Chocolate— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答不够连贯，存在语法和拼写错误，且内容重复。建议简洁明了地表达观点，避免无意义的重复，并注意语法和拼写的准确性。

例: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it reminds me of my childhood when I received it as a reward for good behavior. I also enjoy sharing chocolate with my family and friends, which makes it special.

提案: 回答较为清晰，但有语法错误和表达不够自然。建议使用正确的时态和连贯的句子结构，避免断句。

例: I usually eat chocolate about three times a week, especially when I feel tired from work or study. It helps me relieve stress and relax.

提案: 回答中存在重复和语法错误，表达不够完整。建议直接回答问题，使用完整句子，并具体描述感受。

例: Yes, I often ate chocolate as a kid, especially when my parents gave it to me as a reward. I loved the sweet flavor and enjoyed it very much.

提案: 回答内容较为零散，语法和表达不够准确。建议使用连贯的句子，明确表达观点，并举例说明。

例: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes delicious and can make people feel happy. It is often given as a gift on special occasions like Valentine's Day, symbolizing joy and love.

提案: 回答中有重复和语法错误，表达不够流畅。建议简洁表达喜好，并说明原因。

例: My favorite flavor is strawberry chocolate because I love strawberries, and the combination of strawberry and chocolate tastes delicious and exciting.

提案: 回答较为完整，但句子结构可以更自然流畅。建议使用更连贯的句子表达观点，并注意冠词和时态的使用。

例: Yes, I think chocolate is a good gift because it is suitable for occasions like visiting someone or Valentine's Day. It is affordable and usually makes the recipient happy.

× Fund off eating chocolates, especially when I was a kid getting chucked.

✓ Fond of eating chocolate, especially when I was a kid getting chucked.

这里'chocolates'应为不可数名词'chocolate'，表示巧克力这种食物的总称，复数形式不合适。

× I also have fond memories of sharing stitious checking with my families and friends.

✓ I also have fond memories of sharing delicious chocolate with my family and friends.

原句中'stitious checking'是拼写错误，应为'delicious chocolate'；'families'应为单数形式'family'，表示家庭成员的集合。

× Actually, I usually eat chocolate about 3 * a week, especially when I feel tired from work and study.

✓ Actually, I usually eat chocolate about 3 times a week, especially when I feel tired from work and study.

原句中缺少计数单位'times'，应补充完整。

× A chocolate bar just helped me get rid of the stress and made me really relax. And give me a comfort.

✓ A chocolate bar just helps me get rid of stress and makes me really relax and gives me comfort.

时态应与习惯动作一致，使用一般现在时；'give me a comfort'中'comfort'不可数，且不需要冠词'a'。

× Love chocolates when I was a kid, especially when I got it from my parents as a reward for my good behavior.

✓ I loved chocolate when I was a kid, especially when I got it from my parents as a reward for my good behavior.

'Love'应为过去式'loved'，与过去时间状语一致；'chocolates'应为不可数名词'chocolate'。

× It really caught my tongue and ideal of its sweet flavor.

✓ It really caught my tongue and I liked its sweet flavor.

'ideal'用词错误，应为'I liked'表示喜欢；时态应为过去式。

× Well, I think chocolate is popular around the world mainly because they taste delicious and can make people feel happy.

✓ Well, I think chocolate is popular around the world mainly because it tastes delicious and can make people feel happy.

'chocolate'为不可数名词，单数形式，谓语动词应使用单数形式'tastes'，代词用单数'it'。

× In addition, chocolates often given. In special days such as celebs Valentine's Day as a gift.

✓ In addition, chocolates are often given on special days such as Valentine's Day as gifts.

原句缺少谓语动词，且介词使用错误，应为'on special days'；'celebs'拼写错误，应去除。

× Anne, which makes the a symbol of joy and love.

✓ And this makes them a symbol of joy and love.

'Anne'拼写错误，应为'And'；'the a symbol'重复使用冠词，应改为'a symbol'；代词应与复数'chocolates'一致，使用'them'。

× Well, I just say strawberry chocolate is my favorite flavor 'cause 'cause I love strawberry in the 1st place and I really enjoy the combination of strawberry and chocolate switch really make me so enjoyable an excited.

✓ Well, I would say strawberry chocolate is my favorite flavor because I love strawberry in the first place and I really enjoy the combination of strawberry and chocolate which really makes me feel so happy and excited.

'just say'改为更合适的表达'would say'；'cause'应为'because'；'switch'拼写错误，应为'which'；谓语动词与主语不一致，'make'应为'makes'；'enjoyable an excited'用词错误，应为'happy and excited'。

× Yes, I think so. And I think it's really a decent gift when you want to visit someone or in a Valentine's Day, you can give it to your boyfriend or girlfriend and they would be happy.

✓ Yes, I think so. And I think it's really a decent gift when you want to visit someone or on Valentine's Day, you can give it to your boyfriend or girlfriend and they would be happy.

介词使用错误，'in a Valentine's Day'应为'on Valentine's Day'。

× And it's a gift that not so expensive and it's just appropriate.

✓ And it's a gift that is not so expensive and it's just appropriate.

缺少动词'is'，导致句子结构不完整。