Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不够自然，且句子结构混乱。建议简化句子，使用正确的时态和词汇，避免重复和不连贯。

例: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it helps me relax and feel happy when I have free time.

提案: 回答中表达不清晰，语法和词汇使用错误较多。建议直接回答频率，并简洁说明原因，避免无意义的词汇。

例: I usually eat chocolate once or twice a week because eating too much can make me gain weight.

提案: 回答较为直接，但语法和词汇使用不准确。建议使用正确的时态和表达方式，增加细节使回答更丰富。

例: No, I didn't eat much chocolate as a child because my family didn't have enough money to buy it often.

提案: 回答内容混乱，表达不连贯，且有语法错误。建议理清思路，使用连贯的句子解释原因，避免无关内容。

例: I think chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes sweet and delicious, and the sugar in it can make people feel happy.

提案: 回答未能明确表达喜好，缺乏具体内容。建议提前准备相关词汇，直接回答问题并补充简单描述。

例: My favorite flavor of chocolate is dark chocolate because it has a rich and slightly bitter taste.

提案: 回答表达不够清晰，句子结构复杂且有语法错误。建议简化句子，明确表达观点并给出理由。

例: Yes, I think chocolate is a good gift because it is special and many people like it, even though it can be a bit expensive.

× Of course I like eat some chocolate when I was free 'cause I thought it chocolate is something vexation and can you know, like song stress and make me feel happy.

✓ Of course I like eating some chocolate when I am free because I think chocolate is something that relieves stress and makes me feel happy.

动词like后面应接动名词形式，不能直接用动词原形。这里应使用"like eating"而不是"like eat"。

× Of course I like eat some chocolate when I was free 'cause I thought it chocolate is something vexation and can you know, like song stress and make me feel happy.

✓ Of course I like eating some chocolate when I am free because I think chocolate is something that relieves stress and makes me feel happy.

句中时态不一致，描述现在的习惯应使用一般现在时，而不是过去时。

× I always eat chocolate after dinner, maybe one or two days once 'cause I thought it too much is make me fat and you know chocolate count. EMS, sound, sugar and some other materials.

✓ I always eat chocolate after dinner, maybe once every one or two days because I think eating too much makes me fat and you know chocolate contains fats, sugar and some other ingredients.

表达频率时应使用正确的量词和表达方式，如"once every one or two days"。另外，"count"应为"contains"，表示包含。

× I always eat chocolate after dinner, maybe one or two days once 'cause I thought it too much is make me fat and you know chocolate count. EMS, sound, sugar and some other materials.

✓ I always eat chocolate after dinner, maybe once every one or two days because I think eating too much makes me fat and you know chocolate contains fats, sugar and some other ingredients.

"one or two days once"的表达不正确，应使用"once every one or two days"。

× No, not really, 'cause when I was kid I often didn't have so many monies to offer me the chocolate. So yeah, I didn't eat some chocolate.

✓ No, not really, because when I was a kid I often didn't have much money to buy chocolate. So yeah, I didn't eat much chocolate.

"was kid"缺少冠词"a"，且"monies"用法不当，应该用不可数名词"money"。

× No, not really, 'cause when I was kid I often didn't have so many monies to offer me the chocolate. So yeah, I didn't eat some chocolate.

✓ No, not really, because when I was a kid I often didn't have much money to buy chocolate. So yeah, I didn't eat much chocolate.

money是不可数名词，不能用"many"，应使用"much"。同样，"some chocolate"在否定句中应改为"much chocolate"。

× In my opinion are chocolate contains a lot of sugar and I thought sugar make people happy.

✓ In my opinion, chocolate contains a lot of sugar and I think sugar makes people happy.

"chocolate"作为不可数名词，谓语动词用单数"contains"。"sugar make"主谓不一致，应为"sugar makes"。

× In my opinion are chocolate contains a lot of sugar and I thought sugar make people happy.

✓ In my opinion, chocolate contains a lot of sugar and I think sugar makes people happy.

表达观点时应使用一般现在时，"thought"应改为"think"。

× So chocolate because you taste like very delicious and. No. Very sweet.

✓ So chocolate tastes very delicious and sweet.

"you taste like"用法错误，应直接用"chocolate tastes"。

× So I thought it's good for people to eat because we fail nudity.

✓ So I think it's good for people to eat because it makes them feel happy.

"fail nudity"无意义，应改为表达让人开心的意思。

× OK, my favorite taste of chocolate is. You know how to say so. Uh. I forget how party.

✓ OK, my favorite flavor of chocolate is... I forget the name now.

句子结构混乱，应简化表达，避免无意义的插入语。

× Absolutely, yes, I thought 'cause you know chocolate in sometimes expensive and cause it's contains sugar and contains some more other material make it expensive than others.

✓ Absolutely, yes, I think because chocolate is sometimes expensive and it contains sugar and some other ingredients that make it more expensive than others.

"thought"应为现在时"think"，"cause"应为"because"，且句子中缺少必要的连接词。

× Absolutely, yes, I thought 'cause you know chocolate in sometimes expensive and cause it's contains sugar and contains some more other material make it expensive than others.

✓ Absolutely, yes, I think because chocolate is sometimes expensive and it contains sugar and some other ingredients that make it more expensive than others.

"it's contains"错误，"it"后不应加"s"，应为"it contains"。

× So maybe not all, not all people can afford the money to buy it so it's OK to be a gift.

✓ So maybe not everyone can afford to buy it, so it's OK to give it as a gift.

"not all people"表达不自然，改为"not everyone"更合适。