Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答不够连贯，语法错误较多，表达不自然。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，明确表达喜欢与否及原因。

例: I liked eating chocolate when I was a child, but now as an adult, I try to avoid it because I want to maintain my weight.

提案: 回答中有重复和语法错误，表达不清晰。建议使用简单句子说明频率，并解释原因，避免无意义的重复。

例: I usually eat chocolate about once a month, but I always eat some before exams because I believe it brings me luck.

提案: 回答内容较具体，但语法和表达不够准确。建议注意时态和单复数，表达更自然。

例: Yes, I often ate chocolate as a child, but it caused some tooth problems, which I regret. However, chocolate is a favorite treat for many children.

提案: 表达不够清晰，语法错误较多。建议用简单句说明巧克力的甜味和带来的愉悦感，避免复杂表达。

例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it is sweet and makes people feel happy and energetic.

提案: 回答不够流畅，有重复和语法错误。建议直接回答喜欢的口味，并简要说明原因。

例: That's a difficult question. I usually prefer milk chocolate or other common flavors because they taste smooth and sweet.

提案: 表达基本清楚，但有语法错误和重复。建议简化句子，明确表达巧克力作为礼物的适用对象和理由。

例: Of course. Chocolate is a perfect gift for family members and loved ones because it is sweet and thoughtful.

× I I I like the chocolate when I was a child, but after I become an adult and I'm a female I am accustomed to to losing my weight so I absent my hobby of eating child.

✓ I liked chocolate when I was a child, but after I became an adult and I'm a female, I am accustomed to losing weight so I gave up my hobby of eating chocolate.

这里“the chocolate”应改为“chocolate”，因为表示喜欢巧克力时不需要定冠词；动词时态应与时间状语一致，过去时用liked和became；“absent”用错，应为“gave up”表示放弃；“eating child”应为“eating chocolate”。

× I I I like the chocolate when I was a child, but after I become an adult and I'm a female I am accustomed to to losing my weight so I absent my hobby of eating child.

✓ I liked chocolate when I was a child, but after I became an adult and I'm a female, I am accustomed to losing weight so I gave up my hobby of eating chocolate.

“become”应使用过去式“became”，因为描述的是过去发生的动作。

× I I I like the chocolate when I was a child, but after I become an adult and I'm a female I am accustomed to to losing my weight so I absent my hobby of eating child.

✓ I liked chocolate when I was a child, but after I became an adult and I'm a female, I am accustomed to losing weight so I gave up my hobby of eating chocolate.

“accustomed to to losing”中重复了“to”，应去掉一个。

× Not all all very often almost one time a month, but before examination I must eat chocolate.

✓ Not very often, almost once a month, but before examinations I must eat chocolate.

“one time”应改为“once”，“examination”应使用复数“examinations”，表示多次考试。

× Not all all very often almost one time a month, but before examination I must eat chocolate.

✓ Not very often, almost once a month, but before examinations I must eat chocolate.

“before examination”应为“before examinations”，且“before”后面接复数名词时不加冠词。

× And I say this behaviors as a as a as a lucky conjuncture and it also.

✓ And I see this behavior as a lucky chance, and it also...

“say this behaviors”中“behaviors”应为不可数名词“behavior”，“say”应改为“see”更符合语境。

× Yes, and eating chocolate brought on some bad tooth in my mouth and I really can't forgive this.

✓ Yes, and eating chocolate caused some bad teeth in my mouth and I really can't forgive this.

“brought on”可以改为“caused”更自然；“tooth”应为复数“teeth”，因为是多颗牙齿。

× But chocolate and sugar is children's favorite.

✓ But chocolate and sugar are children's favorites.

主语“chocolate and sugar”为复数，谓语动词应使用复数“are”；“favorite”应为复数“favorites”。

× Because it contains high percentage of sweets and humans can't reject so it it brings on us with high spirits and it spurs us nervous.

✓ Because it contains a high percentage of sugar and humans can't resist it, so it brings us high spirits and makes us nervous.

“reject”应为“resist”；“brings on us with high spirits”表达不当，应为“brings us high spirits”；“spurs us nervous”应为“makes us nervous”。

× Because it contains high percentage of sweets and humans can't reject so it it brings on us with high spirits and it spurs us nervous.

✓ Because it contains a high percentage of sugar and humans can't resist it, so it brings us high spirits and makes us nervous.

“high percentage”前应加冠词“a”；“sweets”应为“sugar”，更符合语境。

× What if this is a difficult question? I, I, I I don't mind What's the flavor of chocolate and I usually choose milk or some other common flavors and I think flavors only.

✓ This is a difficult question. I don't mind what the flavor of chocolate is, and I usually choose milk or some other common flavors, and I think flavors are all fine.

“What if this is a difficult question?”表达不自然，应改为“This is a difficult question.”；“What's the flavor of chocolate”应为“what the flavor of chocolate is”；句子结构需调整使其通顺。

× Of course, especially when our object is our families and lovers, it is there is no more suitable gift than chocolate to to others.

✓ Of course, especially when our recipients are our families and lovers, there is no more suitable gift than chocolate to give to others.

“object”用词不当，应为“recipients”或“people”；“to to others”重复，应去掉一个“to”；句子结构需调整使其更通顺。