Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and fluent by using linking words and varying sentence structures. Also, avoid repeating similar ideas and add a bit more detail to make your answer richer.

例: No, I don't like eating chocolate because it is unhealthy; for instance, it contains a lot of sugar and fat, which can harm my body if consumed frequently.

提案: Focus on grammatical accuracy and clarity. Use correct verb forms and sentence structure. Also, be more specific and clear about your frequency and preferences.

例: I usually don't eat chocolate often; I only have it about once a month when I go to the store with my family, and I prefer to buy the A1 type of chocolate.

提案: Improve verb tenses and sentence structure to make your answer clearer. Also, add linking words and more specific details to explain your past habits.

例: Yes, when I was a kid, I ate a lot of chocolate because I didn't understand that it could harm my body.

提案: Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and improve sentence structure. Also, try to use more precise vocabulary and avoid repetition.

例: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because many brands offer different types, and effective advertising encourages people to buy it.

提案: Make your answer more natural by directly stating your preference and avoiding unnecessary general statements. Also, use correct article usage.

例: My favourite flavour of chocolate is milk chocolate because it tastes smooth and creamy.

提案: Your answer is good but can be improved by adding a linking word and a bit more detail to make it more natural and effective.

例: Yes, I think chocolate is a great gift because it is delicious, and almost everyone enjoys receiving it on special occasions.

× Usually I don't eating a chocolate often, just once a month when I go with my family to the shop store I can be A1 type only of chocolate.

✓ Usually I don't eat chocolate often, just once a month when I go with my family to the shop. I can only buy A1 type of chocolate.

The verb 'don't' should be followed by the base form of the verb, not the '-ing' form. 'Don't eating' is incorrect; it should be 'don't eat'. Also, 'a chocolate' is incorrect because 'chocolate' is an uncountable noun here, so no article is needed. The sentence was split for clarity and corrected for natural phrasing.

× Yes, when I was a kid I eat a chocolate very much because I don't understand if it's harm my body or not.

✓ Yes, when I was a kid I ate a lot of chocolate because I didn't understand if it would harm my body or not.

The action happened in the past, so the verb should be in past tense: 'eat' should be 'ate'. Also, 'a chocolate' is incorrect; 'chocolate' is uncountable, so 'a lot of chocolate' is better. 'Don't understand' should be past tense 'didn't understand'. 'If it's harm' is incorrect; it should be 'if it would harm' to express possibility in the past.

× I think because there's a lot of brands that provide a chocolate and there's a different type of chocolate and it's advertised in a good way to suggest the people.

✓ I think it's because there are a lot of brands that provide chocolate, and there are different types of chocolate, and it's advertised in a good way to attract people.

'There's' is a contraction of 'there is' and should be used with singular nouns. Since 'brands' and 'types' are plural, 'there are' is correct. Also, 'a chocolate' is incorrect; 'chocolate' is uncountable here. 'Suggest the people' is unnatural; 'attract people' or 'appeal to people' is better.

× There is a different type of chocolate flavor, but I usually like a milk chocolate.

✓ There are different types of chocolate flavor, but I usually like milk chocolate.

'There is' should be 'there are' because 'types' is plural. Also, 'a milk chocolate' is incorrect; 'milk chocolate' is uncountable and does not need an article.