Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear but a bit repetitive and slightly long. Try to make your response more concise and avoid repeating the same idea. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. For example, instead of repeating 'I like vanilla chocolates', you can say 'especially vanilla-flavored ones'.

例: Yes, I really enjoy eating chocolate, especially vanilla-flavored ones. I often have it in cakes or milkshakes. Moreover, I like to eat chocolate after spicy food because it helps balance the taste.

提案: Your answer has some repetition and minor grammatical errors. Try to avoid repeating your favorite flavor again and focus on answering the frequency clearly. Also, clarify unclear phrases like 'go on a trade'. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: I usually eat chocolate two or three times a week, but sometimes I have it more often, up to four or five times. I especially enjoy vanilla-flavored chocolate, which I often add to my milkshakes or carry with me as a snack when I travel.

提案: Your answer is good but has some redundancy and minor grammar issues. Avoid repeating 'daily basis' and improve sentence structure. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to connect ideas logically.

例: Yes, I used to eat a lot of chocolates as a child because my father often brought different kinds home from work. Therefore, I had the chance to enjoy chocolates almost every day, which was a wonderful experience.

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and incomplete. Try to structure your response better by starting with a clear topic sentence, then giving specific reasons with examples. Also, avoid incomplete sentences and use proper linking words.

例: In my opinion, chocolate is popular worldwide because of its delicious taste. Additionally, people often eat or gift chocolates during special occasions like birthdays and weddings, which adds to its popularity.

提案: Your answer has some incomplete sentences and unclear parts. Try to express your ideas clearly and avoid repetition. Also, explain your points logically using linking words. For example, explain why you prefer vanilla with nuts and mention calorie concerns clearly.

例: My favourite flavour is vanilla, especially vanilla chocolate with nuts like almonds. I usually prefer to eat chocolate after having spicy food or during special occasions such as my birthday. However, I try to control my intake because some chocolates are high in calories.

提案: Your answer conveys your opinion but has some grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to use more precise language and avoid repeating the word 'gift'. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I believe chocolate makes a great gift because it symbolizes happiness and kindness. Since most people enjoy chocolate, it is often a better choice than other gifts. For instance, I frequently give chocolates to my brothers and sisters.

× Well, I love to eat chocolate especially my favorite flavor is vanilla.

✓ Well, I love eating chocolate, especially my favorite flavor, vanilla.

The verb 'love' is commonly followed by the gerund form '-ing' when expressing enjoyment of an activity. Using 'love eating' is more natural than 'love to eat' in this context.

× I mostly like to eat vanilla chocolates.

✓ I mostly like to eat vanilla chocolate.

The word 'chocolate' here refers to the substance or type, which is uncountable, so it should be singular without 's'.

× Moreover, I also like chocolates in my cake and I use chocolates in my milkshake as well.

✓ Moreover, I also like chocolate in my cake and I use chocolate in my milkshake as well.

When referring to chocolate as an ingredient, it is uncountable and should be singular without 's'.

× I love the chocolates because it's very sweet and after eating something spicy I would like to have.

✓ I love chocolate because it's very sweet, and after eating something spicy, I would like to have some.

'Chocolates' should be 'chocolate' as uncountable. Also, the sentence was incomplete; adding 'some' clarifies the meaning. The verb 'it's' correctly agrees with 'chocolate'.

× Well, I eat chocolate twice in a week.

✓ Well, I eat chocolate twice a week.

The phrase 'twice a week' is the correct expression; 'in a week' is incorrect here.

× Sometimes I eat four to five times in a week because I like chocolates.

✓ Sometimes I eat chocolate four to five times a week because I like it.

'Chocolates' should be 'chocolate' as uncountable. Also, 'four to five times a week' is the correct phrase, not 'in a week'.

× As I earlier mentioned, I the most favorite flavor is vanilla flavored chocolate.

✓ As I mentioned earlier, my most favorite flavor is vanilla-flavored chocolate.

The sentence had word order issues and missing possessive pronoun. Correct word order and possessive pronoun 'my' are needed.

× So mostly I use chocolates in my milkshakes and I also take chocolates with me while I want to go on a trade.

✓ So mostly I use chocolate in my milkshakes and I also take chocolate with me when I want to go on a trip.

'Chocolates' should be 'chocolate' as uncountable. Also, 'trade' is incorrect; 'trip' fits the context better.

× Especially my father brought a lot of different kind of chocolates whenever he came from his work in the evening.

✓ Especially, my father brought a lot of different kinds of chocolates whenever he came home from work in the evening.

'Kind' should be plural 'kinds' to match 'a lot of different'. Also, 'came from his work' is better expressed as 'came home from work'.

× So I got the chance to eat chocolates on the daily basis and it was a great time.

✓ So I got the chance to eat chocolate on a daily basis and it was a great time.

'Chocolates' should be 'chocolate' as uncountable. Also, 'on the daily basis' should be 'on a daily basis'.

× I usually eat chocolate on the daily basis, so it was a great experience.

✓ I usually eat chocolate on a daily basis, so it was a great experience.

'On the daily basis' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'on a daily basis'.

× In my point of view, due to the taste and due to the popularity of chocolate, mostly people like to eat it and especially on the special occasions people generally eat chocolates like birthdays, marriages and on the other special occasions mostly people are gift chocolate as a.

✓ In my point of view, due to the taste and popularity of chocolate, most people like to eat it, especially on special occasions like birthdays, marriages, and other special events where people mostly gift chocolates.

'Mostly people' should be 'most people'. 'Are gift chocolate as a' is incorrect; corrected to 'gift chocolates'. Also, 'marriages' is better as 'marriages' or 'weddings'.

× My favorite flavor is vanilla. I love to eat vanilla chocolate and the. I like vanilla with the nuts and some almonds in it.

✓ My favorite flavor is vanilla. I love eating vanilla chocolate. I like vanilla with nuts and some almonds in it.

'The nuts' should be 'nuts' without 'the' as it is general. Also, 'love to eat' changed to 'love eating' for naturalness. The sentence fragment 'and the.' is removed.

× And I would prefer to eat chocolate after eating something hot and especially on the special occasions like on my birthdays because some chocolates contain a lot of calories so I have to control on my my.

✓ I would prefer to eat chocolate after eating something hot, especially on special occasions like my birthdays, because some chocolates contain a lot of calories, so I have to control my intake.

'Control on my my' is incorrect; corrected to 'control my intake'. Also, 'on my birthdays' should be 'my birthdays' without 'on'.

× Yes definitely I think it would be a good gift for the others to give a gift as a chocolate represent our happiness and our kindness to the others.

✓ Yes, definitely, I think it would be a good gift to give chocolate as it represents our happiness and kindness to others.

'As a chocolate represent' is incorrect; corrected to 'as it represents'. Also, 'for the others' simplified to 'to others'.

× Most people like chocolates so I think gifting a chocolate is way better than the other thing.

✓ Most people like chocolate, so I think gifting chocolate is way better than other things.

'Chocolates' should be 'chocolate' as uncountable. 'A chocolate' is incorrect here; 'chocolate' without article is better. 'The other thing' changed to 'other things'.

× Yes, I also give chocolate to a lot of peoples like my brothers and sisters.

✓ Yes, I also give chocolate to a lot of people like my brothers and sisters.

'Peoples' is incorrect; the plural of 'people' is 'people'.