chocolates named Rafael'; 'cockles' likely intended as 'cookies'.

× Yes, of course, and a lot of people give chocolate. How present it most popular and men give a girl chocolate. I think it's love.

✓ Yes, of course, a lot of people give chocolate as presents. Presents are very popular, and men give girls chocolate. I think it shows love.

'How present it most popular' is incorrect; corrected to 'a lot of people give chocolate as presents'; 'men give a girl chocolate' corrected to 'men give girls chocolate'; 'I think it's love' clarified to 'I think it shows love'.