Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by avoiding repetition and grammatical errors. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences.

例: Yes, I like eating chocolate because I have a sweet tooth. It helps me reduce stress and makes me feel happier. For example, after a long day, a piece of chocolate can brighten my mood.

提案: Improve sentence structure and clarity. Use linking words to explain reasons clearly and avoid incomplete sentences. Try to be more specific about frequency.

例: I don't eat chocolate very often because it can cause weight gain and harm my teeth. Therefore, I try to limit it to special occasions only.

提案: Avoid redundancy and unclear phrases. Use linking words to connect ideas logically and provide clear reasons.

例: When I was a kid, my family allowed me to eat chocolate twice a week because it is not very healthy. They were concerned it might damage my teeth.

提案: Focus on clear and correct sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repetition. Be specific about reasons for chocolate's popularity.

例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes delicious and is often given as a gift. For example, people give chocolate to loved ones to express their affection.

提案: Improve grammar and clarity. Use linking words to explain your preference clearly and avoid vague expressions.

例: My favourite flavour is chocolate mixed with strawberry because it combines sweetness with a slight tartness. I love strawberry, so this combination is perfect for me.

提案: Make your answer more natural by avoiding repetition and improving sentence flow. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: Yes, I think chocolate is a good gift, especially on special occasions like Valentine's Day. People often give chocolate to their loved ones to show affection.

× When I eat chocolate, it's make me reduce stress, it's make me happy, and yeah, it's make my day happier.

✓ When I eat chocolate, it makes me reduce stress, it makes me happy, and yeah, it makes my day happier.

The verb 'make' should be in the third person singular present tense 'makes' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. This is a subject-verb agreement issue involving verb form in the present tense.

× I'm the type of person that likes sweet sweetie, and the chocolate is sweet.

✓ I'm the type of person that likes sweets, and chocolate is sweet.

The word 'sweetie' is incorrect here; the plural noun 'sweets' is appropriate to refer to sweet foods in general. Also, 'the chocolate' is better as 'chocolate' when speaking generally.

× I'm not usually a chocolate because, umm, it's could gain my weight actually, and it's also impacts for my teeth.

✓ I don't usually eat chocolate because it could make me gain weight actually, and it also impacts my teeth.

The phrase 'a chocolate' is incorrect; 'eat chocolate' is the correct expression. Also, 'impacts for my teeth' should be 'impacts my teeth' without 'for'. The modal verb 'could' should be followed by the base verb 'make'.

× When I was a kid my family allowed me to eat chocolate like twice a week because it's not good for health.

✓ When I was a kid, my family allowed me to eat chocolate about twice a week because it was not good for my health.

The phrase 'it's not good for health' should be in past tense 'it was not good for my health' to match the past time frame. Also, 'like twice a week' is better as 'about twice a week' for clarity.

× It could make my teeth like broke or yeah it's good.

✓ It could make my teeth break, or yeah, it's bad.

The phrase 'teeth like broke' is incorrect; the verb 'break' should be used. Also, 'it's good' contradicts the negative context; 'it's bad' fits better.

× I think chocolate is popular around the world because it is with and it delicious as well and it it also the best gift to send to someone like special lover or your family that show that that show your love like that.

✓ I think chocolate is popular around the world because it is sweet and delicious as well, and it is also the best gift to send to someone like a special lover or your family that shows your love.

The phrase 'it is with' is incorrect; 'it is sweet' is appropriate. Also, 'like special lover' should be 'like a special lover'. The verb 'show' should be 'shows' to agree with singular subject 'that'. The sentence is corrected for clarity and grammar.

× I like chocolate that mixed with strawberry because it's not just have one flavor that is sweet and also have a a little shower in it.

✓ I like chocolate that is mixed with strawberry because it doesn't just have one flavor that is sweet but also has a little sourness in it.

The phrase 'it's not just have' is incorrect; it should be 'it doesn't just have'. Also, 'a little shower' is a mispronunciation or misspelling of 'a little sour'. The verb forms are corrected for subject-verb agreement.

× And I also love strawberry because that's why I like it.

✓ And I also love strawberries; that's why I like it.

The noun 'strawberry' should be plural 'strawberries' when speaking generally. The sentence is adjusted for clarity.

× Yes, obviously, because some in some special occasion people always give chocolate to someone that special.

✓ Yes, obviously, because on some special occasions people always give chocolate to someone special.

The phrase 'in some special occasion' should be 'on some special occasions' to use the correct preposition and plural form.

× Lovers like that, especially in Valentine, they also give chocolate to their lover to show their love.

✓ Lovers like that, especially on Valentine's Day, also give chocolate to their lover to show their love.

The phrase 'in Valentine' should be 'on Valentine's Day'. The pronoun 'they' is unnecessary and removed for sentence clarity.