Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达了观点，但语言不够流畅，句子结构混乱，且有重复和语法错误。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并使用更自然的表达方式。

例: I don't usually like eating chocolate because it's too sweet for me. However, sometimes when I skip a meal, I eat chocolate to quickly get some sugar and energy.

提案: 回答中时间表达不清晰，句子结构混乱，且缺少连贯的逻辑。建议使用清晰的时间表达和连词，使回答更连贯。

例: I usually eat chocolate once every two weeks. Since it's quite sweet, I tend to eat a small piece over several days, about three or four times in total.

提案: 回答不完整且语法错误较多，表达不清晰。建议简洁明了地回答问题，并用连词连接句子，补充具体细节。

例: Yes, I often ate chocolate when I was a kid because I enjoyed snacks. Eating chocolate made me feel happy, especially when I played with my friends.

提案: 回答不完整且表达不流畅，缺少具体细节和连贯性。建议完整表达观点，使用连词，并举例说明。

例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes delicious and is often given as a gift. For example, people send chocolate to their loved ones to show affection.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，且句子重复。建议简洁表达喜好，避免重复，并正确使用形容词。

例: My favourite flavour is milk chocolate because it is sweet and not bitter. I don't like dark chocolate, but I enjoy milk chocolate with nuts.

提案: 回答不完整且表达混乱，缺少具体理由和连贯性。建议完整表达观点，使用连词，并具体说明原因。

例: Yes, I think chocolate is a good gift because it symbolizes love and care. People often give chocolate to their loved ones to express their feelings.

× Actually I don't like to eat chocolate because they're too sweet for me and but sometimes if I don't eat breakfast or or meal I need to eat a chocolate because I need sugar that I can't low sugar.

✓ Actually, I don't like to eat chocolate because they're too sweet for me, but sometimes if I don't eat breakfast or a meal, I need to eat chocolate because I need sugar since I can't have low sugar.

句中使用了“and but”两个连词，造成连接混乱，应只用一个连词“but”。此外，重复使用“or”不合适，应去掉多余的“or”。

× Actually I don't like to eat chocolate because they're too sweet for me and but sometimes if I don't eat breakfast or or meal I need to eat a chocolate because I need sugar that I can't low sugar.

✓ Actually, I don't like to eat chocolate because it's too sweet for me, but sometimes if I don't eat breakfast or a meal, I need to eat chocolate because I need sugar since I can't have low sugar.

“chocolate”作为不可数名词时应使用单数形式“it”，而不是复数“they”。

× Actually I don't like to eat chocolate because they're too sweet for me and but sometimes if I don't eat breakfast or or meal I need to eat a chocolate because I need sugar that I can't low sugar.

✓ Actually, I don't like to eat chocolate because it's too sweet for me, but sometimes if I don't eat breakfast or a meal, I need to eat some chocolate because I need sugar since I can't have low sugar.

“a chocolate”通常指一块巧克力，若泛指巧克力应使用“some chocolate”。

× I think maybe last two weeks I I bought a piece of chocolate. I can eat it for one weeks because it's too sweet and I always need to eat it for three or four times.

✓ I think maybe two weeks ago I bought a piece of chocolate. I could eat it for one week because it's too sweet, and I only needed to eat it three or four times.

描述过去事件时应使用过去时态，如“bought”，“could”，“needed”。“last two weeks”应改为“two weeks ago”。

× I think maybe last two weeks I I bought a piece of chocolate. I can eat it for one weeks because it's too sweet and I always need to eat it for three or four times.

✓ I think maybe two weeks ago I bought a piece of chocolate. I could eat it for one week because it's too sweet, and I only needed to eat it three or four times.

“one weeks”中“weeks”应为单数“week”，因为数量为一。

× Yes because when I was a child I like eat snacks and chocolate at that time I think I like I like to eat them and they can feel me a good mood and if I play with my friend I also.

✓ Yes, because when I was a child, I liked to eat snacks and chocolate. At that time, I think I liked to eat them because they made me feel good. Also, if I played with my friends, I did too.

“like eat”应为“liked to eat”，动词后需加不定式。短语“feel me a good mood”表达不当，应为“made me feel good”。“play with my friend”应为复数“friends”。

× Yes because when I was a child I like eat snacks and chocolate at that time I think I like I like to eat them and they can feel me a good mood and if I play with my friend I also.

✓ Yes, because when I was a child, I liked to eat snacks and chocolate. At that time, I think I liked to eat them because they made me feel good. Also, if I played with my friends, I did too.

描述过去习惯时应使用过去时态“liked”，“played”。

× Yes because when I was a child I like eat snacks and chocolate at that time I think I like I like to eat them and they can feel me a good mood and if I play with my friend I also.

✓ Yes, because when I was a child, I liked to eat snacks and chocolate. At that time, I think I liked to eat them because they made me feel good. Also, if I played with my friends, I did too.

“my friend”应为复数“my friends”，因为通常指多个朋友。

× First, I think chocolate is very great and good food everyone like it and chocolate have some meanings in in the world because if have if some people send chocolate to their lover it means.

✓ First, I think chocolate is a very great and good food; everyone likes it. Chocolate has some meanings in the world because if some people send chocolate to their lover, it means something special.

“chocolate have”应为“chocolate has”，主谓一致。句中缺少主语“some people”。

× First, I think chocolate is very great and good food everyone like it and chocolate have some meanings in in the world because if have if some people send chocolate to their lover it means.

✓ First, I think chocolate is a very great and good food; everyone likes it. Chocolate has some meanings in the world because if some people send chocolate to their lover, it means something special.

“everyone like”应为“everyone likes”，主谓一致。

× I think it's milk chocolate is not bitter and sweet because I don't like batter, so I I don't have to try to eat black chocolate. I think there are two, two nuts. Well for me.

✓ I think milk chocolate is not bitter and is sweet because I don't like bitter taste, so I don't want to try black chocolate. I think there are two types with nuts that are good for me.

“there are two, two nuts”表达不清，应明确指“两种带坚果的巧克力”。

× I think it's milk chocolate is not bitter and sweet because I don't like batter, so I I don't have to try to eat black chocolate. I think there are two, two nuts. Well for me.

✓ I think milk chocolate is not bitter and is sweet because I don't like bitter taste, so I don't want to try black chocolate. I think there are two types with nuts that are good for me.

“batter”应为“bitter”，拼写错误。

× Yes, I think it is good to you truly as gift to others because it has many means. If some people send chocolate as gifts to their loved loved ones, that means a great meaning and some people always.

✓ Yes, I think it is good to use chocolate as a gift to others because it has many meanings. If some people send chocolate as gifts to their loved ones, it has a great meaning.

“to you truly”应为“to use”。“loved loved ones”重复，应为“loved ones”。

× Yes, I think it is good to you truly as gift to others because it has many means. If some people send chocolate as gifts to their loved loved ones, that means a great meaning and some people always.

✓ Yes, I think it is good to use chocolate as a gift to others because it has many meanings. If some people send chocolate as gifts to their loved ones, it has a great meaning.

“many means”应为“many meanings”，意思为“多种含义”。