Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to give a clear and direct answer first, then support it with specific reasons. Avoid redundancy and unclear phrases. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it tastes delicious and gives me energy. For example, I often eat chocolate while studying to help me concentrate better.

提案: Provide a complete sentence with correct grammar and add a reason or example to support your answer. Use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

例: I eat chocolate every day because I really enjoy its sweet taste and it helps me feel refreshed.

提案: Answer directly and clearly. Avoid unclear or incomplete sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific details.

例: Yes, I often ate chocolate when I was a kid, and I still enjoy it now because it is tasty and comforting.

提案: Use correct grammar and clearer expressions. Provide specific reasons and use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes delicious and provides energy, so many people enjoy eating it regularly.

提案: Combine your sentences to avoid choppiness and explain your preference clearly. Use linking words to make your answer more natural.

例: My favourite flavour of chocolate is orange because it has a tangy taste, which I find more pleasant than other flavours.

提案: Make sure your answer is clear and free from errors. Give specific reasons and use linking words to explain your opinion logically.

例: Yes, I think chocolate is a good gift because most people like its sweet taste, and it shows kindness when you give it to others.

× Yes, I do like to eat chocolates to 'cause they are very tasty and I'm fond of the suites.

✓ Yes, I do like to eat chocolate because it is very tasty and I'm fond of sweets.

The word 'chocolates' is countable but here it is used in a general sense, so 'chocolate' (uncountable) is correct. 'Suites' is a misspelling of 'sweets'. Also, 'to 'cause' is informal and incorrect; 'because' is the correct conjunction.

× It makes me feel energetic and whenever I study I eat chocolate so it.

✓ It makes me feel energetic, and whenever I study, I eat chocolate.

The sentence is awkward and incomplete. 'So it' is unnecessary and incorrect. Adding a comma improves clarity.

× It gives my mind more tours.

✓ It gives my mind more energy.

'Tours' is incorrect here; likely a mispronunciation or misspelling of 'power' or 'energy'. 'Energy' fits the context better.

× I'll eat chocolate daily be 'cause I like them so much.

✓ I eat chocolate daily because I like it so much.

'I'll eat' (future tense) is incorrect for habitual action; present simple 'I eat' is appropriate. 'Them' refers to plural, but 'chocolate' is uncountable here, so 'it' is correct.

× Hey, guess I did eat chocolate off and when I was a kid and I am.

✓ Hey, I guess I did eat chocolate often when I was a kid, and I still do.

'Off and' is incorrect; 'often' is the correct adverb. The sentence is incomplete and unclear; 'I still do' clarifies continuation.

× Also like to talk late till now.

✓ I also like to stay up late even now.

'Talk late' is incorrect; 'stay up late' is the correct phrase. 'Till now' is better expressed as 'even now'.

× From my perspective, chocolates gives you energy and their taste too are addictive, so people around the world like with them.

✓ From my perspective, chocolate gives you energy and its taste is addictive, so people around the world like it.

'Chocolates' (plural) with 'gives' (singular verb) is incorrect; 'chocolate' (singular) matches 'gives'. 'Their' should be 'its' for singular. 'Like with them' is incorrect; 'like it' is correct.

× My favorite flavor of chocolate is orange chocolate. It has a tangy flavor. And less weird than other chocolate.

✓ My favorite flavor of chocolate is orange chocolate. It has a tangy flavor and is less weird than other chocolates.

The sentence fragment 'And less weird than other chocolate' lacks a verb; adding 'is' corrects it. 'Other chocolate' should be plural 'other chocolates'.

× Yes, it's a good idea to use talk **** forgive too.

✓ Yes, it's a good idea to use chocolate as gifts too.

The phrase 'talk **** forgive' is unclear and incorrect; likely intended 'chocolate as gifts'. Correct pronouns and words improve clarity.

× Yeah, because everyone like stroke lerty due to its is good taste and if it's a good trait to give others.

✓ Yeah, because everyone likes chocolate due to its good taste, and it's a good gesture to give it to others.

'Everyone like' should be 'everyone likes' (subject-verb agreement). 'Stroke lerty' is incorrect; likely 'chocolate'. 'Its is' is incorrect; should be 'its'. The sentence is restructured for clarity.