Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a direct response with clear reasons, avoid irrelevant details, and keep it concise within 5 sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it tastes sweet and enjoyable. However, I avoid eating it too often since it can harm my teeth. Therefore, I usually eat chocolate only on special occasions.

提案: Your answer is understandable but can be improved by removing filler words like 'uh' and making the sentence more natural. Also, avoid repeating 'a chocolate' unnecessarily.

例: I don't eat chocolate very often, but I usually have it about twice a month.

提案: Your answer is confusing and lacks clarity. Directly answer the question with a clear statement about your childhood habits, and use linking words to connect ideas.

例: I don't clearly remember how often I ate chocolate as a child, but I think I ate it occasionally. Nowadays, I eat chocolate about twice a month.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains incorrect words. Use correct vocabulary and provide specific reasons why chocolate is popular, linking your ideas coherently.

例: In my opinion, chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes delicious and can be enjoyed by people of all ages. Additionally, it is often given as a gift, which adds to its popularity.

提案: Your answer is understandable but can be improved by combining sentences and using more natural expressions. Avoid repeating words unnecessarily.

例: My favourite chocolate flavour is milky because it tastes very delicious. I especially enjoy eating chocolates with a creamy texture.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains irrelevant words. Provide a clear opinion with reasons why chocolate makes a good gift, and use linking words to connect your ideas.

例: In my opinion, chocolates are good gifts because they are delicious and suitable for many occasions. Giving chocolates can express positive feelings without offending anyone.

× Oh yes, I like chocolates are usually eat.

✓ Oh yes, I like chocolates and usually eat them.

The original sentence incorrectly combines 'I like chocolates' with 'are usually eat', which is grammatically incorrect. The phrase 'are usually eat' is wrong because 'eat' should be in the present participle form 'eaten' if passive voice is intended, but here active voice is better. Also, 'chocolates' as plural needs a proper verb and object. Correcting to 'I like chocolates and usually eat them' fixes the plural usage and verb agreement.

× Kit Kat daddy work at Eccetera but sometimes chocolates are harmful for my teeth, so I.

✓ My dad works at Eccetera, but sometimes chocolates are harmful to my teeth, so I don't eat them often.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'Kit Kat daddy work at Eccetera' is incorrect; it should be 'My dad works at Eccetera'. Also, 'harmful for my teeth' should be 'harmful to my teeth'. The sentence ends abruptly with 'so I.' which is incomplete. The correction provides a complete, grammatically correct sentence.

× I do not eat a chocolate often.

✓ I do not eat chocolate often.

'Chocolate' is an uncountable noun here, so the article 'a' is incorrect. Removing 'a' makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× I usually eat a chocolate twice a month.

✓ I usually eat chocolate twice a month.

Again, 'chocolate' is uncountable, so 'a chocolate' is incorrect. Removing 'a' corrects the sentence.

× I don't have a short memory, so that season I don't remember.

✓ I don't have a short memory, but I don't remember that season.

The phrase 'so that season I don't remember' is awkward and unclear. Using 'but' instead of 'so' and rearranging the sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I eat, I eat chocolates in my childhood.

✓ I ate chocolates in my childhood.

The verb tense should be past tense 'ate' to match 'in my childhood'. Also, repeating 'I eat' is incorrect. Correcting to 'I ate chocolates in my childhood' fixes tense and redundancy.

× But nowadays I eat chocolates. Twice a month.

✓ But nowadays, I eat chocolates twice a month.

The sentence fragment 'Twice a month.' should be combined with the previous sentence for correct structure.

× In my opinion, in my nation and worldwide, choppers were very popular, but 'cause this is very delicious.

✓ In my opinion, in my nation and worldwide, chocolates are very popular because they are very delicious.

'Choppers' is likely a mispronunciation or typo for 'chocolates'. Also, 'were' should be 'are' to indicate current popularity. 'Cause' should be 'because' for formal speech. The sentence is corrected accordingly.

× And they are.

✓ They are popular everywhere.

The sentence 'And they are.' is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'popular everywhere' completes the thought.

× Milky flavor is my favorite chocolate flavor.

✓ The milky flavor is my favorite chocolate flavor.

Adding the definite article 'The' before 'milky flavor' is necessary to specify the flavor.

× Because this is very delicious and I prefer to feed Milky flavored chocolates.

✓ Because it is very delicious and I prefer to eat milky flavored chocolates.

'This' should be 'it' referring to the flavor. 'Feed' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'eat' when referring to consuming food.

× In my perspective, chocolates are good gift for.

✓ In my perspective, chocolates are a good gift for others.

The phrase 'good gift for' is incomplete; adding 'a' before 'good gift' and 'others' completes the sentence.

× Kitten games becaused this is delicious.

✓ Because they are delicious, chocolates make good gifts.

'Kitten games becaused this is delicious' is nonsensical. It seems to be a mishearing or typo. The corrected sentence conveys the intended meaning clearly.

× And they are feelings, not hurt anybody.

✓ They convey feelings and do not hurt anybody.

The original sentence is grammatically incorrect and unclear. The correction clarifies the meaning and corrects grammar.