Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ слишком длинный и немного неструктурированный. Следует давать более чёткий и связный ответ, избегая лишних слов и повторов. Например, начните с прямого ответа, затем добавьте причину, используя связующие слова.

例: No, I don't like eating chocolate because it is too sweet for me. Instead, I prefer spicy or salty foods.

提案: Ответ неясен и содержит грамматические ошибки. Следует использовать правильные выражения времени и более чётко отвечать на вопрос, избегая неопределённости.

例: I eat chocolate about once a week.

提案: Ответ неструктурирован и содержит много пауз и неуверенности. Нужно давать прямой ответ с поддерживающими деталями, используя связующие слова для логичности.

例: I didn't often eat chocolate as a kid because I didn't like sweet food. However, I sometimes ate it at special events.

提案: Ответ неясен и содержит много пауз и неразборчивых слов. Следует подготовить чёткий и связный ответ с использованием подходящей лексики и связующих слов.

例: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes good and many people enjoy it as a treat.

提案: Ответ содержит повторения и нечеткие выражения. Следует говорить более уверенно и использовать правильные слова, а также связующие слова для плавности.

例: My favorite flavor is bitter chocolate because I don't like very sweet chocolate.

提案: Ответ содержит паузы и нечеткие слова. Следует говорить более уверенно, использовать связующие слова и структурировать ответ логично.

例: Yes, of course. Chocolates are a symbol of love and friendship. They are also affordable, so anyone can buy them as gifts.

× I don't really like to eat. Sweets and also chocolates because it's too sweet for me and I prefer spicy or salt food.

✓ I don't really like eating sweets and also chocolates because they're too sweet for me and I prefer spicy or salty food.

The verb 'like' is commonly followed by the gerund form '-ing' when expressing preferences. Also, 'salt' should be 'salty' as it is an adjective describing food.

× Sweets and also chocolates because it's too sweet for me

✓ Sweets and also chocolates because they're too sweet for me

The subject 'sweets and chocolates' is plural, so the verb should be 'they are' contracted as 'they're' instead of 'it's' which is singular.

× I would say I eat chocolate by one of week. Maybe.

✓ I would say I eat chocolate once a week. Maybe.

The phrase 'by one of week' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'once a week' to indicate frequency.

× How I remember I'm no because. Uhm, how? I said I don't really like sweet food.

✓ As far as I remember, I don't because, uhm, I said I don't really like sweet food.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Rephrasing improves clarity and sentence structure.

× But maybe when at some events or?

✓ But maybe at some events, or?

The preposition 'when' is unnecessary here; 'at some events' suffices to indicate the occasion.

× In my view, chocolates are popular. By is there they're UM. Uhm. Worldwide. Like chocolate? It's more like usually **** you *****.

✓ In my view, chocolates are popular worldwide.

The original sentence contains filler words and unclear phrases. Simplifying to a clear statement improves understanding.

× My favorite flavor I I think it's. It's a. Peter Chocolate because.

✓ My favorite flavor, I think, is bitter chocolate because...

'Peter' is a mispronunciation of 'bitter'. Also, sentence fragments are corrected to form a complete sentence.

× How I said I don't like really sweet sweet chocolate, so bitter chocolate is the best option for me.

✓ As I said, I don't really like sweet chocolate, so bitter chocolate is the best option for me.

Correcting word order and removing repetition improves sentence clarity.

× Yes, uh, of course. BIC AWS. Chocolates, it's like a symbol of love and the good friendship and how I said it's not expensive and. Everyone can buy it.

✓ Yes, of course. Chocolates are like a symbol of love and good friendship, and as I said, they're not expensive and everyone can buy them.

Correct pronoun usage and subject-verb agreement are applied. 'It's' changed to 'they're' to agree with plural 'chocolates', and 'it' to 'them'.