Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，例如“sliver trees”可能是错误表达，且句子结构不够自然。建议简化句子，使用正确的词汇表达情感和原因，并避免重复。

例: Yes, I love eating chocolate because it makes me feel happy and boosts my mood. For example, I often eat chocolate before exams to encourage myself to perform better.

提案: 回答较为简洁，但存在重复“it can it can”，且表达可以更自然流畅。建议避免重复，使用连接词使句子更连贯。

例: I eat chocolate every day because it helps me stay awake when I'm sleepy and brings me happiness and positive emotions.

提案: 回答结构清晰，但时态使用不准确，“make progress”应为过去时。建议注意时态一致性，并丰富细节。

例: Yes, I did. Whenever I made progress at school, my parents rewarded me with chocolate to encourage me to keep improving.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不准确，如“make them more heavier”不合适，且逻辑连接不够自然。建议使用更准确的表达和连接词，避免语法错误。

例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes delicious and provides a sweet flavor that people enjoy. Also, it can help people feel more awake when they are tired.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和重复，如“maybe I didn't like I I don't like”，表达不够流畅。建议简化句子，使用正确的时态和表达方式。

例: My favourite flavour is dark chocolate because it is less sweet than milk chocolate and helps me feel more awake when I'm tired. I prefer it because I don't like very sweet tastes.

提案: 回答中有重复词汇“a a”，且句子结构较为简单。建议使用更丰富的词汇和更连贯的句子结构。

例: Of course, chocolate is a great gift because almost everyone likes its sweet taste, which can make people feel happy and satisfied.

× I love eating chocolate first.

✓ I love eating chocolate.

句子中“first”位置不当且无意义，应去掉。

× It has many sliver trees and I can got some happiness and some positive attitude when I eat it.

✓ It has many silver treats and I can get some happiness and a positive attitude when I eat it.

“sliver trees”应为“silver treats”，且“got”应为“get”，因为这里是一般现在时。

× I can got some happiness and some positive attitude when I eat it.

✓ I can get some happiness and a positive attitude when I eat it.

“can”后应接动词原形，不能用过去式“got”。

× I can got some happiness and some positive attitude when I eat it.

✓ I can get some happiness and a positive attitude when I eat it.

“some positive attitude”应改为“a positive attitude”，因为“attitude”是不可数名词或单数名词。

× For example, I will eat it before my examination.

✓ For example, I eat it before my examination.

此处描述习惯动作，应使用一般现在时而非将来时。

× It can encourage me to do better.

✓ It can encourage me to do better.

此句无语法错误，保持不变。

× I eat chocolate every day.

✓ I eat chocolate every day.

此句无语法错误，保持不变。

× It is a great way to wake me up when I feel sleepy and it can it can bring happiness and other positive emotion to me.

✓ It is a great way to wake me up when I feel sleepy and it can bring happiness and other positive emotions to me.

“it can it can”重复，应删去一个；“emotion”应为复数“emotions”。

× When I make progress, my parents always award me a chocolate and encourage me to do better next time.

✓ When I made progress, my parents always awarded me a chocolate and encouraged me to do better next time.

描述过去习惯动作，动词应使用过去时。

× my parents always award me a chocolate

✓ my parents always award me chocolate

“chocolate”作为不可数名词，前面不加冠词“a”。

× It can bring people sweet taste and make them more heavier.

✓ It can bring people a sweet taste and make them heavier.

“sweet taste”前应加冠词“a”；“more heavier”是双重比较，应改为“heavier”。

× I think it can make people encourage when they are sleepy.

✓ I think it can encourage people when they are sleepy.

“make people encourage”结构错误，应改为“encourage people”。

× It is a great way to make them awake.

✓ It is a great way to wake them up.

“make them awake”不自然，应使用“wake them up”。

× First it is not as sweet as the milk one.

✓ First, it is not as sweet as the milk one.

“First”后应加逗号。

× Second, maybe I didn't like I I don't like a sweet taste.

✓ Second, maybe I don't like a sweet taste.

句中“didn't like I I”重复且时态错误，应改为一般现在时“don't like”。

× It is more fit me.

✓ It fits me better.

“more fit me”表达不正确，应使用“fits me better”。

× because I think nobody will hate chocolate, it is a a great gift to others as people always like sweet taste because it makes them feel happy or satisfied.

✓ because I think nobody will hate chocolate. It is a great gift to others as people always like sweet tastes because it makes them feel happy or satisfied.

句子过长，应分句；“a a”重复；“sweet taste”应为复数“sweet tastes”。