Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer addresses the question but has grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to make your sentences clearer and more natural, for example, say "I don't like eating chocolate because it can cause insulin spikes, which may lead to diabetes and other health problems." Also, avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise.

例: I don't like eating chocolate because it can cause insulin spikes, which may lead to diabetes and other health problems.

提案: Your answer is understandable but can be improved by using complete sentences and linking words. For example, say "I don't eat chocolate often, but sometimes I have it when my family recommends it or when I am at a party with friends." This makes your answer more natural and coherent.

例: I don't eat chocolate often, but sometimes I have it when my family recommends it or when I am at a party with friends.

提案: Your answer is repetitive and has grammatical mistakes. Try to say, "As a kid, I used to eat chocolate every day because I liked it a lot." This is clearer and more natural. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and unnecessary repetition.

例: As a kid, I used to eat chocolate every day because I liked it a lot.

提案: Your answer has good ideas but needs clearer expression and correct vocabulary. For example, say "Chocolate is popular worldwide because it refreshes people's mood and makes them feel better. Many believe that eating chocolate uplifts their spirits." Use linking words like 'because' and avoid incorrect words like 'socket' and 'mode'.

例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it refreshes people's mood and makes them feel better. Many believe that eating chocolate uplifts their spirits.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains many errors. Try to say, "My favourite flavour is hazelnut chocolate because I like hazelnuts very much. I usually choose it when someone asks me." Keep your sentences simple and clear.

例: My favourite flavour is hazelnut chocolate because I like hazelnuts very much. I usually choose it when someone asks me.

提案: Your answer has good points but is hard to understand due to grammar and word choice errors. Try saying, "I think chocolate is a good gift because it is popular and considered fancy. Its sweet and crunchy texture makes it special." Use clear sentences and avoid unnecessary words.

例: I think chocolate is a good gift because it is popular and considered fancy. Its sweet and crunchy texture makes it special.

× No I don't like eating chocolates because I think by eating chocolates are insulin spike up and it can cause diabetes and many health issues.

✓ No, I don't like eating chocolate because I think eating chocolate causes insulin to spike and it can cause diabetes and many health issues.

The word 'chocolates' should be singular 'chocolate' when referring to the substance in general. Also, 'are insulin spike up' is incorrect; it should be 'causes insulin to spike' to correctly express the effect. Plural form is not appropriate here as 'chocolate' is an uncountable noun in this context.

× I don't really eat chocolates. Uh, sometimes. When my family recommend me or when I'm in party with my friends. Uh, yeah.

✓ I don't really eat chocolate. Uh, sometimes. When my family recommends me or when I'm at a party with my friends. Uh, yeah.

Again, 'chocolates' should be 'chocolate' as an uncountable noun. Also, 'recommend me' should be 'recommends me' (third person singular) and 'in party' should be 'at a party' (correct preposition and article).

× As a kid, I often eat chocolate very much because whenever care, uh, I like chocolate very much and I used to eat chocolate every day. So yeah, I often eat chocolates when I was OK.

✓ As a kid, I often ate chocolate because I liked chocolate very much and I used to eat chocolate every day. So yeah, I often ate chocolate when I was young.

The verb tense should be past tense 'ate' and 'liked' to match the past time frame. 'Eat' and 'like' are present tense and incorrect here. Also, 'when I was OK' is unclear; 'when I was young' is more appropriate. 'Chocolates' should be 'chocolate' as uncountable noun.

× I think chocolates are popular around the world becaused by eating chocolates are mood get refreshed and with feels better. So people also think that by eating socket they can feel better and they can uplift their mode. So yeah that's why the chocolate are famous around the world.

✓ I think chocolate is popular around the world because eating chocolate refreshes the mood and makes people feel better. So people also think that by eating chocolate they can feel better and uplift their mood. So yeah, that's why chocolate is famous around the world.

'Chocolates' should be 'chocolate' as uncountable noun. 'Are mood get refreshed' is incorrect; it should be 'refreshes the mood' (singular verb). 'Socket' is likely a mispronunciation or error for 'chocolate'. 'Mode' should be 'mood'. 'Chocolate are' should be 'chocolate is' for singular subject-verb agreement.

× I personally like a he's a little bit of it because I like Hazel nuts so much and I prefer to whenever someone asked to me. And I also see them to eat isn't?

✓ I personally like it a little bit because I like hazelnuts so much and I prefer it whenever someone offers it to me. And I also like to see them eat it, isn't it?

The sentence has incorrect pronoun usage: 'a he's a little bit of it' is unclear and corrected to 'like it a little bit'. 'Hazel nuts' should be 'hazelnuts' as one word. 'Prefer to whenever someone asked to me' is incorrect; corrected to 'prefer it whenever someone offers it to me'. 'See them to eat isn't?' is corrected to 'like to see them eat it, isn't it?' for clarity and correct pronoun use.

× I do think it is a good option to get others as a gift because chocolates are one of the most popular and fancy gives 1 can ever have an one can ever give to another person an. Yeah, it's a combination of sweet and crunchy texture magically work.

✓ I do think it is a good option to give others as a gift because chocolate is one of the most popular and fancy gifts one can ever have and one can ever give to another person. Yeah, it's a combination of sweet and crunchy textures that magically work.

'Get others as a gift' should be 'give others as a gift'. 'Chocolates are' should be 'chocolate is' as uncountable noun. 'Gives' should be 'gifts'. '1' and 'an' are incorrect and replaced with 'one'. 'Texture' should be plural 'textures' to match 'sweet and crunchy'. The sentence is corrected for clarity and grammar.