Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to provide a more detailed and natural response by explaining why you like chocolate beyond just saying it's yummy. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I love eating chocolate because it satisfies my sweet tooth and gives me a quick energy boost, especially during stressful days.

提案: Avoid repetition and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide a more natural flow.

例: I eat chocolate almost every day; however, when I'm on a diet, I try to reduce my intake because chocolate contains a lot of calories.

提案: Make your answer more coherent by using linking words and providing specific examples to enrich your response.

例: No, I didn't eat chocolate often as a kid because my parents preferred us to eat fruits and healthy snacks; however, we occasionally received chocolates as treats during special occasions.

提案: Avoid vague phrases and improve sentence structure. Provide a more detailed explanation with linking words to make your answer more natural and effective.

例: I believe chocolate is popular worldwide because it has a delicious taste and can be enjoyed in many different forms, which appeals to people of all ages.

提案: Expand your answer by explaining why you like that flavour and use linking words to make your response more engaging and natural.

例: I love all types of chocolate, but I especially enjoy milk chocolate with nuts because the combination of creamy texture and crunchy nuts creates a delightful taste.

提案: Improve sentence fluency by using linking words and correct prepositions. Provide more specific cultural details to enrich your answer.

例: Yes, I think chocolate makes a great gift. In my country, it's common to bring chocolates when visiting friends or family, especially during Christmas and New Year celebrations.

× Sometimes when I'm on a diet I cut down sweet things.

✓ Sometimes when I'm on a diet I cut down on sweet things.

The phrase 'cut down' requires the preposition 'on' to be grammatically correct when referring to reducing consumption of something.

× It's especially chocolate because it has lots of lots of calories so that's why I try not to eat.

✓ It's especially chocolate because it has lots of calories, so that's why I try not to eat it.

The phrase 'lots of lots of' is redundant; 'lots of' is sufficient. Also, the verb 'eat' requires an object here, so 'it' should be added to complete the sentence.

× No, not really, because my parents prefer us to eat fruit and snacks, not chocolate.

✓ No, not really, because my parents prefer us to eat fruit and snacks instead of chocolate.

The phrase 'prefer us to eat fruit and snacks, not chocolate' is awkward; using 'instead of' clarifies the contrast between snacks and chocolate.

× I don't think it should be complicated because it's simple answer is because it's tasty.

✓ I don't think it should be complicated because the simple answer is that it's tasty.

The original sentence has awkward structure and missing articles. Adding 'the' before 'simple answer' and restructuring the sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I love all types of chocolate, especially if it's with nuts and milk.

✓ I love all types of chocolate, especially those with nuts and milk.

The phrase 'if it's with nuts and milk' is incorrect; 'those with nuts and milk' correctly refers to types of chocolate containing these ingredients.

× In my country it's very popular and when people visiting to others they take with them chocolate, especially Christmas or New Year.

✓ In my country, it's very popular, and when people visit others, they take chocolate with them, especially at Christmas or New Year.

The phrase 'people visiting to others' is incorrect; it should be 'people visit others'. Also, 'take with them chocolate' should be 'take chocolate with them'. Adding 'at' before 'Christmas or New Year' is necessary for correct prepositional use.