Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to make your response more natural and concise by directly stating your preference and reasons. Avoid redundancy and unclear phrases like 'from my place' and 'not overhearing for me.'

例: No, I don't like eating chocolate because I find it too sweet. I usually prefer nuts because they are lighter and healthier for me.

提案: Your answer is confusing and lacks clarity. Try to give a clear and direct response about the frequency, using simple and correct sentence structures. Avoid filler words and repetition.

例: I eat chocolate very rarely, maybe once every few months.

提案: Your answer has some irrelevant information and grammatical mistakes. Focus on answering the question directly and provide specific details. Avoid unnecessary comments like 'I was so cute' and unclear phrases.

例: Yes, I often ate chocolate as a kid. I used to ask my mom to buy it whenever she went grocery shopping.

提案: Your answer is unclear and lacks coherence. Try to organize your ideas logically and use linking words. Provide specific reasons why chocolate is popular globally.

例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes sweet and appeals to people of all ages. Additionally, it is often given as a gift, which increases its popularity.

提案: Your answer is confusing and contains grammatical errors. Clearly state your favorite chocolate flavor and explain why you like it, using correct vocabulary and sentence structure.

例: My favorite chocolate is dark chocolate with 99% cocoa because it is less sweet and has a slightly bitter taste, which I prefer.

提案: Your answer is unclear and grammatically incorrect. Provide a clear opinion and explain why chocolate makes a good gift, using simple and correct sentences.

例: Yes, chocolate is a good gift because it is nicely packaged and enjoyed by many people.

× No, I don't like eating chocolate because I find it is too sweet from my place, so I usually prefer to eat some nuts which is I feel more lighter and that is not overhearing for me.

✓ No, I don't like eating chocolate because I find it too sweet here, so I usually prefer to eat some nuts which I feel are lighter and not overwhelming for me.

The phrase 'too sweet from my place' is incorrect; 'too sweet here' is more natural. Also, 'which is I feel more lighter' should be 'which I feel are lighter' to agree with the plural 'nuts' and correct verb usage. 'Overhearing' is incorrect; the intended word is 'overwhelming.' These preposition and word choice errors affect clarity.

× I only will eat the chocolate during my first time so it will be once in long months so I I think.

✓ I will only eat chocolate the first time, so it will be once in many months, I think.

The phrase 'I only will eat' is awkward; 'I will only eat' is the correct word order for future tense. 'During my first time' is unclear; 'the first time' is better. 'Once in long months' should be 'once in many months' to express infrequency properly.

× Yes, and I was so cute. I often eat the chocolate, especially, uh, I would request my mom's to buy the chocolate every time if my mind's going out to have the grocery.

✓ Yes, I was so cute. I often ate chocolate, especially, uh, I would ask my mom to buy chocolate every time I went grocery shopping.

The verb 'eat' should be in past tense 'ate' to match 'when you were a kid.' 'Request my mom's' is incorrect; it should be 'ask my mom.' 'If my mind's going out to have the grocery' is unclear; 'every time I went grocery shopping' is correct.

× Second one is very popular. Why so very because of this very sweet and then suitable for all age of people. Additional usually she collect is.

✓ Chocolate is very popular because it is very sweet and suitable for people of all ages. Additionally, it is usually collected or enjoyed by many.

The original sentences are fragmented and unclear. 'Second one is very popular' lacks context. The sentence structure needs to be complete and coherent. 'Suitable for all age of people' should be 'people of all ages.' The last sentence is incomplete and unclear; it needs rephrasing for clarity.

× By further, chocolate is in 99% of alcohol, so that is will be not too sweet for me and it will be a bit bitter. I think that one is very sweet for my flavor.

✓ Furthermore, chocolate with 99% cocoa is not too sweet for me and is a bit bitter. I think that one suits my taste better.

'By further' is incorrect; 'Furthermore' is appropriate. 'Chocolate is in 99% of alcohol' is incorrect; it should be 'chocolate with 99% cocoa.' 'That one is very sweet for my flavor' is awkward; 'suits my taste better' is clearer. Quantifiers and expressions need correction for clarity.

× Yes, because you should do chocolate is South of the package and then it's appear to all other people is very sweet for everyone.

✓ Yes, because chocolate is often given as a gift, and its packaging appeals to everyone as something sweet.

The original sentence is unclear and contains incorrect prepositions and word choices. 'Do chocolate is South of the package' is incorrect; likely intended 'chocolate is part of the package' or 'chocolate is given as a gift.' 'It's appear to all other people' should be 'its packaging appeals to everyone.' Correct preposition and word choice improve clarity.