Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时应更自然流畅，避免重复表达“a little bit”，并且可以用更准确的词汇描述口味，如“too sweet”或“slightly bitter”。此外，句子结构可以更清晰，避免语法错误。

例: I don't really like chocolate because white chocolate is too sweet for me, and dark chocolate tastes slightly bitter. Therefore, I find chocolate not very appealing.

提案: 回答中有语法错误，如“don't bought”应为“don't buy”。句子较长且不够连贯，建议分句表达，并且“biscuit vegetables”表达不清，应具体说明。

例: I eat chocolate maybe once a month or even less often. If my parents or friends don't buy it for me, I usually don't buy it myself. I prefer other snacks like biscuits or fresh vegetables.

提案: 回答中有语法和表达错误，如“I'm so appreciated about”不正确，应改为“I really liked”。句子结构混乱，建议简洁明了地表达过去的习惯和结果。

例: Yes, when I was young, I really liked sweet snacks, especially chocolate and candies. However, eating too much caused my teeth to become worse over time.

提案: 回答中有重复词汇“most most”，语法错误和表达不清。建议用更准确的句子表达观点，并提供具体原因。

例: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because some experts say that eating dark chocolate in moderation can be good for health and help maintain a balanced diet.

提案: 回答中表达不够自然，“we have chocolate tasted”不正确，应改为“It tastes”。建议用更地道的表达方式描述口味。

例: Compared to white and dark chocolate, I prefer milk chocolate because it tastes neither too sweet nor too bitter. I find this flavor very pleasant.

提案: 回答中表达不够准确，“it's always represent happiness and others and some other things”不清楚。建议用更具体和连贯的句子表达观点。

例: I think chocolate makes a great gift, especially for couples and friends, because it tastes delicious and often symbolizes happiness and affection.

× Maybe once a month or even longer, because if my parents or my friends don't bought chocolate for me, I will not buy it for myself and I prefer to buy some other snacks such as biscuit vegetables.

✓ Maybe once a month or even longer, because if my parents or my friends don't buy chocolate for me, I will not buy it for myself and I prefer to buy some other snacks such as biscuits and vegetables.

这里的'don't bought'是错误的，'bought'是过去式，否定句中应使用动词原形'buy'。正确用法是'don't buy'。

× Maybe once a month or even longer, because if my parents or my friends don't bought chocolate for me, I will not buy it for myself and I prefer to buy some other snacks such as biscuit vegetables.

✓ Maybe once a month or even longer, because if my parents or my friends don't buy chocolate for me, I will not buy it for myself and I prefer to buy some other snacks such as biscuits and vegetables.

'biscuit vegetables'中'biscuit'应为复数形式'biscuits'，且应加连词'and'连接两个名词，表示多种零食。

× Yeah, so when I was very young, I I'm so appreciated about some sweet snacks, especially chocolate and candies.

✓ Yeah, so when I was very young, I really appreciated some sweet snacks, especially chocolate and candies.

句子中'I I'm so appreciated about'结构错误，应改为'I really appreciated'，去掉多余的'I'和不正确的介词'about'。

× But after it's too much, my teeth were all become bad, worse and worse.

✓ But after eating too much, my teeth all became bad, worse and worse.

'it's too much'用法不当，应改为'after eating too much'，且'were all become'时态错误，应使用过去式'became'。

× I think one of the most most important reason is some experts says chocolate.

✓ I think one of the most important reasons is that some experts say chocolate.

'reason'应为复数'reasons'，'some experts says'主谓不一致，应为'some experts say'，且句子缺少连接词'that'。

× I think one of the most most important reason is some experts says chocolate.

✓ I think one of the most important reasons is that some experts say chocolate.

'experts'为复数，谓语动词应使用原形'say'，而非'says'。

× Compared with white chocolate and dark chocolate, I prefer the milk chocolate because we have chocolate tasted not too sweet and not too bitter.

✓ Compared with white chocolate and dark chocolate, I prefer milk chocolate because it tastes not too sweet and not too bitter.

'the milk chocolate'中冠词'the'不必要，'we have chocolate tasted'结构错误，应改为'it tastes'。

× Compared with white chocolate and dark chocolate, I prefer the milk chocolate because we have chocolate tasted not too sweet and not too bitter.

✓ Compared with white chocolate and dark chocolate, I prefer milk chocolate because it tastes not too sweet and not too bitter.

句中'we have chocolate tasted'使用了错误的代词和结构，应使用'it tastes'来表达巧克力的味道。

× I think it's so good, especially for couples and friends because chocolate has a good taste and it's always represent happiness and others and some other things.

✓ I think it's very good, especially for couples and friends because chocolate has a good taste and it always represents happiness and other things.

'it's always represent'主谓不一致，应为'it always represents'，'others and some other things'表达重复，应简化为'other things'。