Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to use correct grammar and sentence structure. For example, say 'chocolate has many different flavours such as dark, white, and milk chocolate, which I enjoy.' Also, avoid run-on sentences by separating ideas clearly.

例: I love eating chocolate because it has many different flavours, such as dark, white, and milk chocolate. I enjoy trying each type.

提案: Make sure your sentences are grammatically correct and clear. Instead of 'they are of chocolate at my house,' say 'there is always chocolate at my house.' This makes your answer more natural and understandable.

例: I eat chocolate almost every day because there is always chocolate at my house.

提案: Avoid repeating words and improve sentence flow. For example, say 'No, I didn't eat chocolate often as a child because my mother couldn't buy much, and eating too much would make me sick.'

例: No, I didn't eat chocolate often as a child because my mother couldn't buy much, and eating too much would make me sick.

提案: Use correct articles and verb forms. For example, say 'I think chocolate is popular around the world because it is linked to dopamine, which makes it addictive.' This sounds more natural and clear.

例: I think chocolate is popular around the world because it is linked to dopamine, which makes it addictive.

提案: Be careful with word choice. Instead of 'favorite fruit about chocolate,' say 'favourite flavour of chocolate.' Also, say 'because it's the most popular and common one.'

例: My favourite flavour of chocolate is milk chocolate because it's the most popular and common one.

提案: Use comparative structures correctly. For example, say 'I prefer to give chocolate as a gift rather than clothes.' This makes your answer clearer and more natural.

例: Of course, most of my friends love chocolate, so I prefer to give chocolate as a gift rather than clothes.

× I love eating chocolate because chocolate have many different flavor like dark white chocolate, milk chocolate I can enjoy them.

✓ I love eating chocolate because chocolate has many different flavours like dark, white chocolate, and milk chocolate. I can enjoy them.

The noun 'chocolate' is singular, so the verb should be 'has' instead of 'have'. Also, 'flavor' should be plural 'flavours' because it refers to many types. Adding commas improves clarity.

× I eat chocolate almost every day because they are of chocolate at my house.

✓ I eat chocolate almost every day because there is chocolate at my house.

The phrase 'they are of chocolate' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'there is chocolate' to indicate the presence of chocolate at home. 'Chocolate' is uncountable here, so singular form is used.

× No, I didn't eat chocolate often when I was a kid because my mother couldn't buy a lot of many chocolate for me because if I ate too much I would get sick.

✓ No, I didn't eat chocolate often when I was a kid because my mother couldn't buy a lot of chocolate for me, as if I ate too much I would get sick.

The phrase 'a lot of many chocolate' is incorrect; 'a lot of chocolate' is correct since 'chocolate' is uncountable. Also, the sentence is improved by replacing the second 'because' with 'as' for better flow.

× I think chocolate is the popular around the world because chocolate is related to dopamine and dopamine make them addictive.

✓ I think chocolate is popular around the world because chocolate is related to dopamine and dopamine makes it addictive.

The definite article 'the' before 'popular' is unnecessary and incorrect here. Also, 'dopamine make them' should be 'dopamine makes it' to agree in number and refer correctly to chocolate.

× My favorite fruit about chocolate is milk chocolate because it's more popular and common one.

✓ My favourite type of chocolate is milk chocolate because it's the most popular and common one.

'Fruit' is incorrect; the correct word is 'type' when referring to kinds of chocolate. Also, 'more popular and common' should be 'the most popular and common' to correctly use superlative forms.

× Of course, most of my friends love chocolate, so I prefer to give chocolate as a gift than clothes.

✓ Of course, most of my friends love chocolate, so I prefer to give chocolate as a gift rather than clothes.

The phrase 'prefer to give chocolate as a gift than clothes' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'prefer to give chocolate as a gift rather than clothes' to properly compare two options.