Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by avoiding repetition and grammatical errors. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically and keep your sentences concise and relevant.

例: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it helps me relieve stress and relax after a busy day. For example, when I feel tired, eating chocolate gives me energy and boosts my confidence.

提案: Improve your answer by using clearer sentence structures and linking words. Also, be specific about the types of chocolate you prefer and why.

例: I eat chocolate every day, especially at work. For instance, I usually have a piece of organic marshmallow chocolate because it helps me relax and reduce stress during busy hours.

提案: Focus on using past tense correctly and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to contrast past and present habits clearly.

例: When I was a child, I didn't eat chocolate often because it was expensive and my family couldn't afford it. However, now that I work, I eat chocolate daily to help me relax after work.

提案: Make your answer more coherent by using proper linking words and clearer sentence structures. Avoid grammatical mistakes and be specific about reasons.

例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it makes people feel happy and reduces stress. For example, eating chocolate can clear the mind and provide energy throughout the day.

提案: Clarify your answer by using correct grammar and avoid repetition. Use linking words to explain why you like that flavour and how it affects you.

例: My favorite chocolate flavor is milk chocolate mixed with jam because it tastes sweet and makes me feel happy. This helps me stay motivated and focused during the day.

提案: Make your answer more natural by avoiding repetition and improving sentence flow. Use linking words to explain reasons and give clear examples.

例: Definitely, giving chocolate as a gift is a great idea. If the person loves chocolate, it can boost their confidence and make them feel special. For example, gifting green or violet-flavored chocolate can reflect their unique taste.

× Chocolate helps us remove the stress.

✓ Chocolate helps us remove stress.

The word 'stress' is an uncountable noun and does not require the definite article 'the' before it in this context.

× It enables us to wind down whatever you're doing in all of the day.

✓ It enables us to wind down whatever we're doing throughout the day.

The phrase 'whatever you're doing in all of the day' is awkward and incorrect. 'Whatever we're doing throughout the day' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× It makes me having self confident myself.

✓ It makes me feel confident about myself.

The verb 'makes' should be followed by the base form of the verb, not the '-ing' form. Also, 'self confident' should be 'confident about myself' for correct expression.

× if I'm try if I'm tired and I will eat chocolates, it makes me.

✓ If I'm tired, I will eat chocolates; it makes me feel better.

The sentence has tense inconsistency and incomplete structure. 'I'm try' is incorrect; it should be 'I'm tired'. Also, the sentence needs completion for clarity.

× I eat chocolate daily.

✓ I eat chocolate daily.

This sentence is correct and fits the present simple tense for habitual actions.

× if I'm at work, I'm eating one piece of chocolate and it makes me wind down all the stress that I have in my work.

✓ If I'm at work, I eat one piece of chocolate, and it helps me wind down all the stress I have at work.

For habitual actions, present simple tense ('I eat') is appropriate rather than present continuous ('I'm eating'). Also, 'helps me wind down' is clearer than 'makes me wind down'. 'In my work' should be 'at work'.

× Usually I will be taking the marshmallow chocolate and with chocolate made in organic.

✓ Usually, I take marshmallow chocolate and organic chocolate.

The phrase 'will be taking' is awkward here; simple present 'take' is better for habitual actions. 'With chocolate made in organic' is incorrect; it should be 'organic chocolate'. Also, unnecessary prepositions are removed.

× When I was a kid, I'm not often eating chocolate because chocolate previously was expensive and I don't have a money to buy chocolate at the store.

✓ When I was a kid, I did not often eat chocolate because chocolate was expensive, and I did not have money to buy it at the store.

Past tense should be used consistently ('did not often eat', 'did not have'). 'I'm not often eating' is incorrect for past habitual action. 'A money' is incorrect; 'money' is uncountable and does not need 'a'.

× But currently with that I'm working now I'm eating chocolate daily as it helps me wind down all the stress that they have from my work.

✓ But now that I am working, I eat chocolate daily as it helps me wind down all the stress I have from my work.

Present simple tense 'I eat' is appropriate for habitual actions. 'They have' is incorrect; it should be 'I have' to refer to the speaker's stress.

× Chocolate is popular around the world because it enabled a person to feel happy, remove their stress on the whole day, and it makes them feel self-confidence.

✓ Chocolate is popular around the world because it enables a person to feel happy, remove their stress throughout the day, and makes them feel confident.

The present tense 'enables' is appropriate here because the statement is general truth. 'Enabled' is past tense and incorrect. 'On the whole day' should be 'throughout the day'. 'Feel self-confidence' should be 'feel confident'.

× For instance, eating chocolates may help clear out the mind and as well as makes the person and having energized throughout the day.

✓ For instance, eating chocolates may help clear the mind and also make the person feel energized throughout the day.

The phrase 'and as well as makes the person and having energized' is incorrect. 'Make' should be base form after 'may help'. 'Having energized' is incorrect; it should be 'feel energized'.

× My favorite flavor of chocolate is with with jam and with in mixed with milk.

✓ My favorite flavor of chocolate is jam mixed with milk.

The phrase 'with with jam and with in mixed with milk' is incorrect and redundant. Correct preposition use is 'jam mixed with milk'.

× It's and I want it to taste so sweet so that it makes me feel happy as as well as it makes me having amazing feeling so that I can work throughout the day.

✓ I want it to taste very sweet so that it makes me feel happy and gives me an amazing feeling so that I can work throughout the day.

'So sweet' should be 'very sweet' for correct adverb use. 'Makes me having' is incorrect; it should be 'gives me' or 'makes me have'. Also, 'as as well as' is redundant.

× Definitely. Oh yes, it's good to give the chocolate as a gift to others because especially if the person loves the chocolates, it makes me makes them feel confident and amazing throughout the whole day and it reflects who they are.

✓ Definitely. Oh yes, it's good to give chocolate as a gift to others because especially if the person loves chocolates, it makes them feel confident and amazing throughout the whole day and reflects who they are.

'It makes me makes them' is incorrect; 'makes them' is correct. 'The chocolate' should be 'chocolate' as a general noun. Modal verb usage is not directly involved here but sentence structure is corrected.

× For example, if the person loves green chocolate or Violet chocolate.

✓ For example, if the person loves green chocolate or violet chocolate.

'Violet' should not be capitalized as it is an adjective here describing chocolate.