Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时语法和表达不够准确，且句子结构较为简单。建议使用更自然的表达方式，并注意语法时态和单复数形式。

例: Yes, I enjoy eating chocolate because it is sweet and can boost my mood by releasing dopamine, which makes me feel happy and energetic.

提案: 回答不够连贯，存在语法错误和重复。建议简洁明了地表达频率，并用连接词使句子更流畅。

例: I don't eat chocolate regularly, but I usually have some when I feel down, like after failing an exam, because it cheers me up.

提案: 语法错误较多，表达不够自然。建议使用正确的时态和更清晰的句子结构，同时避免口语填充词。

例: Yes, I used to eat chocolate almost every day as a child, which sometimes caused my nose to bleed, so I know it's unhealthy.

提案: 回答结构较好，但表达略显简单。建议使用更多连接词和丰富词汇，使内容更具体和连贯。

例: In my opinion, chocolate is popular worldwide because it is conveniently packaged in small bars, making it easy to carry. Moreover, it is a popular gift choice to express feelings and appreciation.

提案: 表达不够流畅，存在语法错误。建议使用更自然的表达方式，并注意单复数和句子结构。

例: My favourite flavour is milk chocolate because it combines the creamy taste of milk with the sweetness of chocolate, unlike dark chocolate which can be bitter.

提案: 表达重复且用词不当。建议避免重复，使用更准确的词汇和简洁的句子。

例: Yes, I believe chocolate is an excellent gift because it is widely recognized as a way to show affection and appreciation to others.

× Sweet food release a source of thing called dopamine which make people delightful and energetic.

✓ Sweet food releases a source of thing called dopamine which makes people delightful and energetic.

主语是单数形式的'sweet food'，谓语动词应使用第三人称单数形式'releases'和'makes'。动词与主语在人称和数上必须一致。

× Uh, only eat chocolate.

✓ Uh, I only eat chocolate.

句子缺少主语，导致结构不完整。应补充主语'I'，使句子完整。

× Umm, I almost eat ate chocolate every day, even make my nose bleed.

✓ Umm, I almost ate chocolate every day, even made my nose bleed.

描述过去的动作，动词应使用过去式。'eat'应改为'ate'，'make'应改为'made'。

× First, it is often made into a small piece of bar so it's easy to take.

✓ First, it is often made into a small piece of a bar so it's easy to take.

'a small piece of bar'中缺少冠词，'bar'为可数名词，前面应加冠词'a'。

× Second is a good choice to give gift to others to express your emotions.

✓ Second, it is a good choice to give gifts to others to express your emotions.

缺少主语，且'gift'应为复数形式'gifts'，因为通常赠送不止一个礼物。

× They were best because it's it can combine 2 flavors, the smell of the milk and the sweet from chocolate.

✓ It is best because it can combine 2 flavors, the smell of the milk and the sweetness from chocolate.

'They were best'主语与谓语不匹配，且句子中多余的'it's it'应删除。'sweet'作为名词时应使用'sweetness'。

× They were best because it's it can combine 2 flavors, the smell of the milk and the sweet from chocolate.

✓ It is best because it can combine 2 flavors, the smell of the milk and the sweetness from chocolate.

句中代词使用错误，'They'应改为'It'指代单数的'milk chocolate'，且多余的'it's it'应删除。

× It won't taste like pure chocolate that's bitter.

✓ It doesn't taste like pure chocolate, which is bitter.

'won't'表示将来时，不符合语境，应使用一般现在时'doesn't'。此外，使用关系代词'which'更合适。

× I think it's a wonderful choice because it is widely committed that chocolate is a good gift to express your feelings and send your appreciation to others.

✓ I think it's a wonderful choice because it is widely believed that chocolate is a good gift to express your feelings and show your appreciation to others.

'committed'用词错误，应为'believed'表示'被广泛认为'。'send your appreciation'表达不当，改为'show your appreciation'更自然。