Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时语法和表达不够自然，句子结构较为混乱，且有重复和冗余。建议简化句子，注意时态和语法，避免重复表达，同时使用连接词使句子更流畅。

例: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it helps me relax after a walk. Although it's not very healthy, I enjoy its taste and the feeling it gives me.

提案: 回答中表达频率时不够准确，句子结构有些混乱。建议使用更自然的频率表达，并用连接词使句子更连贯。

例: I used to eat chocolate once or twice a day, but now I try to limit it to once a week to stay healthy.

提案: 回答内容清晰，但语法和表达有待改进。建议注意形容词和副词的正确使用，句子结构更自然。

例: Not at all. My mother was very strict and didn't allow me or my siblings to eat chocolate when we were young.

提案: 回答不够连贯，表达含糊且有语法错误。建议明确表达观点，避免口头语，使用恰当的词汇和连接词。

例: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes sweet and makes people feel happy.

提案: 回答表达基本清楚，但句子结构不够自然。建议简化句子，注意介词和动词形式的正确使用。

例: My favorite chocolate flavor is the original one because I believe it is the most classic.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不自然的地方。建议注意主谓一致，避免重复，使用更准确的表达。

例: Yes, I think chocolate is a good gift because most people love it and it can make them feel happier.

× I almost eat the chocolate for an hour also after I walking time because it made me feel relaxed and chill out.

✓ I almost eat chocolate for an hour also after my walking time because it makes me feel relaxed and chill out.

这里“the chocolate”不需要定冠词，且“walking time”应为“my walking time”，表示“我的散步时间”。

× I almost eat the chocolate for an hour also after I walking time because it made me feel relaxed and chill out.

✓ I almost eat chocolate for an hour also after my walking time because it makes me feel relaxed and chill out.

“after I walking time”中“walking”应作为名词使用，需加所有格“my”，而不是动词-ing形式。

× I almost eat the chocolate for an hour also after I walking time because it made me feel relaxed and chill out.

✓ I almost eat chocolate for an hour also after my walking time because it makes me feel relaxed and chill out.

句中“made”应与现在时态保持一致，改为“makes”。

× I eat chocolate like twice or once a day but since everyone asked me to maintain my body health so I try to eat the chocolate like once a week.

✓ I eat chocolate like once or twice a day but since everyone asked me to maintain my body health, I try to eat chocolate like once a week.

“twice or once”顺序不自然，应为“once or twice”。“the chocolate”不需要定冠词。

× I eat chocolate like twice or once a day but since everyone asked me to maintain my body health so I try to eat the chocolate like once a week.

✓ I eat chocolate like once or twice a day but since everyone has asked me to maintain my body health, I try to eat chocolate like once a week.

“asked”应使用现在完成时“has asked”，表示从过去到现在的动作。

× Not at all, because when I was a kid, my mother very strict to me and my siblings, she did not allow us to eat the chocolate when we were young.

✓ Not at all, because when I was a kid, my mother was very strict with me and my siblings; she did not allow us to eat chocolate when we were young.

缺少动词“was”，且“strict to”应为“strict with”。

× Not at all, because when I was a kid, my mother very strict to me and my siblings, she did not allow us to eat the chocolate when we were young.

✓ Not at all, because when I was a kid, my mother was very strict with me and my siblings; she did not allow us to eat chocolate when we were young.

“strict”后应接介词“with”，表示对某人严格。

× Because I think the chocolate is one of the brand could make people feel happier, especially, uh, its taste too, uh, too sweetie so.

✓ Because I think chocolate is one of the brands that could make people feel happier, especially its taste is too sweet.

“the chocolate”不需要定冠词，“brand”应为复数“brands”，且“too sweetie”应为“too sweet”。

× Because I think the chocolate is one of the brand could make people feel happier, especially, uh, its taste too, uh, too sweetie so.

✓ Because I think chocolate is one of the brands that could make people feel happier, especially its taste is too sweet.

“sweetie”是名词，形容词应为“sweet”。

× My favorite flavor of chocolate is the original flavor without include any flavor because I believe that the original flavor is the most classic one.

✓ My favorite flavor of chocolate is the original flavor without including any other flavor because I believe that the original flavor is the most classic one.

“without include”应改为“without including”，动词需用-ing形式。

× My favorite flavor of chocolate is the original flavor without include any flavor because I believe that the original flavor is the most classic one.

✓ My favorite flavor of chocolate is the original flavor without including any other flavor because I believe that the original flavor is the most classic one.

“include”应改为动名词形式“including”，表示“没有包含”。

× Yes I do because I think that everyone loves chocolate. I can't believe someone who doesn't love the chocolate because chocolate is really make us to feel happier in the world.

✓ Yes, I do because I think that everyone loves chocolate. I can't believe someone who doesn't love chocolate because chocolate really makes us feel happier in the world.

“the chocolate”不需要定冠词，“make”应为第三人称单数“makes”，“to feel”中“to”应去掉。