Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and structured by starting with a clear topic sentence, then adding specific reasons with linking words. Avoid redundancy and minor grammar errors like 'specially' instead of 'especially'.

例: Yes, I really enjoy eating chocolate, especially dark chocolate. I find it helps relieve my period cramps, which makes it even more appealing to me.

提案: Make sure to use correct sentence structure and grammar, for example, 'I eat chocolate daily'. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and avoid repetition.

例: I eat chocolate on a daily basis because I always carry some in my purse. Whenever I feel a bit down or stressed, I find that eating chocolate cheers me up.

提案: Use past tense consistently when talking about the past. Also, avoid awkward phrases like 'for me in myself'. Try to structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words.

例: Yes, I often ate chocolate when I was a kid because it was a sweet treat for me. For example, my father used to reward me with chocolates whenever I completed my homework.

提案: Avoid pronoun errors like 'his' instead of 'its'. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide more specific reasons. Also, try to be concise and natural in your explanation.

例: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because of its rich flavour and smooth texture. It melts in your mouth, which makes it very enjoyable to eat.

提案: Try to use correct verb tenses and smoother phrasing, for example, 'mint chocolate tastes like toothpaste to them'. Also, avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise and natural.

例: My favourite flavour is mint chocolate, which some of my friends find unusual because they say it tastes like toothpaste. However, I really enjoy the refreshing minty flavour.

提案: Avoid repetition like 'it it' and try to combine sentences using linking words for better flow. Also, be more concise and natural in your response.

例: I think chocolate can be a great gift since many people enjoy it. However, it depends on the person's preferences, so it's best to know if they like chocolate before giving it as a present.

× I do love eating chocolates because whenever I have my period it's really good for my period cramps and I specially love dark chocolate.

✓ I do love eating chocolate because whenever I have my period it's really good for my period cramps and I specially love dark chocolate.

The word 'chocolates' is plural, but here it refers to chocolate in general as a substance, so the singular uncountable noun 'chocolate' is more appropriate.

× I chocolate on a daily basis. I always carry it in my purse so whenever I'm feeling a little bit down or I am stressed, I eat chocolate.

✓ I eat chocolate on a daily basis. I always carry it in my purse so whenever I'm feeling a little bit down or I am stressed, I eat chocolate.

The original sentence is missing the verb 'eat' which is necessary to form a complete sentence. Without the verb, the sentence is incomplete and ungrammatical.

× Yes, I often eat chocolate when I was a kid because it is a sweet treat for me in myself.

✓ Yes, I often ate chocolate when I was a kid because it was a sweet treat for me.

The sentence mixes present tense 'eat' with past time reference 'when I was a kid'. The verb should be in past tense 'ate' to match the past time. Also, 'in myself' is unnecessary and incorrect here.

× Yes, I often eat chocolate when I was a kid because it is a sweet treat for me in myself.

✓ Yes, I often ate chocolate when I was a kid because it was a sweet treat for me.

The verb 'is' should be in past tense 'was' to agree with the past time frame 'when I was a kid'. Also, 'in myself' is incorrect and should be removed.

× Chocolate has that rich texture and whenever you eat chocolates it melts in your mouth.

✓ Chocolate has that rich texture and whenever you eat chocolate it melts in your mouth.

The plural 'chocolates' is incorrect here because 'chocolate' is being referred to as a substance, so the singular uncountable noun 'chocolate' is appropriate.

× So I think it is very popular around the world because of his texture and rich flavor as well.

✓ So I think it is very popular around the world because of its texture and rich flavor as well.

The pronoun 'his' is incorrect when referring to 'chocolate', which is an inanimate object. The correct possessive pronoun is 'its'.

× A lot of my friends say that mint chocolate taste like the toothpaste before me.

✓ A lot of my friends say that mint chocolate tastes like toothpaste to me.

The verb 'taste' should be 'tastes' to agree with the singular subject 'mint chocolate'. Also, 'the toothpaste before me' is incorrect; it should be 'toothpaste to me' to express personal opinion.

× I really enjoyed that minty flavor, so it's my favorite.

✓ I really enjoy that minty flavor, so it's my favorite.

Since the speaker is expressing a current preference, the present tense 'enjoy' is more appropriate than the past tense 'enjoyed'.

× I think a lot of people enjoy eating chocolates so it it can be a very good gift to give to other people.

✓ I think a lot of people enjoy eating chocolate so it can be a very good gift to give to other people.

The plural 'chocolates' is incorrect here because 'chocolate' is being referred to as a substance or food in general, so the singular uncountable noun 'chocolate' is appropriate.

× I think a lot of people enjoy eating chocolates so it it can be a very good gift to give to other people.

✓ I think a lot of people enjoy eating chocolate, so it can be a very good gift to give to other people.

There is a repeated word 'it it' which is a typographical error and should be corrected to a single 'it'. Also, a comma before 'so' improves sentence clarity.