Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to give a clear and concise answer directly addressing the question. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and unclear phrases such as '2 legs of mine to'. Use simple, natural sentences to explain why you like chocolate, focusing on how it affects your mood.

例: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it makes me feel happy and improves my mood.

提案: Provide a more structured answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repetition. For example, explain the frequency and the reason clearly.

例: I usually eat chocolate when I feel sad because it helps me feel better.

提案: Answer directly and use past tense correctly. Avoid repetition and clarify your preferences with linking words. For example, explain your habits and favourite chocolate clearly.

例: Yes, I often ate chocolate when I was a kid. At birthday parties, I preferred chocolate over cake, especially Kit Kat.

提案: Organize your answer with clear reasons and use linking words to connect ideas. Avoid repetition and incorrect grammar. For example, explain affordability, availability, and universal appeal clearly.

例: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because it is affordable, easy to find, and enjoyed by people of all ages.

提案: Give a clear answer with correct grammar and avoid filler words. Explain why you like your favourite flavour using specific adjectives and linking words.

例: My favourite chocolate flavour is Dairy Milk because it is sweet, tastes delicious, and is reasonably priced.

提案: Provide a clear and structured answer. Use linking words to explain reasons why chocolate makes a good gift. Avoid filler words and improve sentence clarity.

例: Yes, chocolate is a great gift because it is easy to buy, affordable, and it makes the recipient feel happy.

× Yes, I like eating a chocolate because, uh, I think daily one eat a chocolate 2 legs of mine to uh, Your mood is a very good after eating chocolate, that's why.

✓ Yes, I like eating chocolate because, uh, I think eating one chocolate daily is good for me, and your mood is very good after eating chocolate, that's why.

The phrase 'a chocolate' is incorrect when referring to chocolate in general; 'chocolate' is an uncountable noun here. Also, 'daily one eat a chocolate 2 legs of mine to' is grammatically incorrect and unclear. It should be corrected to 'eating one chocolate daily is good for me' to express the intended meaning clearly.

× When I am when I am feeling sad and my mind is so I am feeling very bad, then I eat a chocolate.

✓ When I am feeling sad and my mind is bad, then I eat chocolate.

The phrase 'eat a chocolate' is incorrect; 'chocolate' as a general food is uncountable and does not need an article. Also, the sentence is repetitive and can be simplified for clarity.

× Yes Sir. When I am kids, I eat a lot of chocolate. When I'm going to birthday party, I like I'm I'm not like a cake. I'm like only chocolate chocolate. My best flavor is a Kit Kat.

✓ Yes Sir. When I was a kid, I ate a lot of chocolate. When I go to birthday parties, I don't like cake. I like only chocolate. My best flavour is Kit Kat.

'When I am kids' is incorrect; it should be 'When I was a kid' to match singular and past tense. 'Eat' should be 'ate' for past tense. 'I'm going to birthday party' should be 'I go to birthday parties' for habitual action. 'I'm like only chocolate chocolate' is unclear and corrected to 'I like only chocolate'. 'A Kit Kat' is incorrect; 'Kit Kat' is a brand name and does not need an article.

× I think it is not a costly, it is easy to purchase any place and any anybody to like a chocolate like a kids or kids or young or old man or old people. So I think.

✓ I think it is not costly; it is easy to purchase anywhere, and anybody likes chocolate, whether kids, young people, or old people. So I think so.

'It is not a costly' is incorrect; 'costly' is an adjective and does not need 'a'. 'Any place' should be 'anywhere'. 'Any anybody to like a chocolate like a kids or kids or young or old man or old people' is grammatically incorrect and unclear; corrected to 'anybody likes chocolate, whether kids, young people, or old people' for clarity and correct pronoun use.

× I like Dairy Milk and Kit Kat, but Dairy Milk is my favorite umm because it does it so sweet and tastes so good and an auto uh, costly.

✓ I like Dairy Milk and Kit Kat, but Dairy Milk is my favourite because it is so sweet and tastes very good, and it is not costly.

'It does it so sweet' is incorrect; it should be 'it is so sweet'. 'An auto uh, costly' is unclear and incorrect; corrected to 'it is not costly' to convey the intended meaning.

× Yes, I think it it is a great gift to another umm send to another because it is a very easy to purchase and not a costly uh and uh, next person was so feeling good.

✓ Yes, I think it is a great gift to send to others because it is very easy to purchase and not costly, and the recipient feels good.

'A great gift to another umm send to another' is incorrect; corrected to 'a great gift to send to others'. 'Not a costly' is incorrect; 'not costly' is correct. 'Next person was so feeling good' is incorrect; corrected to 'the recipient feels good' for clarity and correct pronoun use.