Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant but has grammatical errors and some unclear phrases. Try to use correct sentence structures and clearer vocabulary. Also, avoid redundancy by combining ideas more smoothly.

例: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it tastes really delicious. There are many varieties, such as dark and white chocolate, each with its own unique flavor. I especially like dark chocolate because it is rich and not too sweet.

提案: Your answer is clear and direct but could be improved by adding linking words and a bit more detail to make it more natural and engaging.

例: I often eat chocolate every day after my meals as a small treat because it helps me relax.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains irrelevant words. Please focus on directly answering the question with clear and relevant information, using proper grammar.

例: Yes, I used to eat chocolate every day after my meals as a small treat because it helped me relax.

提案: Your answer is too short and contains unnecessary words. Try to give a more detailed and coherent response using linking words and correct grammar.

例: Chocolate is popular around the world because it tastes delicious and appeals to people of all ages.

提案: Your answer is relevant but has minor grammatical errors and could be more natural by using better vocabulary and linking words.

例: I like to eat dark chocolate because it has a slight bitterness and is rich in antioxidants, which makes it healthier than other types.

提案: Your answer has some unclear words and grammatical mistakes. Try to express your ideas clearly and use linking words to connect your points logically.

例: Yes, I think chocolates make excellent gifts because they are loved by people of all ages. Moreover, they come in many varieties, so recipients can easily choose their favourite type.

× Yes, I like eating chocolate becaused its taste really delicious.

✓ Yes, I like eating chocolate because its taste is really delicious.

The word 'becaused' is incorrect; the correct conjunction is 'because'. Also, the sentence lacks the verb 'is' after 'taste'. The correct sentence should use 'because' to show reason and include the verb 'is' to complete the predicate.

× There are many varieties such as we look dark and white droplets, each with its own unique flavor and especially like dark chocolate because it is rich and not too sweet.

✓ There are many varieties such as dark and white chocolates, each with its own unique flavor. I especially like dark chocolate because it is rich and not too sweet.

The phrase 'we look dark and white droplets' is incorrect and unclear. It should be 'dark and white chocolates'. Also, the sentence is a run-on and needs to be split for clarity. The pronoun 'I' is missing before 'especially like' to indicate the subject.

× I often eat chocolate every day after having a meal as a treat.

✓ I eat chocolate every day after having a meal as a treat.

The phrase 'often' and 'every day' together is redundant. 'Every day' already indicates frequency, so 'often' is unnecessary. Removing 'often' makes the sentence clearer and grammatically correct.

× I usually you tuber everyday. After my meals as a small treat because it helps me to relax.

✓ I usually eat chocolate every day after my meals as a small treat because it helps me to relax.

The phrase 'I usually you tuber everyday' is incorrect and unclear. It seems to be a mishearing or typo. The correct phrase is 'I usually eat chocolate every day'. Also, the second sentence is a fragment and should be combined with the first for clarity.

× Yes, Jordan, it is popular around the world because of its taste is very delicious.

✓ Yes, chocolate is popular around the world because its taste is very delicious.

The word 'Jordan' is out of context and likely a mistake. The phrase 'because of its taste is very delicious' is incorrect; it should be 'because its taste is very delicious'. The sentence structure needs correction for clarity and correctness.

× I like to eat dark flavored chocolate as it is slight bitterness and it is rich in antioxidants.

✓ I like to eat dark-flavored chocolate as it has a slight bitterness and is rich in antioxidants.

The phrase 'slight bitterness' needs an article 'a' and the verb 'has' to describe the chocolate. Also, 'dark flavored' should be hyphenated as 'dark-flavored' to form a compound adjective. The sentence is corrected for proper adjective and verb usage.

× Yes, I think joke let's make excellent gifts because they are widely loved by people of all ages and they are so delicious and come in many different varieties, so the recipients can easily choose their favorite type.

✓ Yes, I think chocolates make excellent gifts because they are widely loved by people of all ages, are delicious, and come in many different varieties, so the recipients can easily choose their favorite type.

The word 'joke' is incorrect and should be 'chocolates'. The phrase 'let's make' is incorrect in this context. The sentence is corrected to properly refer to chocolates as gifts and improve sentence flow.