Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Жауабыңыз табиғи және түсінікті, бірақ кейбір грамматикалық қателер мен сөздерді дұрыс қолданбау байқалады. Мысалы, "relax it" орнына "relaxed" немесе "relaxing" қолдану керек. Сонымен қатар, сөйлемдерді қысқа әрі нақты етіп құрастыруға тырысыңыз.

例: Yes, I really enjoy eating chocolate because it makes me feel happy and relaxed. For instance, after a long and stressful day, I like to come home and eat some sweets to unwind.

提案: Жауабыңыз жақсы, бірақ "after awhile" орнына "after a while" деп жазу керек. Сондай-ақ, сөйлемдерді байланыстыру үшін "so" немесе "therefore" сияқты сөздерді қолдануға болады.

例: I used to eat chocolate every day, but after a while, I changed my eating habits, so now I try to eat it only once or twice a week.

提案: Жауабыңыз түсініксіз және грамматикалық қателер көп. "I got to the egg" деген тіркес мағынасыз. Сұраққа нақты жауап беріп, өткен шақты дұрыс қолданыңыз.

例: Yes, I used to eat a lot of chocolate when I was a child, but later I changed my eating habits to be healthier.

提案: Жауабыңыз қарапайым, бірақ "makes people to feel" деген тіркесті "makes people feel" деп түзету керек. Сонымен қатар, жауапты толықтырып, нақты себептерді қосыңыз.

例: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes sweet and can make people feel happy, especially when they are having a bad day.

提案: Жауабыңыз түсініксіз және грамматикалық қателер бар. "like consist of milk" деген тіркесті дұрыс құрастырыңыз. Қысқа әрі нақты жауап беруге тырысыңыз.

例: My favourite flavour is white chocolate because it contains milk and has a creamy taste.

提案: Жауабыңыз жақсы, бірақ "present people as a chocolate" деген тіркесті "give chocolate to people" деп өзгертіңіз. Сондай-ақ, сөйлемдерді байланыстыру үшін "however" сияқты сөздерді қолданыңыз.

例: Yes, I think it is good to give chocolate as a gift from time to time; however, it can be a problem if the person is allergic to chocolate.

× It makes me feel happy and relax it.

✓ It makes me feel happy and relaxed.

The verb 'relax' should be in the past participle form 'relaxed' to correctly describe the state caused by eating chocolate. Using 'relax' here is incorrect because it does not function as an adjective or past participle.

× if I have a really long day and stresses during the day,

✓ if I have a really long day and stress during the day,

The word 'stresses' is plural, but here it should be singular 'stress' to match the singular subject 'a really long day'. The phrase refers to stress experienced during the day, which is uncountable and singular in this context.

× I used to eat every day but after awhile I changed my food habit and I try to eat it once or twice a week.

✓ I used to eat it every day but after a while I changed my food habits and I try to eat it once or twice a week.

The phrase 'after awhile' should be 'after a while' (two words). 'Food habit' should be plural 'food habits' because it refers to general eating behaviors. Also, 'eat' should be followed by 'it' to specify chocolate. The tense 'try' is present tense and acceptable here as it refers to current habit.

× since childhood I eat a lot of, but after that I got to the egg and since then I started to change my food behavior.

✓ Since childhood I have eaten a lot, but after that I got to the egg and since then I started to change my food behavior.

The verb 'eat' should be in present perfect 'have eaten' to indicate an action continuing from the past to present. The phrase 'a lot of' is incomplete and should be 'a lot'. The phrase 'got to the egg' is unclear but kept as is since it may be idiomatic or specific. 'Food behavior' is acceptable but 'eating habits' might be better.

× Maybe because it's really sweet and it makes people to feel happy if they have a bad time.

✓ Maybe because it's really sweet and it makes people feel happy if they have a bad time.

The verb 'makes' should be followed directly by the base form of the verb without 'to'. The phrase 'makes people to feel' is incorrect; it should be 'makes people feel'.

× I like a white chocolate like consist of milk I think.

✓ I like white chocolate that consists of milk, I think.

The article 'a' is unnecessary before 'white chocolate' because 'white chocolate' is an uncountable noun here. The phrase 'like consist of milk' is incorrect; it should be 'that consists of milk'. Also, a comma before 'I think' improves clarity.

× I think yes, from time to time it is good to present people as a chocolate, but if a person is allergic to chocolate, that is going to be a problem.

✓ I think yes, from time to time it is good to present chocolate to people, but if a person is allergic to chocolate, that is going to be a problem.

The phrase 'present people as a chocolate' is incorrect. The correct prepositional phrase is 'present chocolate to people' to indicate giving chocolate as a gift to people.