Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains contradictory points without clear linking. Try to give a clear opinion first, then support it with reasons using linking words like 'because' or 'however'. Avoid redundancy and keep sentences concise.

例: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it tastes sweet and helps me relax. However, I try not to eat too much as it can cause weight gain.

提案: Your answer is a bit vague and repetitive. Try to give a clear frequency and reasons using linking words to make your answer coherent. Avoid unnecessary phrases like 'there is not so much reason behind this'.

例: I usually eat chocolate when I travel or when I feel happy because it lifts my mood. Overall, I enjoy chocolate quite often.

提案: Your answer has good content but is too long and repetitive. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' to connect ideas and avoid repeating similar points. Try to be more concise and structured.

例: Yes, I often ate chocolate as a kid because my parents gifted it to me on many occasions. Also, my siblings and I used to enjoy chocolate together when we played.

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and contains grammatical errors. Use clear sentences with linking words like 'because' and 'also' to explain reasons. Avoid unclear phrases like 'good thing to giving 1:00 and 2:00 to take for the the'.

例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it is a sweet treat that many people enjoy. Also, it can improve mood and provide happiness when eaten.

提案: Your answer has good content but contains repetition and awkward phrasing. Use simple and clear sentences, avoid repeating words, and explain your preference with specific reasons.

例: My favourite flavour is Oreo chocolate because it has crunchy Oreo pieces that add texture and make it taste smooth and delicious.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and does not fully address the question. Always provide a complete response with reasons or examples to support your opinion.

例: Yes, I think chocolate makes a good gift because it is popular and enjoyed by many people on special occasions.

× I like chocolate because it's sweetened in taste and it's mind relaxing and I don't like chocolate because after eating this I put my weight.

✓ I like chocolate because it tastes sweet and it relaxes my mind, but I don't like chocolate because after eating it, I gain weight.

The phrase 'sweetened in taste' is incorrect; 'tastes sweet' is the correct form. 'Mind relaxing' should be 'relaxes my mind' to use the verb form properly. 'After eating this I put my weight' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'after eating it, I gain weight.' These corrections improve clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× I eat chocolate when I go to travel, I eat chocolate when my mood is good and there is not so much reason behind this.

✓ I eat chocolate when I travel, I eat chocolate when my mood is good, and there is not much reason behind this.

The phrase 'go to travel' is incorrect; 'travel' alone is sufficient. 'Not so much reason' should be 'not much reason' for correct quantifier usage. Also, commas are added for better sentence structure.

× Yes, I ate lots of chocolate when I was a kid and my parents always gifted me chocolate in any occasion, in any purpose, when they go to the market and anywhere they go and they always buy chocolate for me and when we siblings most probably eat chocolate when we play together.

✓ Yes, I ate lots of chocolate when I was a kid, and my parents always gifted me chocolate on any occasion, for any purpose, when they went to the market or anywhere else. They always bought chocolate for me, and my siblings and I most probably ate chocolate when we played together.

The sentence had incorrect pronoun usage and verb tenses. 'Go to the market' should be past tense 'went to the market' to match past context. 'We siblings' should be 'my siblings and I' for correct pronoun case. Also, prepositions 'in any occasion' and 'in any purpose' are incorrect; 'on any occasion' and 'for any purpose' are correct.

× Because chocolate is very common sweetened item and everyone like to eat chocolate.

✓ Because chocolate is a very common sweet item and everyone likes to eat chocolate.

The sentence lacks the article 'a' before 'very common sweetened item'. Also, 'everyone like' should be 'everyone likes' to agree with the singular subject 'everyone'.

× Chocolate is one of the sweeten things that relaxing your mind, change your mood and give you happiness when you eat it.

✓ Chocolate is one of the sweet things that relax your mind, change your mood, and give you happiness when you eat it.

The adjective 'sweeten' is incorrect; 'sweet' is the correct form. 'Relaxing' should be 'relax' to match the plural subject 'things'. Verbs 'change' and 'give' are correctly in base form to agree with plural subject.

× And it's one of the good thing to giving 1:00 and 2:00 to take for the the.

✓ And it's one of the good things to take between 1:00 and 2:00.

The original sentence is unclear and ungrammatical. 'Good thing' should be plural 'good things' to agree with 'one of the'. 'To giving' is incorrect; 'to take' is correct infinitive form. The phrase 'for the the' is unclear and removed for clarity.

× Oreo chocolate is my one of the favorite because it has a little bit crunches of Oreo and given the crunchy taste and smoothen my my smoothen my taste when I eat it.

✓ Oreo chocolate is one of my favorites because it has a little bit of Oreo crunch and gives a crunchy taste and smoothens my taste when I eat it.

'My one of the favorite' is incorrect; correct is 'one of my favorites'. 'Crunches' should be 'crunch' as a noun. 'Given the crunchy taste' should be 'gives a crunchy taste'. 'Smoothen' is a verb; 'smoothens' is the correct third person singular form here. Repetition 'my my smoothen my' is removed.

× Yes, it is one of the.

✓ Yes, it is one of the good gifts to give to others.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks clarity. Completing the sentence with a proper noun phrase makes it meaningful and grammatically correct.