Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more coherent and avoid incomplete sentences. Use clear and complete sentences to express your ideas naturally and effectively. For example, start with a clear topic sentence and then explain why you like chocolate, using linking words to connect your ideas.

例: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it helps me relax when I feel stressed. For me, chocolate is a comfort food that eases my worries and makes me feel better.

提案: Avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically. Also, try to explain your points clearly and use correct grammar.

例: I usually eat chocolate at least once a month. Although it can improve my mood, I know it has disadvantages, such as causing a sugar high.

提案: Make sure your sentences are complete and clear. Use proper pronouns and avoid hesitations. Start with a direct answer and then add supporting details with linking words.

例: Yes, I often ate chocolate when I was a kid. I enjoyed it so much that even now, as an adult, I still like to eat chocolate whenever I have the chance.

提案: Avoid fragmented sentences and unclear expressions. Provide specific reasons and use linking words to make your answer coherent and logical.

例: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because many people enjoy its sweet taste. Also, some studies show that chocolate can improve mood, which makes it appealing to many.

提案: Use complete sentences and explain your preferences clearly. Connect your ideas with linking words and provide reasons for your choice.

例: My favourite flavour of chocolate is plain chocolate sprinkled with peanuts. I enjoy it the most because the peanuts add a nice crunch and complement the smooth taste of the chocolate.

提案: Try to avoid hesitations and incomplete sentences. Give a clear opinion and explain it with specific reasons using linking words.

例: Yes, I think chocolate is a good gift because most people like it. However, it may not be suitable for someone who has diabetes, so it's important to consider the person's health before giving chocolate.

× It's like my comfort food and chocolate for me. Is. This late? Is something that can ease my worries or? My history.

✓ It's like my comfort food and chocolate for me. It is something that can ease my worries or my history.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. The correction combines the fragments into a coherent sentence, improving clarity and sentence structure.

× I think. At least once once a month. Because although charlet scan is your stress or your mood, but it's also have some disadvantage.

✓ I think at least once a month because although chocolate can ease your stress or improve your mood, it also has some disadvantages.

The original sentence has repeated words and incorrect quantifiers. 'Once once' is redundant, and 'some disadvantage' should be 'some disadvantages' to match plural form. Also, 'charlet scan' is corrected to 'chocolate can' for clarity.

× Disadvantage is like it can make your sugar high.

✓ A disadvantage is that it can cause a sugar high.

The phrase 'make your sugar high' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'cause a sugar high'. Also, 'Disadvantage' should be preceded by an article 'A'.

× I think yes, as far as they could remember.

✓ I think yes, as far as I can remember.

The pronoun 'they' is incorrect here; it should be 'I' to refer to the speaker. Also, 'could remember' should be 'can remember' to match present tense.

× I enjoy eating in chocolate when I was a kid, that's why until now, even though I'm already. Adult if. If given a chance, that my my.

✓ I enjoyed eating chocolate when I was a kid; that's why even now, though I'm already an adult, if given a chance, I still eat it.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. The correction restructures the sentence for clarity and correct tense usage.

× I think chocolate is famous around the world. It's because. Almost. People out people. Almost it's not all, but I think almost people in enjoyed really enjoyed eating chocolate because some studies have shown that chocolate.

✓ I think chocolate is famous around the world because almost everyone enjoys eating it. Some studies have shown that chocolate...

The original sentence has unclear pronoun usage and fragmented phrases. The correction clarifies pronouns and sentence flow.

× I think it's. A plain chocolate. Sprinkled with peanuts. And that's what I enjoyed the most. Clean chocolate is somewhat. Up. Somewhat good to me because.

✓ I think it's plain chocolate sprinkled with peanuts, and that's what I enjoy the most. Plain chocolate is somewhat good to me because...

The original sentence has fragmented phrases and incorrect word choice ('Clean chocolate' should be 'Plain chocolate'). The correction improves sentence flow and adjective usage.

× Except if that someone has already a diabetes or. Uhm, yeah, Type 2 diabetes. So they tend to.

✓ Except if that someone already has diabetes, like Type 2 diabetes, so they tend to avoid it.

The original sentence lacks modal verb clarity and is incomplete. The correction completes the sentence and uses proper modal verb structure.